Part 1
Giám khảo
When do you usually eat snacks now?
Thí sinh
I use sweet as snacks about twice a week. However, these day I have my healthy diet and I don't need a snack right now.
Giám khảo
Do you think it is healthy for you to eat snacks?
Thí sinh
To compare my healthy diet than before, I should say sometimes yes. I am an athlete and I do endurance run four time a week so I need to eat something sweet. However I don't like to eat it much more.
Giám khảo
Did you often eat snacks when you were young?
Thí sinh
Yes, and I believe everybody does because it's a way to show encouragement when a child do something nice, be polite, or even clean his room.
Giám khảo
What snacks do you like to eat?
Thí sinh
Yes, but I prefer healthier snack to stop improving adipose tissue on my body. For example, using honey instead of sugar or using dark chocolate about 92% instead of dark chocolate with 72%.
When do you usually eat snacks now?
Điểm: 62.0Gợi ý: Be more natural and concise: start with a direct topic sentence about frequency, then add one specific reason and tie it with a linking word. Correct grammar (use plural/singular, tense and articles) and avoid vague phrases like "I use sweet" or "right now" when describing usual habits.
Ví dụ: I usually have sweet snacks about twice a week. However, since I’m following a healthier diet these days, I rarely need snacks between meals.
Do you think it is healthy for you to eat snacks?
Điểm: 68.0Gợi ý: Lead with a clear position, then give two specific reasons using linking words (for example, because, although). Fix grammar (comparisons, plurals) and use precise vocabulary (e.g., "carbohydrate-rich snacks"). Avoid redundancy like "I don't like to eat it much more."
Ví dụ: Sometimes it is healthy for me to snack because I train for endurance running four times a week, so I need quick carbohydrates. However, I try to limit sugary snacks and prefer small portions or fruit instead.
Did you often eat snacks when you were young?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: Answer directly and then give a specific explanation with clear grammar and linking words. Use correct verb forms and provide a couple of concrete examples rather than general statements like "everybody."
Ví dụ: Yes, I snacked often as a child. For instance, my parents rewarded me with biscuits when I finished my homework or behaved well, which made snacking a regular habit.
What snacks do you like to eat?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: Start with a clear topic sentence naming the snacks you prefer, then give specific reasons and examples. Use natural phrasing (e.g., "reduce body fat" instead of "improving adipose tissue") and correct comparative language. Keep it concise and avoid awkward percent details unless necessary.
Ví dụ: I prefer healthier snacks, such as fruit with a drizzle of honey or a small square of 70–90% dark chocolate. I choose these options to reduce sugar intake and help control body fat.
× I use sweet as snacks about twice a week.
✓ I eat sweets as snacks about twice a week.
The verb 'use' is incorrect; 'eat' is the appropriate verb for consuming food. Also 'sweet' should be plural 'sweets' when referring to snack items. Use 'sweets' as a noun and 'eat' as the action. Suggestion: say 'I eat sweets' or 'I have sweets'.
× However, these day I have my healthy diet and I don't need a snack right now.
✓ However, these days I follow a healthy diet and I don't need a snack right now.
'These day' is incorrect; the plural 'these days' should be used to refer to the present period. 'Have my healthy diet' is awkward; use 'follow a healthy diet'. Ensure subject-verb agreement and natural collocation.
× To compare my healthy diet than before, I should say sometimes yes.
✓ Compared with my diet before, I would sometimes say yes.
The original mixes comparative forms incorrectly. Use 'Compared with' or 'Compared to' to introduce the comparison. 'I should say sometimes yes' is unnatural; 'I would sometimes say yes' fits better. Keep tense and modal consistent.
× I am an athlete and I do endurance run four time a week so I need to eat something sweet.
✓ I am an athlete and I do endurance runs four times a week, so I need to eat something sweet.
'endurance run' should be plural 'endurance runs' to match frequency; 'time' should be plural 'times'. Ensure plural form for count nouns when indicating multiple occurrences.
× However I don't like to eat it much more.
✓ However, I don't like to eat it very often.
'much more' is incorrect in this context. Use 'very often' or 'much' with uncountable nouns; here 'eat it very often' expresses frequency. Also add a comma after 'However'.
× Yes, and I believe everybody does because it's a way to show encouragement when a child do something nice, be polite, or even clean his room.
✓ Yes, and I believe everybody did because it was a way to show encouragement when a child did something nice, was polite, or even cleaned his room.
The question asked about past habit 'when you were young', so use past tense. Change present 'does' to 'did' and 'do' to 'did'; adjust 'it's' to 'it was'. Ensure verb tense consistency.
× Yes, and I believe everybody does because it's a way to show encouragement when a child do something nice, be polite, or even clean his room.
✓ Yes, and I believe everybody did because it was a way to show encouragement when a child did something nice, was polite, or even cleaned their room.
In addition to tense changes, 'his room' assumes gender; use singular 'their' for gender-neutral language. Also make verbs agree with singular 'child' in past tense ('did', 'was', 'cleaned').
× Yes, but I prefer healthier snack to stop improving adipose tissue on my body.
✓ Yes, but I prefer healthier snacks to prevent gaining fat on my body.
'healthier snack' should be plural 'healthier snacks' to match general preference. 'to stop improving adipose tissue' is unnatural and incorrect; use 'to prevent gaining fat' or 'to reduce body fat'. Use appropriate collocations for body composition.
× For example, using honey instead of sugar or using dark chocolate about 92% instead of dark chocolate with 72%.
✓ For example, I use honey instead of sugar or dark chocolate with about 92% cocoa instead of dark chocolate with 72%.
Sentence fragments need a subject and consistent structure. 'Using' fragments should be recast as 'I use'. Also clarify '92%' refers to cocoa content; place 'about' before the percentage and use 'with' to indicate cocoa content. Ensure parallel structure in the alternatives.