Flowers— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise, avoid hesitation sounds, correct grammar (e.g. "flow flowers" -> "flowers", "take care them" -> "take care of them") and use one clear topic sentence followed by one supporting detail. Use linking words if adding details.

Ví dụ: Yes, I love flowers, especially roses. I have a small flower garden at home and I enjoy taking care of it because gardening relaxes me and the roses smell lovely.

Gợi ý: Remove hesitations, avoid repetition ("really enjoyed" and "really loved"), and use linking words to show connection (e.g. "so", "because"). Provide one clear example to support the main point.

Ví dụ: Yes, my grandmother loved growing flowers, and she inspired me to start gardening because she taught me how to plant and care for them in the evenings.

Gợi ý: Correct article and preposition errors ("the area I live" -> "the area where I live", "full with" -> "full of"). Avoid fragmented sentence at the end. Use one topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details linked with words like "especially" or "for example".

Ví dụ: Yes, the area where I live is full of flowers, especially in spring. For example, a small park nearby has many colourful beds, and when it's sunny I often walk there to enjoy the blooms.

Gợi ý: Avoid repetition ("different types and colorful different types of colorful"). Use past/present tense consistently. Finish the final thought. Keep within 1–3 sentences and use linking words such as "so" or "because" to explain reasons.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often photograph flowers; my phone gallery is full of colourful varieties. I take pictures because they help me relax and I can look back at them whenever I want.

Gợi ý: Improve clarity and grammar: use complete sentences and correct comparisons ("not as popular in Sri Lanka as in Australia"). Remove hesitations and finish the comparison with a clear example of when flowers are given. Use linking words like "however" or "compared to".

Ví dụ: Not really. Compared to Australia, sending flowers is less common in Sri Lanka; however, people do give flowers on special occasions such as weddings and religious festivals.

× I take care them quite well and enjoy seeing flowers.

✓ I take care of them quite well and enjoy seeing flowers.

The verb phrase 'take care' requires the preposition 'of' before its object. Omitting 'of' is incorrect. Use 'take care of them' to correctly link the verb to its object.

× I really love different kinds of flow flowers, especially roses.

✓ I really love different kinds of flowers, especially roses.

The word 'flow' is an incorrect extra fragment here and creates redundancy with 'flowers'. Remove the extra word to form the correct noun phrase 'different kinds of flowers'.

× as uh many other girls do.

✓ as many other girls do.

The filler 'uh' interrupts the clause and is unnecessary in written sentences. Removing it produces a clear comparative clause 'as many other girls do'.

× Yes, my grandmother really enjoyed growing flower plants and I believe she really loved flowers.

✓ Yes, my grandmother really enjoyed growing flowering plants and I believe she loved flowers.

The sentence mixes simple past correctly but 'flower plants' is nonstandard. Use 'flowering plants' or 'flower plants' consistently. Also 'really' repeated is redundant; streamline to improve clarity.

× Uh, even she was the one who inspired me to grow flower plants.

✓ She was the one who inspired me to grow flowering plants.

Remove the filler 'Uh, even' which is unnecessary. Use 'flowering plants' as a common collocation for plants that produce flowers.

× And I still remember how I, uh, worked with my grandmother at her garden in the evenings.

✓ I still remember how I worked with my grandmother in her garden in the evenings.

Remove the filler 'uh' and use the preposition 'in her garden' rather than 'at her garden'. The past tense 'remember ... worked' is appropriate.

× My the area I live is full with different kinds of flowers, specially in the spring.

✓ The area where I live is full of different kinds of flowers, especially in the spring.

Replace 'My the area I live' with 'The area where I live' for correct structure. Use 'full of' not 'full with'. Correct spelling 'especially'.

× There are lots of different colourful flowers blooming in my surrounding.

✓ There are lots of different colourful flowers blooming around me.

'In my surrounding' is awkward and not idiomatic. Use 'around me' or 'in my surroundings' for clearer expression.

× Uh, there's a small park nearby. I in the when it's sunny I always love walking there and seeing different.

✓ There's a small park nearby. When it's sunny, I always love walking there and seeing different flowers.

Remove the filler 'Uh'. The fragment 'I in the when it's sunny' is ungrammatical; reorder to 'When it's sunny, I always love walking there'. Complete the sentence by specifying 'different flowers'.

× My gallery is full of different types and colorful different types of colorful flowers.

✓ My gallery is full of different types of colorful flowers.

The original repeats phrases and has incorrect ordering. Use 'different types of colorful flowers' as a concise, grammatical noun phrase.

× And even when I saw something beautiful, I always like to take a picture and store it in my phone so I can go and watch those things later.

✓ And whenever I see something beautiful, I like to take a picture and store it on my phone so I can look at those later.

Mixing past 'saw' with habitual 'always like' is inconsistent. Use present simple 'see' and 'like' for habitual actions. Use 'on my phone' (not 'in') and 'look at those later' is more natural than 'go and watch those things later'.

× Uh, it makes me relaxed and I really enjoy how, umm.

✓ It relaxes me, and I really enjoy looking at them.

'Makes me relaxed' is acceptable but 'It relaxes me' is more natural. Complete the incomplete thought 'I really enjoy how, umm.' by specifying the action 'looking at them' and remove fillers.

× Not much. It's not quite popular in Sri Lanka as in uh, here Australia, people buying and decorating their houses with flowers, especially, uh, people like to gift flowers, uh, for their special ones in on uh, especially.

✓ Not really. It's not as common in Sri Lanka as it is here in Australia. People here buy and decorate their houses with flowers, and they often give flowers as gifts to special people.

The original has many fillers and incorrect structures. Use comparative structure 'not as common in Sri Lanka as it is here in Australia'. Change 'people buying' to 'people buy', and 'gift flowers for their special ones' to 'give flowers as gifts to special people'. Remove unnecessary filler words and correct prepositions.