Flowers— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and avoid repetition (e.g., "aroma" and "scent" mean the same). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with brief examples. Use linking words to connect ideas.

Ví dụ: Yes, I do. I enjoy flowers for their pleasant fragrance and because they brighten up a room. For example, I keep a small vase of jasmine by my desk which helps me feel calmer while I study.

Gợi ý: Avoid absolute statements that are unlikely to be true. Respond directly with a topic sentence about someone you know, then add a specific example. Keep it brief and coherent using linking words.

Ví dụ: Yes, several of my friends love flowers. For instance, my neighbor grows roses and often invites us to admire her garden, which shows how much she enjoys gardening.

Gợi ý: Be direct about the general situation first, then give one concrete detail. Avoid repeating location unnecessarily. Use linking words to connect the owner’s gardening to the local environment.

Ví dụ: Yes, there are quite a few flowers near my home. For example, my landlord maintains a small garden with tulips, roses and lilies, which makes the area look very attractive.

Gợi ý: Good content and detail. Make answers more concise and avoid redundancy (e.g., 'absolutely yes' + 'I'm so fascinated'). Use a linking phrase to give a specific frequency or example.

Ví dụ: Yes, I do. I'm fascinated by tulips and roses, so I often stop to photograph them when I walk in the park; in fact, many of my phone photos are of flowers.

Gợi ý: Be careful with word choice ('flourish' is incorrect here). Answer directly, then give two clear occasions with a brief linking phrase. Use precise vocabulary like 'bouquet' or 'flowers as a token of love'.

Ví dụ: Yes, people often give flowers as gifts. For example, they bring bouquets for birthdays and sometimes present flowers at the airport to welcome close family members.

× I love flowers because I love the aroma and the scent of the beautiful flowers and I think that having flowers in our room is something that can improve the quality of air.

✓ I love flowers because I love the aroma and scent of beautiful flowers, and I think that having flowers in our room can improve the quality of the air.

Use of 'the' before 'beautiful flowers' is unnecessary when speaking generally; 'the quality of air' requires the definite article 'the'. Also remove redundant 'the' before 'aroma'/'scent' and simplify wording for clarity.

× Well, I don't really think there will be a person in the entire world who doesn't like flowers.

✓ Well, I don't really think there is a person in the entire world who doesn't like flowers.

Using 'will be' here incorrectly expresses future; the general statement about people should use present tense 'is'. This fits general truth/context.

× Whenever I talk about the topic of flowers or about a specific flower with any of my friends or anyone I personally know, they always say that they love to have flowers in the garden or.

✓ Whenever I talk about flowers or a specific flower with my friends or anyone I know personally, they always say they love having flowers in the garden.

Original sentence is awkward and ends abruptly with 'or.' Simplify 'talk about the topic of flowers' to 'talk about flowers'; change 'love to have flowers' to 'love having flowers' for natural phrasing; remove redundant words and fix word order for clarity.

× I live in Brampton and I live in a basement.

✓ I live in Brampton and in a basement.

Repeating 'I live' is redundant. Combine clauses to avoid repetition. Alternatively, 'I live in Brampton in a basement' is also acceptable.

× Well my basement owner loves flowers as she has different tulips and roses and lilies in her garden and she has a beautiful lawn so I think the environment around me is really pretty.

✓ Well, my landlord loves flowers; she has tulips, roses and lilies in her garden and a beautiful lawn, so I think the area around me is really pretty.

Use 'landlord' instead of 'basement owner' for natural phrasing. Use commas and a semicolon to separate ideas; list items with commas; 'environment around me' is awkward—'area around me' is more natural.

× I'm so fascinated with collecting pictures of different set of flowers, specially tulips and roses, that whenever I see a flower when I'm walking by, I don't forget to take a picture.

✓ I'm so fascinated with collecting pictures of different sets of flowers, especially tulips and roses, that whenever I see a flower while I'm walking by, I don't forget to take a picture.

Use plural 'sets' because 'different set' is incorrect. 'Especially' spelling corrected. Use 'while' rather than 'when' for the background action and keep gerund structure consistent.

× And that's the reason half of my storage of my phone is filled with pictures of nature.

✓ That's why half of my phone's storage is filled with pictures of nature.

Simplify and correct possessive: 'phone's storage' is natural; 'that's why' is more idiomatic than 'that's the reason.' Remove duplicate 'of my'.

× Definitely, people in my country send flowers to their loved ones on their birthdays or whenever they pick them up from the airport, specially the closer ones.

✓ Definitely, people in my country send flowers to their loved ones on birthdays or when they pick them up from the airport, especially close relatives.

Use 'on birthdays' (general) and 'when' instead of 'whenever' for specific events. 'Specially' corrected to 'especially'. 'The closer ones' is awkward; 'close relatives' or 'close family members' is clearer.

× When they meet their family member, they share flourish as a token of love with each other.

✓ When they meet a family member, they give flowers as a token of love to each other.

'Share flourish' is incorrect word choice; should be 'give flowers.' Use 'a family member' for singular or 'family members' for plural; 'to each other' clarifies reciprocal action.