Hometown— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more accurate and concise: correct factual wording (e.g. "0.5 million" or "half a million"), avoid repetition ("fantastic" used several times), and keep to 2–3 clear sentences. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details (location, landscape, notable features).

Ví dụ: I come from a small city in southern China called [City Name], with about half a million residents. It’s surrounded by mountains and a winding river, which gives it very scenic hiking spots and pleasant riverside parks.

Gợi ý: Avoid vague phrases and repetition; replace repeating words ("fantastic") with varied, specific descriptions. Give concrete examples of food or local customs, and use linking words (for example, moreover, because) to make the answer coherent. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: I like the friendly people in my hometown and the local cuisine, especially spicy rice noodles and steamed dumplings. Moreover, the scenic riverbanks are perfect for evening walks, which makes visiting very relaxing.

Gợi ý: Use correct tense and clearer timeline language. Avoid unnecessary details and correct grammar (use present perfect or past simple appropriately). State the period concisely and then add one brief clarifying detail if needed.

Ví dụ: I lived in my hometown for 18 years before moving to the capital to continue my studies. I have been living abroad for about 15 years since then.

Gợi ý: Clarify meaning and fix grammar: avoid incorrect phrases like "fantastic people for young people". Use a clear topic sentence and list 2–3 specific reasons (e.g. education, leisure activities, safety). Use linking words (not only... but also) correctly and keep it concise.

Ví dụ: Yes, I believe it’s a great place for young people because it has good schools, safe neighbourhoods, and plenty of outdoor activities. Not only is the environment relaxed, but there are also community centres that support young people’s hobbies and learning.

× My hometown is located in the southern part of China.

✓ My hometown is located in the southern part of China.

No article error; sentence is correct. (No change needed)

× It is a small city with a population of around point 5 million people and also it has a fantastic scenery because it is surrounded by mountains and has a river winding through that city.

✓ It is a small city with a population of around 0.5 million people, and it has fantastic scenery because it is surrounded by mountains and has a river winding through it.

Quantifier 'point 5 million' is nonstandard in writing; use '0.5 million' or 'half a million'. 'A fantastic scenery' is incorrect because 'scenery' is an uncountable noun and does not take 'a'. Also 'that city' is wordy; use 'it'. Suggestions: use numerals or words for numbers ('half a million') and drop the article before uncountable nouns.

× I'd say my hometown is one of the most beautiful towns you can find in China.

✓ I'd say my hometown is one of the most beautiful towns you can find in China.

Sentence is grammatically correct; adjective use is appropriate. (No change needed)

× I love a lot about my hometown, for example, the fantastic people, the delicious food and also the fantastic scenery that we can enjoy.

✓ I love many things about my hometown, for example the friendly people, the delicious food, and the beautiful scenery we can enjoy.

'I love a lot about' is ungrammatical; use 'I love many things about' or 'I love a lot about it'. 'Fantastic people' is awkward; 'friendly people' is more natural. Avoid repeating 'fantastic'; use varied adjectives. Also remove 'that' after 'scenery' for conciseness. Suggestions: use 'many things' and varied adjectives.

× And it is always delightful to spend some time at my hometown and I always feel happy when I can live in my hometown for a period of time now.

✓ It is always delightful to spend time in my hometown, and I feel happy when I can live there for a period of time.

Placement and redundancy of 'always' and 'now' make the sentence awkward. Use 'in my hometown' rather than 'at'. 'Live in my hometown for a period of time now' mixes tenses; change to 'live there for a period of time'. Suggestions: remove redundant 'always' and 'now', use 'in' for places, and replace repeated nouns with 'there'.

× I had lived in my hometown for over 18 years and then I went to the capital of China to pursue the annual study and afterwards I move forward to study and live abroad.

✓ I lived in my hometown for over 18 years, then I went to the capital of China to continue my studies, and afterwards I moved abroad to study and live.

Past perfect 'had lived' is unnecessary since events are presented in sequence; simple past 'lived' is correct. 'Pursue the annual study' is incorrect phrase; use 'continue my studies'. 'I move forward to study' mixes tenses and is ungrammatical; use past 'moved'. Suggestions: use simple past for past sequences and use standard phrases like 'continue my studies' and 'moved abroad'.

× So I have left my hometown for over 15 years so far.

✓ So I have been away from my hometown for over 15 years.

'I have left my hometown for over 15 years' is awkward; 'have been away from' is the correct present perfect continuous/state expression for duration. Also avoid repeating 'so'. Suggestions: use 'have been away from' or 'have lived away from' for duration up to now.

× Yes, I think My Hometown is a fantastic people for young people.

✓ Yes, I think my hometown is a fantastic place for young people.

'My Hometown' should not be capitalized mid-sentence. 'Fantastic people' is wrong because 'people' refers to persons, not a place; use 'place'. Suggestions: use lowercase unless proper noun and choose appropriate noun 'place'.

× Not only it has fantastic environment and relaxed ambience, but also it is extremely friendly for the people to grow up in their childhood.

✓ Not only does it have a fantastic environment and a relaxed ambience, but it is also extremely friendly for children to grow up in.

Use subject-auxiliary inversion with 'Not only' for correct structure: 'Not only does it have...'. 'Fantastic environment' needs an article 'a'. 'Friendly for the people to grow up in their childhood' is awkward; use 'friendly for children to grow up in'. Suggestions: use inversion after 'Not only', add articles before singular countable nouns, and use concise expressions like 'children' instead of 'the people'.

× I strongly recommend my people at My Hometown for the young people to.

✓ I strongly recommend my hometown to young people.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and wordy: 'recommend my people at My Hometown for the young people to' is unclear. Use direct object structure: 'recommend X to Y' — 'recommend my hometown to young people.' Suggestions: use correct verb pattern 'recommend something to someone' and avoid unnecessary words.