Work— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Make the response more natural and concise, correct word choice and grammar, and add a clear topic sentence followed by one specific detail. Avoid redundancy (e.g., 'daily work' and 'I love').

Ví dụ: I am currently working as a dentist at a clinic in Hariwar. I mainly treat patients with gum and tooth problems, and I enjoy advising them on proper oral hygiene to prevent future issues.

Gợi ý: Start with a direct topic sentence, use correct tense and articles, and be more specific about your role or the clinic. Use one linking phrase to add a supporting detail.

Ví dụ: I work at a well-established dental clinic in Dharwad, where I have been employed for the past two years. There I treat patients and run oral hygiene workshops to help them maintain healthy teeth.

Gợi ý: Give a clear opinion in the topic sentence and explain briefly why. Fix repetition and grammar (e.g., 'journal dentist' unclear). Mention a specific reason and use a linking word for coherence.

Ví dụ: It is an okay place to work, but not ideal, because the clinic is small and offers limited opportunities for advanced procedures. For that reason, I plan to apply for government positions to gain broader clinical experience.

Gợi ý: Answer directly and avoid repetition. Use correct tense and complete sentences; finish your thought. Provide one specific positive aspect and one brief example.

Ví dụ: Yes, I like working there because the team is friendly and supportive. For example, my colleagues often help me with complicated cases and we discuss treatment plans together.

Gợi ý: Be concise and confident; avoid fillers like 'uh' and unnecessary phrases. State your plan clearly and give a specific reason or expected outcome. Use one linking phrase to connect ideas.

Ví dụ: I plan to study dentistry in Canada to gain advanced clinical experience and theoretical knowledge. After studying there, I hope to return with improved skills to provide better patient care.

× Currently, I am working as a journal dentist at the dental clinic located in Hariwar.

✓ Currently, I am working as a general dentist at a dental clinic in Hariwar.

The sentence uses incorrect article and noun choice: 'journal dentist' is likely wrong (word choice, not in list, but treat article error for 'the dental clinic'). Use 'a dental clinic' because this is the first mention and not definite. Also 'in Hariwar' is more natural than 'located in Hariwar'. Replace 'journal' with 'general' if intended; otherwise choose the correct job title.

× I love my daily work as I advise people how to deal with gums and teeth.

✓ I love my daily work because I advise people on how to care for their gums and teeth.

The original uses 'as' awkwardly and 'deal with' is less natural; also 'advise people how' should be 'advise people on how'. Change to 'because' for clarity and 'care for their gums and teeth' is more idiomatic.

× As I explained earlier, I work at top dental clinic which is situated in Dharwad from last two years.

✓ As I explained earlier, I have worked at a top dental clinic in Dharwad for the last two years.

Use 'a top dental clinic' (indefinite article) and correct tense: 'have worked' with 'for the last two years' to indicate an action that began in the past and continues to present. 'Situated in Dharwad' is simplified to 'in Dharwad' and 'from last two years' corrected to 'for the last two years'.

× I love working there as I love suggesting people about oral hygiene and treating dental problems.

✓ I love working there because I enjoy advising people about oral hygiene and treating dental problems.

Replace 'suggesting people about' with 'advising people about' (correct verb choice) and use 'because I enjoy' to avoid repetition of 'I love'. This improves register and clarity.

× To be honest, I think this is a medium place for working as a journal dentist.

✓ To be honest, I think this is an average place to work as a general dentist.

'Medium place for working' is awkward; use 'an average place to work'. Also correct 'journal dentist' to 'general dentist' if intended. Present tense 'think' is fine; adjust wording for naturalness.

× In future, I will apply for government jobs so that I can more I can explore more clinical and practical skills.

✓ In the future, I will apply for government jobs so that I can explore more clinical and practical skills.

Remove duplicate 'I can' and include 'the' before 'future'. Future tense 'will apply' is correct; correct word order to 'so that I can explore more'.

× Definitely, I love being there as one of the staff member.

✓ Definitely, I love being there as one of the staff members.

Use plural 'staff members' after 'one of the' because it refers to one among many. Article 'the' optional; kept sentence natural.

× It is a small clinic situated in the Dharwad and I had been working there from last two years.

✓ It is a small clinic in Dharwad and I have been working there for the last two years.

Remove 'the' before 'Dharwad' (no article needed for place name) and use present perfect continuous 'have been working' with 'for the last two years' to indicate ongoing action. 'Situated in' simplified to 'in'.

× The staff is very friendly and.

✓ The staff is very friendly.

The original sentence ends with 'and.' which leaves a missing clause or verb. Remove the trailing 'and' to complete the sentence, or add another clause (for example, 'and helpful'). Ensure every sentence has a verb and completes its thought.

× As you know, uh I have applied for IELTS test so I'm planning to study in Canada for my future dental experience and theoretical knowledge.

✓ As you know, I have applied for the IELTS test, so I'm planning to study in Canada to gain future dental experience and theoretical knowledge.

Add article 'the' before 'IELTS test'. Remove filler 'uh'. Use 'to gain' instead of 'for' to express purpose more clearly. Present perfect 'have applied' and present continuous 'I'm planning' are appropriate; punctuation adjusted for clarity.