Work— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and avoid hesitations. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your current status, then briefly explain what you have been doing since graduation. Remove filler words (umm, you know) and correct word order (e.g., 'formally'). Use one or two supporting details only.

Ví dụ: I graduated about four years ago, and since then I haven't worked or studied at university full-time. Instead, I have been preparing for the IELTS exam by taking courses and practicing English daily.

Gợi ý: Answer directly first, then give concise background. Avoid repeating previous points and remove fillers. Use correct tense and article usage ('an assistant', 'the IELTS exam'). Keep to two or three sentences maximum.

Ví dụ: I don't work at the moment; I'm preparing for the IELTS exam. About three years ago I worked as an assistant at a medical equipment company, but I left that job after I graduated.

Gợi ý: Use a clear opinion sentence then support it with specific reasons and an example. Reduce hesitations and repetition. Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., 'supportive', 'communication skills', 'valuable experience'). Keep it to two sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, it was a great place to work because my aunt was there and she supported me. I gained valuable experience and improved my communication skills by interacting with colleagues and clients.

Gợi ý: Give a clear timeline and reason. Correct grammar (use past tense consistently: 'was difficult', 'I couldn't study well', 'I didn't like the place'). Avoid vague phrases like 'at first days'—use 'at first' or 'initially'. Limit to two sentences and use linking words like 'but' or 'however'.

Ví dụ: Initially I enjoyed working there, but after a short time my university studies became very demanding. I became exhausted and decided to leave because I couldn't balance work and study.

Gợi ý: Start with a clear statement of your career goal using correct job title ('medical engineer' or 'biomedical engineer'). Then give two specific details about location preferences and reasons. Avoid question-like word order ('where do I graduate')—use 'where I graduate'.

Ví dụ: I would like to work as a biomedical engineer in a hospital or a medical company. Ideally I hope to work in Australia or Canada depending on where I graduate, and I prefer Australia because I enjoy the lifestyle and hospital work opportunities there.

× I actually graduated about 3 or 4 years ago but after that I didn't even work or umm study in a university of formally but I started learning IELTS so I can be prepared for this exam.

✓ I actually graduated about three or four years ago, but after that I didn't work or formally study at a university; instead, I started preparing for the IELTS so I could be ready for this exam.

Incorrect past tense and word order: 'didn't even work or study in a university of formally' is ungrammatical and mixes forms. Use past simple consistently ('didn't work' and 'didn't formally study'), correct preposition 'at a university', and use 'could be ready' to match past time reference. Also spell out numbers for formality and improve flow by using a coordinating structure. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent (past), place adverbs before verbs ('formally study'), and use appropriate prepositions ('study at a university').

× As I mentioned before, I'm not working. I study for being prepared for IELTS exam. But I had worked three years ago in a medical equipment company and I was assistant there and I quit it after I graduated from, you know.

✓ As I mentioned before, I'm not working. I am studying to prepare for the IELTS exam. I worked three years ago at a medical equipment company where I was an assistant, and I left after I graduated.

Multiple sentence-structure and article issues: 'I study for being prepared for IELTS exam' is incorrect; use 'studying to prepare for the IELTS exam'. 'Had worked' is unnecessary past perfect; use simple past 'worked' since sequence is clear. Use preposition 'at a company' and article 'an assistant'. 'Quit it' is informal and unidiomatic; use 'left'. Remove filler 'you know' in formal response. Suggestion: Use 'studying to prepare', choose correct past tense (simple past) for events in chronological order, and use appropriate articles ('an assistant').

× It was a great, uh, place to work because my aunt worked there too and she was very supportive of me and I gained a lot of experiences because I didn't even know how to communicate with other people.

✓ It was a great place to work because my aunt worked there too; she was very supportive, and I gained a lot of experience because I didn't know how to communicate with other people.

'A lot of experiences' is incorrect in this context; 'experience' is an uncountable noun. 'Didn't even know' is informal; 'didn't know' suffices. Also remove filler 'uh' and streamline clauses. Use semicolon or commas to connect ideas correctly. Suggestion: Use 'a lot of experience' (uncountable), avoid unnecessary fillers, and maintain clear clause connections.

× At first days I loved working there, but after a few days when, uh, my studies at university was so difficult and I couldn't study well and focus on my lessons, I was exhausted and I didn't like the place I work.

✓ At first I loved working there, but after a few days, when my studies at university were very difficult and I couldn't study well or focus on my lessons, I became exhausted and I didn't like the place I worked.

Subject-verb agreement error: 'my studies ... was' should be 'my studies ... were' because 'studies' is plural. Also tense consistency: use past ('became exhausted', 'worked') to match narrative. 'At first days' is unidiomatic; use 'At first'. Replace 'I work' with 'I worked'. Suggestion: Ensure plural subjects take plural verbs, keep past tense consistent for past events, and use natural time expressions ('at first').

× I'd like to work as a professional by medical engineer in a hospital or in a company in Australia or Canada.

✓ I'd like to work as a professional medical engineer in a hospital or for a company in Australia or Canada.

Incorrect preposition and phrasing: 'by medical engineer' is wrong; use the noun phrase 'professional medical engineer'. Use 'for a company' rather than 'in a company' to indicate employment. Modal and desire 'I'd like' is fine. Suggestion: Use correct noun phrases for professions ('medical engineer') and proper prepositions ('for a company').

× It depends on where do I graduate in the future.

✓ It depends on where I graduate in the future.

Incorrect word order for an embedded question: 'where do I graduate' is a direct question form; in a statement you must use the subordinate clause order 'where I graduate'. Also consider using 'where I will graduate' if you want future emphasis, but simple present is acceptable for scheduled events. Suggestion: Use statement word order in subordinate clauses ('where I graduate') or use 'will graduate' for explicit future tense.

× I hope it happens in Australia because I love living there and I love working in a hospital.

✓ I hope it happens in Australia because I would love to live there and to work in a hospital.

Tense and modality: 'I love living there and I love working in a hospital' suggests present facts about a place where the speaker currently lives and works, which is inconsistent. Use 'would love' to express future desire. Alternatively, keep 'I hope it happens' and use 'I would love to live there and work in a hospital' for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'would love' to express desire about future possibilities and keep verbs parallel ('to live' and 'to work').