Work— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid redundancy and long phrases; correct tense and article usage (e.g., “an incredible field,” “I have been working”).

Ví dụ: I am a dietitian and have been working in this field for nearly ten years. I enjoy it because it provides a stable income and keeps me mentally active by constantly learning about nutrition science.

Gợi ý: Give a clear topic sentence and one or two specific details. Use correct sentence structure and avoid packing too many ideas without linking words. Correct plural/singular and adjective use (e.g., “quite spacious” → “quite spacious and well-equipped”).

Ví dụ: I run my own private clinic, and I am self-employed. It is next to my house, which makes it convenient to balance work and family life, and the clinic is spacious and well-equipped for patients.

Gợi ý: Clarify the subject (you may have meant ‘it’ or your clinic). Organize: state directly if it’s a good place, then support with specific reasons. Remove hesitations and incomplete sentences; use linking words like ‘because’ and ‘for example’.

Ví dụ: Yes, it is a great place to work because much of the area around my clinic is green and peaceful. For example, the garden has many plants and seating areas, so patients often feel relaxed and refreshed during appointments.

Gợi ý: Answer directly, then give one or two specific reasons. Use correct idioms and verb forms (e.g., “I poured my heart and soul into planting the trees”). Avoid repeating similar ideas (ownership/attachment).

Ví dụ: Yes, I really like where I work. I own the clinic and feel a strong attachment to it because I personally designed the garden and poured my heart and soul into planting the trees around it.

Gợi ý: Give a clear topic sentence about your main future goal, then list one or two concrete plans with linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., “I am an enthusiastic person,” “my future work plans are to complete…”). Finish sentences fully and avoid fillers.

Ví dụ: My main future plan is to develop my clinic into one of the best in my state. To achieve this, I plan to finish current projects before starting new ones and to expand services by collaborating with sports dietitians through the organization I run in India.

× I'm a dietitian by profession and it has been almost a decade since I'm working in this field.

✓ I'm a dietitian by profession and it has been almost a decade since I have been working in this field.

Use present perfect continuous ('have been working') to describe an action that started in the past and continues to the present. 'Since' requires a perfect tense, not simple present 'I'm working'. Change 'I'm working' to 'I have been working' for correct tense agreement.

× It is incredibly amazing field, not only providing me a source of income but also keeping me mentally active and increasing my cognitive skills.

✓ It is an incredibly amazing field, not only providing me with a source of income but also keeping me mentally active and improving my cognitive skills.

Missing article 'an' before a noun phrase and incorrect preposition 'providing me a source' should be 'providing me with a source'. 'Increasing my cognitive skills' is awkward; 'improving my cognitive skills' is more natural. Also ensure parallel structure after 'not only... but also'.

× I run my own private clinic, I'm self-employed and my clinic is just adjacent to my house so it is far more convenient to visit it also along with my own 3 kids and the place has quite spacious and with all the amenities for the patient.

✓ I run my own private clinic; I'm self-employed and my clinic is adjacent to my house, so it is much more convenient to visit it with my three kids. The place is quite spacious and has all the amenities for patients.

Multiple issues: 'just adjacent' is acceptable but wording improved to 'adjacent to my house'. 'Along with my own 3 kids' should be 'with my three kids' and numbers under ten are typically written as words. 'The place has quite spacious' is ungrammatical: use 'The place is quite spacious' and 'with all the amenities for the patient' should be 'has all the amenities for patients'. Also split run-on sentence into two for clarity.

× Italy it is an incredible place to work because almost 60% of this place is dedicated to the green uh, part It has almost each and every kind of plant Moreover, it has all the facilities for my patient. They uh, feel uh, relaxing and mentally rejuvenating by sitting in my place and they also.

✓ Italy is an incredible place to work because almost 60% of the area is dedicated to greenery. It has almost every kind of plant. Moreover, it has all the facilities for my patients; they feel relaxed and mentally rejuvenated when sitting in my clinic.

Original has fragmented, repetitive and ungrammatical phrases: 'Italy it is' should be 'Italy is'. 'Dedicated to the green part' is awkward; use 'dedicated to greenery' or 'green spaces'. 'Almost each and every kind' should be 'almost every kind'. 'Facilities for my patient' must be plural 'patients'. 'Feel relaxing' is incorrect; use 'feel relaxed' (adjective). 'Mentally rejuvenating' should be 'mentally rejuvenated' (adjective). Ended with incomplete clause 'and they also'—removed or completed.

× Definitely yes, firstly I own this place and I feel an ownership and attachment to this particular reason of my house and moreover it I have pour my heart and soul constructing and planting the trees so it is very near to my heart.

✓ Definitely, yes. Firstly, I own this place and I feel a sense of ownership and attachment to my home. Moreover, I have poured my heart and soul into constructing and planting the trees, so it is very close to my heart.

Problems include awkward phrase 'ownership and attachment to this particular reason of my house' — corrected to 'sense of ownership and attachment to my home'. Verb tense 'have pour' is wrong; correct past participle 'have poured' and include preposition 'into' with 'poured my heart and soul into'. 'Very near to my heart' is better as 'very close to my heart'.

× I'm very enthusiastic person and I'm already wearing several hats.

✓ I'm a very enthusiastic person and I'm already wearing several hats.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before 'very enthusiastic person'. Article errors often accompany tense/structure issues; adding 'a' makes the noun phrase grammatical.

× Uh, so my future work plan are complete all the project before starting the new one.

✓ So my future work plan is to complete all the projects before starting a new one.

Subject-verb agreement: 'plan are' should be 'plan is'. 'Complete all the project' requires plural 'projects'. Also add infinitive 'to complete' and article 'a' before 'new one' for clarity.

× I'm running my own clinic and want to establish as, uh, one of the best clinic in my state.

✓ I'm running my own clinic and want to establish it as one of the best clinics in my state.

Missing object 'it' after 'establish' and incorrect singular 'clinic' should be plural 'clinics' with 'one of the'. Also ensure 'establish it as' phrase is used to indicate making it one of the best.

× And secondly, I'm running an organization sports dietitian in India and working on it so that I can.

✓ Secondly, I run an organization for sports dietitians in India and I am working on it so that I can expand its reach.

Original is incomplete and ungrammatical: 'running an organization sports dietitian' needs reordering to 'organization for sports dietitians'. Sentence ended abruptly 'so that I can' — completed to show purpose, e.g., 'expand its reach'. Added consistent tense 'I run' and 'I am working'.