Work— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and grammatically correct: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two supporting details. Avoid repetition (e.g., "working a working student") and fix verb forms. Use linking words like "so" or "therefore" to connect ideas.

Ví dụ: I am a student at university, but I only take three units this term, so I have a lot of free time. Therefore I work part-time as a waiter in the campus canteen to support my studies.

Gợi ý: This answer is clear and relevant. To improve, make it slightly more natural by shortening and adding a brief reason or a specific duty to enrich content using a linking word like "and" or "so".

Ví dụ: I work part-time in the university canteen as a waitress, and I usually serve students and help with food preparation during lunch hours.

Gợi ý: Avoid long, repetitive sentences. Start with a direct answer, then support with one clear, specific reason. Use linking words like "because" or "as" and avoid exaggerated or unclear figures unless necessary.

Ví dụ: Yes, it is a good place to work because the canteen is fully air-conditioned, which is comfortable during very hot days and makes long shifts easier.

Gợi ý: Be concise and correct word choice (e.g., "canteen" not "contain"; "comfortable" instead of "convertible environment"). Give one clear reason and a brief result using a linking word like "so" or "therefore".

Ví dụ: Yes, I like working there because the canteen is fully air-conditioned, so I am comfortable during long shifts and can stay focused and hydrated.

Gợi ý: Make your plan clear with a direct topic sentence, then explain reasons briefly and coherently. Correct grammar (e.g., "I have my mind set on" or "I plan to") and avoid repetition. Use linking words like "although" and "because" to contrast expectations and your choice.

Ví dụ: Although people expect me to become cabin crew because I study tourism, I plan to work in academia. I want to be an English teacher because I enjoy teaching and helping others improve their language skills.

× I am currently enrolled, however I only have 3 units which makes me to have a plenty of free time to do something good which is working.

✓ I am currently enrolled; however, I only have three units, which gives me plenty of free time to work.

The original sentence has multiple issues: incorrect infinitive 'to have' after 'makes me', incorrect article 'a plenty' and unclear phrasing 'to do something good which is working.' Use 'gives me' for the meaning of 'causes me to have', use 'plenty of' without 'a', write numbers as words in formal speech ('three'), and simplify to 'to work' to make the purpose clear. Also add punctuation (semicolon and commas) to separate clauses properly. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Basically I have work as a waiter to our university so I study while working a working student.

✓ Basically I work as a waiter at our university, so I study while working as a student worker.

This sentence has awkward word order and redundant or incorrect phrases: 'have work' should be 'work', 'as a waiter to our university' should be 'at our university', and 'working a working student' is repetitive and ungrammatical — use 'working as a student worker' or 'as a working student'. The corrected version fixes verb choice and preposition use and removes redundancy. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I am currently working at our university, specifically in the university canteen, as a part-time waitress.

✓ I am currently working at our university, specifically in the university canteen, as a part-time waitress.

This sentence is acceptable, but 'in the university canteen' is also correct. No grammatical corrections are necessary; keep prepositions 'at' for workplace and 'in' for the canteen. Ensure consistency: 'at our university' and 'in the canteen' are both fine. No change made. Grammar problem type ID:11

× Yes, it is a good place to work because knowing that our university has a peak of 50° of heat index, being a waitress in a fully air conditioned university canteen is such a very good place to start working because of how good the environment is.

✓ Yes, it is a good place to work because, knowing that our university can reach a heat index of 50°C, being a waitress in a fully air-conditioned university canteen is a very good option due to the pleasant environment.

Problems: awkward phrasing 'a peak of 50° of heat index' should be 'a heat index of 50°C' (use unit and correct order), 'such a very good place' is redundant ('such' + 'very'), and 'air conditioned' should be hyphenated as 'air-conditioned' when used as an adjective. Also streamline the sentence to avoid repetition ('place to start working' -> 'option'). Grammar problem type ID:13

× Yes, I like the place where I work because the university contain is fully air conditioned which is important for me knowing that I hate hot temperatures that can reach 50° heat index.

✓ Yes, I like the place where I work because the university canteen is fully air-conditioned, which is important to me because I dislike hot temperatures that can reach a heat index of 50°C.

Errors: 'contain' is a misspelling of 'canteen' and wrong word; 'air conditioned' should be hyphenated; 'important for me' is better as 'important to me'; use 'dislike' instead of 'hate' for neutral tone; place unit after 'heat index' with °C and correct word order 'heat index of 50°C.' Also add comma before 'which' for the nonrestrictive clause. Grammar problem type ID:11

× So working in that convertible environment makes long shifts much easier and helps me stay focused and hydrated.

✓ So working in that comfortable environment makes long shifts much easier and helps me stay focused and hydrated.

'Convertible environment' is incorrect word choice; likely intended 'comfortable' or 'pleasant.' Replace with 'comfortable' to convey the intended meaning. Otherwise sentence structure is fine. Grammar problem type ID:13

× As a tourism student, many people are expecting me to be a cabin crew because of studying for almost 4 years of travel and tourism.

✓ As a tourism student, many people expect me to become a cabin crew member because I have studied travel and tourism for almost four years.

Problems: 'are expecting me to be a cabin crew' is awkward — use 'expect me to become a cabin crew member'; 'because of studying for almost 4 years of travel and tourism' should be rephrased to 'because I have studied travel and tourism for almost four years.' Use consistent tense (present perfect) to indicate the period of study, and write numbers in words in formal contexts. Grammar problem type ID:26

× But I have to my mind of being an educator.

✓ But I have in mind becoming an educator.

Incorrect phrase 'have to my mind of' should be 'have in mind' and 'being an educator' is better phrased as 'becoming an educator' or 'want to be an educator.' The correction uses the common collocation 'have in mind' and the gerund 'becoming' for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:11

× I wanted to work on academe because I wanted to be a teacher, especially especially on English.

✓ I want to work in academia because I want to be a teacher, especially in English.

Multiple issues: 'wanted' should be present 'want' to match future plans context; 'work on academe' is incorrect — use 'work in academia' or 'in the academic field'; 'especially especially on English' has repetition and wrong preposition — use 'especially in English.' The corrected sentence uses consistent present tense and correct prepositions. Grammar problem type ID:26