Work— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Cải thiện cấu trúc câu để rõ ràng và tự nhiên hơn; tránh lỗi ngữ pháp (ví dụ: "a bachelor graduation" không chính xác) và giữ câu ngắn hơn (tối đa 3-4 câu). Nên mở đầu trực tiếp, rồi bổ sung 1-2 chi tiết cụ thể về chuyên ngành hoặc thời gian tốt nghiệp. Sử dụng các liên từ đơn giản khi cần.

Ví dụ: I'm a student majoring in Finance and Banking. I will graduate with my bachelor's degree next month, and I'm preparing to start looking for work in the banking sector.

Gợi ý: Câu trả lời thiếu rõ ràng và có lỗi ngữ pháp (ví dụ: "there has many opportunities", "and can"). Hãy trả lời trực tiếp, giải thích ngắn gọn lý do với 1-2 chi tiết cụ thể. Dùng liên từ phù hợp và giữ câu ngắn.

Ví dụ: I plan to work in the city because there are more job opportunities related to my major. For example, city banks offer training programs that would help me develop professional skills.

Gợi ý: Câu hơi dài và lặp ý ("improve my professional skills" xuất hiện nhiều). Hãy trả lời trực tiếp, sau đó nêu 1 lý do cụ thể và một ví dụ ngắn. Sửa lỗi từ vựng (ví dụ: 'from my major' không chính xác).

Ví dụ: Yes, I think it would be a good place to work because I plan to join UMM Bank. There I could apply what I learned in my Finance and Banking classes and receive on-the-job training.

Gợi ý: Câu trả lời hiện tại lộn xộn, thiếu tính mạch lạc và có lỗi ngữ pháp ("don't go for a walk at the bank", "can happy with my mission"). Hãy nói rõ cảm nhận, nêu lý do cụ thể vì sao bạn sẽ thích nơi làm việc và dùng cấu trúc đơn giản, chính xác về ngữ pháp.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would enjoy working at the bank. I currently live with my parents, but in the future I expect to be satisfied with my job because it matches my career goals and responsibilities.

Gợi ý: Ý chính rõ nhưng câu bị lặp và kết thúc không hoàn chỉnh ("and I can"). Cần mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề, sau đó cung cấp 1-2 mục tiêu cụ thể (ví dụ: vị trí mong muốn, kỹ năng muốn phát triển, kế hoạch thời gian). Dùng động từ phù hợp và câu hoàn chỉnh.

Ví dụ: In the future, I plan to work at a city bank to develop my professional skills in finance. I hope to start as a junior analyst and gain experience in credit assessment and risk management over the next two to three years.

× No actually I'm a student, my major is finance and banking and I am waiting for a bachelor graduation next month.

✓ No, actually I'm a student; my major is Finance and Banking, and I am waiting for my bachelor's graduation next month.

The original sentence runs clauses together without proper punctuation and uses incorrect noun phrase "bachelor graduation". Use a comma or semicolon to separate independent clauses and use the possessive form 'bachelor's graduation' or better 'my graduation with a bachelor\'s degree'. Capitalize the name of the field as a proper noun when appropriate. Suggestion: 'No, actually I'm a student; my major is Finance and Banking, and I am waiting for my bachelor's graduation next month.'

× I plan to work in the city because there has many opportunities for me to improve my skills and suitable with my major and can.

✓ I plan to work in the city because there are many opportunities for me to improve my skills; it is suitable for my major and interests.

The phrase 'there has' is incorrect; use the existential 'there are' for plural 'opportunities' (There be issue / subject-verb agreement). Also 'suitable with my major' is incorrect preposition use; use 'suitable for my major'. The final word 'can' is unclear and unnecessary; replace with 'interests' or 'goals'. Split into clearer clauses: 'there are many opportunities' and 'it is suitable for my major'.

× Yes, it is maybe a great workplace since I plan to work in UMM bank in the city so I can improve my professional skills from my major at the workplace.

✓ Yes, it may be a great workplace, since I plan to work at UMM Bank in the city and improve my professional skills related to my major.

Use 'may' instead of 'maybe' when modifying a verb phrase. 'UMM bank' should be 'UMM Bank' and use the preposition 'at' for a workplace. 'Improve my professional skills from my major' is awkward; use 'related to my major'. Combine ideas with 'and' rather than 'so I can' for clarity. Ensure proper noun capitalization.

× Actually now I live with my parents and don't go for a walk at the bank, so I think it will be great in the future if I have job at the bank since I can happy with my mission.

✓ Actually, I now live with my parents and don't go to the bank, so I think it will be great in the future if I have a job at the bank because I will be happy with my role.

'Don't go for a walk at the bank' is incorrect — use 'don't go to the bank'. Missing article: 'have job' -> 'have a job'. 'Since I can happy with my mission' has pronoun/verb issues and word choice: use 'because I will be happy with my role'. 'Mission' is awkward here; 'role' or 'job' fits better. Add commas for clarity.

× In the future, I plan to work at a bank in the city where I grow my professional skills related to my major and I can.

✓ In the future, I plan to work at a bank in the city where I can develop my professional skills related to my major.

The clause 'where I grow my professional skills' uses 'grow' inappropriately; use 'develop' and place the modal 'can' before the verb: 'where I can develop'. Remove the redundant 'and I can' at the end. Maintain consistent future intent with 'plan to' plus base verb 'work'.