Work— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and use a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details. Avoid listing too many tasks in one long sentence; use linking words to connect ideas and vary vocabulary (e.g., 'I oversee procurement and inventory, and I also handle marketing and design').

Ví dụ: I work as an entrepreneur. Since 2022 I have run a small clothing brand: I oversee procurement and inventory, and I also handle marketing and clothing design to ensure products reach customers.

Gợi ý: Give a direct topic sentence then add one or two clear, accurate details. Correct facts (Chandigarh is the capital of both Punjab and Haryana) and avoid hesitations and unclear phrases. Use linking words for coherence (for example, 'also' or 'because').

Ví dụ: I work in Chandigarh, which is the joint capital of Punjab and Haryana. It is a well-planned and attractive city, and because of its layout it offers many recreational spaces and vocational opportunities.

Gợi ý: Start with a clear topic sentence and support it with two specific reasons, using linking words like 'because' and 'also'. Be slightly more specific about examples of transport or healthcare to strengthen the answer.

Ví dụ: Yes, it is a great place to work because people are very helpful and supportive. Also, the city has reliable public transport and good hospitals, which makes daily life and relocation easier for newcomers.

Gợi ý: Give a concise topic sentence and then one specific supporting detail or brief example rather than repeating similar points. Use varied vocabulary (e.g., 'collaborative' or 'encouraging') and a linking word such as 'because' or 'for example'.

Ví dụ: Yes, I enjoy working there because my colleagues are very supportive and collaborative. For example, they regularly help each other with busy periods and share ideas to improve our designs.

Gợi ý: Give a clear topic sentence and present plans in a logical order using linking words like 'first' and 'then'. Avoid repeating the same idea (moving business online and launching a website are similar); instead, add a specific detail such as a timeline or one concrete step (e.g., 'start with a social media shop next year').

Ví dụ: I plan to expand my brand regionally and develop an online presence. First, I will open retail partnerships in two neighbouring states next year, and then I'll launch an e-commerce website so customers can order directly from our shop.

× I have been working as an entrepreneur since 2022 and I manage end to end task of my brand such as procurement as well as inventory management and marketing and I also do some designing of my clothes.

✓ I have been working as an entrepreneur since 2022, and I manage end-to-end tasks for my brand, such as procurement, inventory management, and marketing, and I also do some clothing design.

The original sentence mixes continuous and simple present without clear parallelism and uses incorrect noun/verb forms. 'End to end task' should be plural 'end-to-end tasks'. 'Designing of my clothes' is awkward; use 'clothing design' or 'design some of my clothes'. Also add commas for clarity and hyphens in 'end-to-end'. Use 'for my brand' rather than 'of my brand'. Maintain present simple 'manage' for habitual actions while keeping 'have been working' for the overall employment period.

× I work in Chandigarh. It is a capital of state of Punjab and Haryana.

✓ I work in Chandigarh. It is the capital of the states of Punjab and Haryana.

Use the definite article 'the' with 'capital' when referring to a specific capital. Also use plural 'states' because Chandigarh is the capital of two states, and include 'the' before 'states'.

× It is a very beautiful city and well planned city.

✓ It is a very beautiful and well-planned city.

Avoid repeating 'city'; combine adjectives and hyphenate the compound adjective 'well-planned'. Use a single noun 'city' after the coordinated adjectives.

× Uh, it is situated between the border of two States and there are it has many different vocational sports.

✓ It is situated on the border between two states, and it has many different vocational spots.

Use the preposition 'on' with 'border' and correct word order to 'border between two states'. Remove the redundant 'there are'. 'Vocational sports' is likely incorrect; 'vocational spots' or 'vocation opportunities' depending on meaning. I chose 'vocational spots' but confirm intended meaning. Also lowercase 'states'.

× Yes, it is very good place to work because people are very helpful and supportive.

✓ Yes, it is a very good place to work because people are very helpful and supportive.

Add the indefinite article 'a' before 'very good place' to make the noun phrase grammatically correct.

× Also, the transportation and healthcare system are very good in this city which makes life easier for people who move from here.

✓ Also, the transportation and healthcare systems are very good in this city, which makes life easier for people who move here.

'System' should be plural 'systems' to match two items. Add a comma before the nonrestrictive relative clause 'which makes...'. Use 'move here' rather than 'move from here' when meaning people who relocate to the city; if the intended meaning is people leaving, use 'move from here' but then 'makes life easier' would not fit. Ensure subject-verb agreement between plural 'systems' and verb forms.

× Yes, I really like the place where I work because my colleagues and other team members are very supportive.

✓ Yes, I really like the place where I work because my colleagues and other team members are very supportive.

This sentence is grammatical; no change needed. Included here to show no error from the provided list.

× They always try to be a positive towards their work as well as they are very helpful.

✓ They always try to be positive about their work, and they are very helpful.

Do not use the article 'a' before the adjective 'positive'. Use the preposition 'about' with 'positive', and separate clauses with a comma and coordinating conjunction for clarity.

× They always try to help their other colleagues in different task.

✓ They always try to help their other colleagues with different tasks.

Use plural 'tasks' to match 'different', and use the preposition 'with' to indicate assistance. 'Help their other colleagues' is acceptable but could be simplified to 'help colleagues'.

× Firstly, I want to expand my brand to other states to reach more customers and then I plan to move my business online.

✓ Firstly, I want to expand my brand to other states to reach more customers, and then I plan to move my business online.

Grammatically correct; added comma for clarity. Verb tenses 'want' and 'plan' appropriately express future intentions, so no tense change required.

× Also, I am planning to launch my online website which helps customers directly they can order our product.

✓ Also, I am planning to launch an online website that will help customers order our products directly.

Replace 'my online website which helps customers directly they can order our product' with clearer structure: use the indefinite article 'an' before 'online website', use a relative clause 'that will help customers order our products directly', use future 'will help' or present 'will' for planned function, and pluralize 'products'. Split the ideas to avoid a run-on sentence.