Friends— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 첫 문장에서 질문에 직접 답한 점은 좋지만, “meet my friend”와 “meet them school”은 문법적으로 부정확합니다. “at school”처럼 전치사를 사용하고, 과거와 현재의 차이가 없다는 점을 더 자연스럽게 설명하세요. 또한 같은 내용의 반복을 줄이고, 친구들과 학교에서 무엇을 하는지 구체적인 세부 정보를 한 가지 덧붙이면 좋습니다.

Exemplo: There isn’t much difference between the past and now because I usually meet my friends at school. In fact, I met my closest friends in middle school, and we are still very close. We normally spend time together during lunch or after class.

Sugestão: 문장의 구조가 불명확하고 “entertainment things”와 “play more exciting”은 자연스럽지 않습니다. 먼저 적합한 장소의 조건을 명확히 제시한 뒤, because로 이유를 연결하세요. 예를 들어 편안한 분위기, 대화하기 좋은 환경, 즐길 수 있는 활동 등을 구체적으로 설명할 수 있습니다.

Exemplo: Some places are suitable because they are comfortable and offer something fun to do. For example, cafés and bowling alleys are good choices because we can talk while enjoying an activity. On the other hand, very noisy or crowded places make it difficult to have a conversation.

Sugestão: 선호와 이유를 직접 제시한 점은 좋습니다. 다만 “prefer hang out”은 “prefer hanging out” 또는 “prefer to hang out”으로 고쳐야 합니다. “awkward”하다는 이유를 왜 그런지 설명하고, 그룹 활동의 구체적인 예를 추가하면 답변이 더 효과적입니다.

Exemplo: I prefer to hang out with a group of friends because I feel more relaxed in a larger group. When I’m with only one or two people, I sometimes run out of things to say. With a group, we can play games, share jokes, and keep the conversation going.

Sugestão: 부정적인 답변과 이유를 제시한 점은 좋지만, “when they’re gone”은 친구들이 떠난 후 청소가 어렵다는 의미로 다소 어색합니다. “I don’t have many snacks at home”처럼 표현하고, 초대하기 어려운 이유를 자연스럽게 연결하세요. 마지막에 대안으로 카페나 친구의 집을 언급하면 답변이 더 풍부해집니다.

Exemplo: Not really. My room is quite small, and I don’t have many snacks at home, so hosting friends can be inconvenient. I’d rather meet them at a café or at someone else’s house, where we have more space to relax.

Sugestão: 친구의 중요성을 긍정과 제한적인 중요성으로 나누어 설명한 점은 좋습니다. 하지만 “not that much important”는 “not extremely important”로, “immerse on my study”는 “focus on my studies”로 고쳐야 합니다. “have to have to”와 같은 반복을 제거하고, 공부와 친구 관계의 균형을 명확히 설명하세요.

Exemplo: Friends are fairly important to me because they make me happy and help me relax when I’m stressed. However, they are not the most important part of my life because I don’t get lonely easily. As a high school student, I need to focus on my studies, so I usually make time for friends after finishing my work.

Sugestão: 빈도와 시험 후에 만난다는 이유를 제시한 점은 좋습니다. 다만 “like once every two months”는 “about once every two months”가 더 자연스럽고, 두 문장을 연결해야 합니다. 시험이 끝난 뒤 보통 무엇을 하는지도 구체적으로 덧붙이세요.

Exemplo: Not very often. I go out with my friends about once every two months, usually after our regular school exams. Once the exams are over, I feel relieved, so we often go to a café or watch a movie together.

Sugestão: 만나는 장소와 활동을 비교적 구체적으로 설명했지만, “go to cafe”에는 관사나 복수형이 필요하고 “talk some”은 자연스럽지 않습니다. 활동을 나열할 때 “After that”이나 “because” 같은 연결어를 사용하세요. “favorite course” 대신 “favorite plan” 또는 “favorite thing to do”를 사용하면 더 자연스럽습니다.

Exemplo: We often meet at a café or a shopping mall. Sometimes we watch a movie and have dinner together, but my favorite thing to do is visit a café. We can talk, laugh, and catch up in a relaxed atmosphere.

Sugestão: 친구들과 하는 활동을 여러 가지 언급한 점은 좋지만, 문장 연결과 문법이 부족합니다. “have girl talk”과 “play the Mafia game”처럼 자연스러운 표현을 사용하고, 활동을 완전한 문장으로 정리하세요. 게임을 좋아하는 이유나 그때의 분위기를 한 문장으로 설명하면 더 구체적입니다.

Exemplo: We usually have girl talk at a café and catch up on each other’s lives. We also play the Mafia game or other group games together. These activities are fun because everyone gets involved, and we usually end up laughing a lot.

Sugestão: 오랫동안 알고 지낸 친구와 현재 가까움의 정도를 설명한 점은 좋습니다. “friends of fourteen years since”는 “I have known two friends for fourteen years, since kindergarten”으로 고쳐야 하며, “not much close”는 “not very close”가 자연스럽습니다. 멀리 살아서 자주 만나지 못하지만 어떻게 연락하는지 덧붙이면 답변이 더 완성됩니다.

Exemplo: Yes, I have known two friends for fourteen years, since we were in kindergarten. However, we are not very close now because we live in different regions. We don’t meet often, but we still keep in touch through messages and occasional video calls.

× I meet them school every day.

✓ I meet them at school every day.

The preposition at is used with specific locations such as school when describing where an activity takes place.

× My best friends are who I met at middle school and I'm still close with them.

✓ My best friends are the people I met in middle school, and I am still close to them.

The phrase are who is incomplete and unnatural when identifying people. Use the people I met to form a complete noun phrase. Also, close is normally followed by the preposition to.

× Because there should be a place such as entertainment things to hang out with friends more exciting to play more exciting.

✓ There should be places with entertainment options where we can hang out with friends and have fun.

The original sentence contains several incomplete and repeated phrases. Use a clear subject, verb, and relative clause to express the idea logically.

× I prefer hang out with a group of friends because when I'm with only one or two friends I become awkward.

✓ I prefer hanging out with a group of friends because I feel awkward when I am with only one or two friends.

Prefer can be followed by a gerund, so hang should be changed to hanging. The revised word order also makes the sentence easier to understand.

× Not really because it's hard to clean my room when they're gone and I don't have many snacking at my home.

✓ Not really, because it is hard to clean my room after they leave, and I do not have many snacks at home.

Many must modify a plural countable noun, such as snacks. Snacking is a gerund and cannot be used as the plural noun after many.

× Not really because it's hard to clean my room when they're gone and I don't have many snacking at my home.

✓ Not really, because it is hard to clean my room after they leave, and I do not have many snacks at home.

The fixed expression is at home, not at my home, when referring generally to being in one's home.

× Friends are important because they give me joy when I'm bored but not that much important because I don't get lonely easily and I have to have to immerse on my study because I'm high school student.

✓ Friends are important because they make me happy when I am bored, but they are not that important to me because I do not get lonely easily. I also have to immerse myself in my studies because I am a high school student.

That much should not modify the adjective important in this structure. Use not that important. The revised sentence also separates two long ideas for clarity.

× Friends are important because they give me joy when I'm bored but not that much important because I don't get lonely easily and I have to have to immerse on my study because I'm high school student.

✓ Friends are important because they make me happy when I am bored, but they are not that important to me because I do not get lonely easily. I also have to immerse myself in my studies because I am a high school student.

When the subject and the person receiving the action are the same, use the reflexive pronoun myself. Therefore, the correct expression is immerse myself.

× Friends are important because they give me joy when I'm bored but not that much important because I don't get lonely easily and I have to have to immerse on my study because I'm high school student.

✓ Friends are important because they make me happy when I am bored, but they are not that important to me because I do not get lonely easily. I also have to immerse myself in my studies because I am a high school student.

The verb immerse is followed by in, so the correct phrase is immerse myself in my studies, not immerse myself on my study.

× Friends are important because they give me joy when I'm bored but not that much important because I don't get lonely easily and I have to have to immerse on my study because I'm high school student.

✓ Friends are important because they make me happy when I am bored, but they are not that important to me because I do not get lonely easily. I also have to immerse myself in my studies because I am a high school student.

A singular countable noun such as student requires an article. Use a high school student.

× I hang out with my friends like once every two months when my school's regular test is over I feel free at the time.

✓ I hang out with my friends about once every two months. When my school's regular tests are over, I feel free.

The original sentence joins two independent clauses without appropriate punctuation or a conjunction. Separating them makes the sentence grammatically complete and clear.

× We usually watch a movie and eat dinner together and go to cafe and talk some. My favorite course is to go to Cafe and talk and laugh together with my friends.

✓ We usually watch a movie, eat dinner together, go to a café, and talk for a while. My favorite thing to do is go to a café, talk, and laugh with my friends.

A singular countable noun such as café needs an article. Use a café when referring to one nonspecific café.

× We do girls talk at Cafe and do Mafia game or the game together Enjoy the moment and just laugh

✓ We have girl talk at a café, play Mafia or other games together, enjoy the moment, and just laugh.

The original sentence contains an unclear series of phrases and lacks punctuation. Use parallel verb forms such as have, play, enjoy, and laugh to connect the activities correctly.

× I have two friends of fourteen years since when I was in kindergarten, but we are not much close because we live in other regions.

✓ I have known two friends for fourteen years, since we were in kindergarten, but we are not very close because we live in different regions.

Use for to describe the duration of a relationship: have known someone for fourteen years. The preposition of is not correct in this expression.

× I have two friends of fourteen years since when I was in kindergarten, but we are not much close because we live in other regions.

✓ I have known two friends for fourteen years, since we were in kindergarten, but we are not very close because we live in different regions.

Very is the appropriate adverb to modify the adjective close in this negative expression. Say not very close, not not much close.