Friends— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect tense/forms (e.g., "used to meet" is correct, but "all in at night schools" and "I usually met them" are awkward).

Exemplo: Yes, there's a big difference. I used to meet friends mainly at school and university, but now I often see them at work-related events or social occasions because I started working. For example, I now reconnect with former classmates at company dinners or industry meet-ups.

Sugestão: Complete your idea and use clearer examples with linking words. Give a topic sentence, then contrast suitable vs unsuitable places with reasons (noise, purpose, atmosphere). Avoid trailing off and repetition.

Exemplo: Some places are more suitable because of the atmosphere and people’s intentions. For instance, cafes and universities encourage conversation and relaxed interaction, whereas clubs are noisy and people often go there to dance rather than to talk, so they are less ideal for making friends.

Sugestão: Clarify and simplify: choose one clear preference and support it with specific reasons and a linking word. Fix repetition and minor grammar ("would be would be").

Exemplo: I prefer spending time with one friend because it feels more intimate and allows deeper conversation. For example, when it's just the two of us we can discuss personal issues in detail, whereas groups often limit how much each person can share.

Sugestão: Finish your sentence and be specific about activities. Use a topic sentence then 1–2 supporting details with linking words. Avoid unnecessary family background unless it relates to hosting.

Exemplo: Yes, I love inviting friends to my home because our apartment is spacious. We usually cook or order food, play games and catch up, which makes it a relaxed and enjoyable gathering.

Sugestão: Good content and tone. To improve, make the structure tighter: one strong topic sentence and one or two specific examples of how you maintain friendships. Avoid repeating words like "really."

Exemplo: Friends are extremely important to me because they provide emotional support and shared memories. For example, I set monthly catch-ups or video calls to stay connected despite our busy schedules.

Sugestão: Be concise and use precise time references. Use linking words to show contrast (e.g., "however"). Avoid repeating phrases like "I would say" multiple times.

Exemplo: These days I don't go out as often as before because work and family commitments take priority. However, I make an effort to meet up every few weeks so we can catch up.

Sugestão: Good specific location and reasons. Shorten and tighten the response: give a topic sentence then two clear reasons using linking words. Avoid unnecessary phrasing like "these days" twice.

Exemplo: We usually meet at cafes because they're quiet and comfortable, which makes it easy to have long, uninterrupted conversations. Also, cafes are convenient and generally allow us to stay as long as we need.

Sugestão: Strong content and specific activities. Improve fluency by removing filler words like "just" and by using linking words to organize points. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: We usually meet for coffee and catch up, discussing recent events, family or relationships. This helps us stay in touch and offer support when someone is facing a problem.

Sugestão: Good content and personal detail. Improve grammar and sentence structure: avoid redundancy ("I actually have quite a lot" and "I would say I made"). Provide one clear example of a long-term friendship to make it more specific.

Exemplo: Yes, I have several friends I've known for over fifteen years because we went to the same primary and secondary schools. For example, one of my school friends and I still meet monthly to reminisce and support each other.

× There is actually a huge difference. Back then I used to meet my friends all in at night schools like secondary schools or university but these days I have to attend various occasions and I started working so I usually met them at my workplace in some business events.

✓ There is actually a huge difference. Back then I used to meet my friends at night schools such as secondary school or university, but these days I attend various events and, since I started working, I usually meet them at my workplace or at business events.

The original sentence has multiple structural issues: incorrect preposition 'in at', inconsistent tense ('used to meet' vs 'I started working so I usually met'), and run-on coordination without commas. Suggestions: use 'at' for locations, 'such as' for examples, maintain present simple for habitual current actions ('I attend', 'I usually meet'), and add commas to separate clauses for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I think it has a lot to do with the intentions that people hold when they are at different places. I think for example at clubs and bars that wouldn't be a good place to make friends well for university and for the

✓ I think it has a lot to do with the intentions people have when they are in different places. For example, clubs and bars are not good places to make friends, whereas university often is.

Problems: awkward phrasing 'hold' is unnatural, wrong preposition 'at different places' better as 'in different places', sentence fragment and run-on 'well for university and for the'. Suggestions: use 'have' instead of 'hold', 'in' for being inside places, restructure into two sentences and complete the comparison using 'whereas' or 'while'. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I prefer to spend quality time with one friend and so a bunch of people because that's more intimate and I can feel a deeper connection and usually the conversation would be would be deeper and more diverse when it's just the two of us.

✓ I prefer to spend quality time with one friend rather than with a bunch of people because it's more intimate and I can feel a deeper connection; usually the conversation is deeper and more varied when it's just the two of us.

Errors: incorrect conjunction 'and so' and redundancy 'would be would be'. Tense/modal mismatch: use present simple for general preferences ('is', 'can'). Suggestions: contrast with 'rather than', remove duplicate words, use 'more varied' or 'more diverse', and maintain consistent present tense for habitual statements. Grammar problem type ID:16

× I love inviting friends to my home. We have a big family. I have an older sister and a younger brother so our apartment is quite spacious and it's really fun to invite a bunch of people to my home. We can have some good food, catch up,

✓ I love inviting friends to my home. We have a big family: I have an older sister and a younger brother, so our apartment is quite spacious and it's fun to invite a bunch of people. We can have good food and catch up.

Issues: repetition of 'to my home', run-on sentence lacking final clause (trailing comma), and awkward phrasing 'some good food, catch up,'. Suggestions: avoid repeated phrases, use punctuation to join related ideas, complete lists with conjunctions, and remove trailing commas. Grammar problem type ID:26

× These day, I would say it's not as often as I used to because as I said, we get older and life gets busier.

✓ These days, I would say it's not as often as it used to be because, as I said, we get older and life gets busier.

Errors: incorrect plural 'These day' should be 'These days'; tense in comparison requires 'used to be' rather than 'used to'. Suggestions: use correct plural form and maintain correct past habitual structure 'used to be' when comparing past frequency with the present. Grammar problem type ID:6

× We're no longer students and we can't meet one another at school anymore. So I would say I would try to make efforts to stay in touch and meet up with them once in a while.

✓ We're no longer students, so we can't meet one another at school anymore. I try to make an effort to stay in touch and meet up with them once in a while.

Problems: redundant modal 'I would say I would try' and awkward phrase 'make efforts'. Suggestions: simplify to 'I try to make an effort' (present simple for habitual actions), combine clauses with correct punctuation, and remove unnecessary modals to improve clarity. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I usually meet with my friends at cafes or coffee shops these days because it allows us to sit down and it's quiet to have deep conversations without many distractions and there is no time limit for staying in a cafe these days.

✓ These days I usually meet my friends at cafés or coffee shops because they allow us to sit down in a quiet place for deep conversations without many distractions, and there is often no time limit for staying in a café.

Issues: 'meet with' is acceptable but 'meet my friends' is more natural; singular 'it allows' referring to plural 'cafes' should be 'they allow'; repetition 'these days' twice. Suggestions: match subject and verb number, avoid repetitive phrases, and use 'in a quiet place' for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:11

× We usually just go out, grab a good cup of coffee and catch up, talk about life recently, talk about our family or our relationships, just to make sure we stay in touch and we can show support to whatever problem is going on in each other's lives.

✓ We usually just go out, grab a good cup of coffee and catch up, talk about life recently, our families, or our relationships, just to make sure we stay in touch and can support each other with whatever problems are going on in our lives.

Errors: awkward phrase 'show support to' should be 'support', incorrect singular/plural 'problem' vs 'problems', and 'each other's lives' better as 'our lives' for clarity. Suggestions: use 'support each other' and pluralize nouns when referring to multiple issues. Grammar problem type ID:11

× I actually have quite a lot of friends that I've known for a long time because I went to the same primary school and secondary school. So I would say I made some really deep connections with them for over fifteen years now, which I truly treasure our friendship.

✓ I actually have quite a lot of friends whom I've known for a long time because we went to the same primary and secondary schools. I have had some really deep connections with them for over fifteen years now, and I truly treasure our friendships.

Problems: relative pronoun 'that' better replaced by 'whom' for people in formal usage; 'I went to the same primary school and secondary school' awkward — better 'we went' to indicate shared schooling; tense and aspect: 'I made some really deep connections for over fifteen years now' should be present perfect 'I have had...for over fifteen years'; 'which I truly treasure our friendship' is ungrammatical and redundant. Suggestions: use correct relative pronoun, correct plural for 'schools' and 'friendships', and present perfect to show an action continuing to the present. Grammar problem type ID:26