Friends— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Clarify vocabulary and grammar, give a clear topic sentence then a brief supporting detail. Replace unclear phrases ("perfect shape") with correct words ("prefecture"). Keep it within 2–3 sentences and link ideas (e.g., "so" / "however").

Exemplo: Yes. I meet most of my friends here in Tokyo because I moved from my home prefecture, so I have new local friends. However, when I return to my hometown I usually meet my old school friends.

Sugestão: Make one clear main idea and support it with a specific example. Use correct vocabulary ("atmosphere is completely different"). Explain why atmospheres fit different activities (e.g., quiet for studying, lively for chatting). Use linking words like "for example" and "because" properly.

Exemplo: Places differ in atmosphere, so some are more suitable for certain activities. For example, a quiet library is better for serious study because it is calm, while a café is better for casual conversation because it is relaxed and social.

Sugestão: Give a direct topic sentence stating your preference, then one clear reason with a concise example. Correct grammar ("if there are too many people"), avoid repetition, and keep sentences short and coherent.

Exemplo: I prefer spending time with one or a few close friends because it is easier to have meaningful conversations. If a group is too large, it is hard to join in and talk with everyone.

Sugestão: Answer directly and give a clear reason. Correct grammar and vocabulary ("I have to clean up my room"). Keep the example relevant and concise; explain whether this is temporary or usual.

Exemplo: Not usually, because my room is often untidy and I prefer not to host guests. Instead, I usually visit my friends or stay at their homes when I return to my home prefecture.

Sugestão: Start with a clear statement about importance, then give two specific reasons. Fix grammar and awkward phrasing ("which concentrated me to live alive"); use natural expressions like "they make life more enjoyable and motivate me."

Exemplo: Friends are very important to me because I don't like being alone and they make life more enjoyable. For example, I like going out and talking with friends because it motivates me and cheer me up.

Sugestão: Answer the question clearly with a simple yes/no and give one specific recent example and one brief effect. Fix grammar ("relaxing", "motivated/me") and split into two sentences for clarity.

Exemplo: Yes, I often go out with my friends. For example, we recently took a relaxing trip to Hokkaido, which motivated me and helped me feel refreshed.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence naming the common meeting place, then one brief explanation of why (e.g., we like trying food). Use concise sequencing words ("first", "then") correctly and avoid repetition.

Exemplo: We often meet at nearby restaurants because we all enjoy eating together. First we choose a place to try, then we meet there for a meal and decide our next plan afterwards.

Sugestão: Be specific with activities and correct vocabulary (e.g., "take photos" not "take a plant furs"). Give 2 clear examples and link them with "for example" or "sometimes". Keep sentences short and grammatical.

Exemplo: We do different things depending on our mood. For example, sometimes we take photos at scenic spots, and other times we just go to a restaurant for lunch and relax.

Sugestão: Give a clear opening sentence stating how long you've known the friend and one specific detail about the friendship (how you met, where they live). Correct grammar and vocabulary ("junior high school", "prefecture") and avoid repeating the same idea.

Exemplo: Yes. I have known him for over ten years since junior high school. He lives in my home prefecture, so I often visit his hometown and we meet when I return.

× Yes, I moved from my native perfect shape to Tokyo so I made new friends here.

✓ Yes, I moved from my native prefecture to Tokyo, so I made new friends here.

The sentence has wrong word choice and structure: 'perfect shape' is incorrect for 'prefecture' (a regional administrative area). Add a comma before 'so' to join two independent clauses. Use 'prefecture' to convey the intended meaning.

× When I go back to my hometown I usually meet my old friends from school.

✓ When I go back to my hometown, I usually meet my old friends from school.

This sentence is correct in tense but missing a comma after the introductory time clause 'When I go back to my hometown'. Adding the comma improves clarity and natural written phrasing.

× Because I think the atmosphere is complete different.

✓ Because I think the atmosphere is completely different.

Use the adverb 'completely' to modify the adjective 'different'. 'Complete' is an adjective and cannot directly modify another adjective.

× For example, if we want to argue with very important tasks, we need more acquired price such as coffee or a library is needed.

✓ For example, if we want to focus on very important tasks, we need quieter places and sometimes things like coffee or a library help us concentrate.

Original sentence has multiple issues: wrong verb choice 'argue' for 'focus', awkward noun phrases 'acquired price', and redundant clause 'a library is needed'. I replaced them with clearer vocabulary ('focus', 'quieter places') and a natural structure showing examples.

× I prefer to spend with a few friends.

✓ I prefer to spend time with a few friends.

The verb 'spend' requires an object like 'time' in this context. Add 'time' to make the phrase idiomatic: 'spend time with'.

× And actually if too many groups I belonged, it is difficult to get a chance to talk to talk so I like each communication with one friend because it is easy to talk.

✓ Actually, if I belong to too many groups, it is difficult to get a chance to talk, so I prefer one-on-one conversations because it is easier to speak.

Problems: wrong word order ('if too many groups I belonged'), repetition ('talk to talk'), and awkward phrasing ('each communication with one friend'). Reordering to 'if I belong to too many groups' and using 'one-on-one conversations' corrects structure and clarity.

× Actually no because I have I have to clean up my loom but I usually go to other friends home.

✓ Actually no, because I have to clean my room, but I usually go to other friends' homes.

Mistakes: duplicated 'I have', wrong word 'loom' instead of 'room', missing possessive apostrophe in 'friends' homes'. Also add commas for clause separation.

× For example when I go back to my native prefecture, I don't have places to stay so my friend allowed me to stay here.

✓ For example, when I go back to my native prefecture, I don't have places to stay, so my friend lets me stay with them.

Tense inconsistency: 'allowed' is past; use present 'lets' to match habitual action. Also 'stay here' is vague; 'stay with them' is clearer. Add commas for clarity.

× Friend is one of the most important things around me because I don't want to be alone.

✓ Friends are one of the most important things in my life because I don't want to be alone.

Use plural 'Friends' to match 'one of the...'; 'around me' is unnatural—use 'in my life'.

× I like talking, I like visiting everywhere with others so which concentrated me to live alive.

✓ I like talking and going places with others, which makes me feel more alive.

Original has incorrect clause 'which concentrated me to live alive' and punctuation issues. Use 'which makes me feel more alive' to express cause and effect naturally.

× Good job!

✓ (This line is feedback from the examiner and not part of the student's answer; no correction needed.)

'Good job!' is examiner feedback, not student speech. No grammatical correction required.

× We often meet at a restaurant around here and which is what we want to go.

✓ We often meet at a nearby restaurant, which is where we like to go.

Replace 'around here' with 'nearby' and rephrase 'which is what we want to go' to 'which is where we like to go' for grammatical correctness and natural phrasing.

× We like eating so first we set the restaurant here and then we make a plan to go there and then eat.

✓ We like eating, so first we choose a restaurant nearby, then we make a plan and go there to eat.

Use 'choose a restaurant' instead of 'set the restaurant', remove redundant 'then', and order actions logically: choose, plan, go, eat.

× We always do what we want.

✓ We usually do what we want to do.

'Always' is possible but may be too strong; 'usually' is more natural. Add 'to do' for completeness. If 'always' was intended, keep it and add 'to do'.

× For example, if we have we like taking pictures, we go to the airport to take a plant furs.

✓ For example, if we like taking pictures, we go to scenic places to photograph landscapes.

Original contains repetition 'if we have we like', illogical 'airport' and unreadable 'plant furs'. I replaced with a coherent example: go to scenic places to take photos.

× Other day if we want to eat lunch we go to the restaurant to eat that.

✓ Other days, if we want to eat lunch, we go to a restaurant.

Use 'Other days' (plural) and simplify 'go to the restaurant to eat that' to 'go to a restaurant'. Add commas around conditional clause.

× It depends on the day and we enjoy time.

✓ It depends on the day, and we enjoy our time together.

Add possessive 'our' and 'together' for clarity; add comma before coordinating conjunction.

× Yes we have known each other for over ten years from when we were a junior high school student and actually he lived under the Playfecture but sometimes I go back to here at their hometown and meet together.

✓ Yes, we have known each other for over ten years since we were junior high school students. He actually lives in a different prefecture, but sometimes I go back to his hometown and we meet up.

Corrections: add commas, use 'since' for duration, plural 'students' matches 'we', fix tense and form 'lived' to 'lives' for current state, replace 'under the Playfecture' with 'in a different prefecture', fix 'go back to here at their hometown' to 'go back to his hometown', and use 'meet up' for natural phrasing.