Advertisement— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Answer the question more directly and avoid repeating the idea that advertisements appear everywhere and generate income for websites. Also, avoid a comma splice by separating the ideas into shorter sentences. Use a linking word such as “because” to explain why you see so many advertisements.

Exemplo: Yes, I see advertisements very often when I use my phone or computer. They appear on social media, news websites, and shopping apps. This is mainly because advertising helps these platforms earn money, although I sometimes find the adverts distracting.

Sugestão: The answer is relevant and includes a personal reaction, but it contains repetition (“spreading the awareness”), an unnatural phrase (“learnt so young along”), and slightly awkward wording around the topic. State what the advertisement was about, explain its impact, and finish with a clear personal opinion. “At a young age” or “when I was young” would be more natural.

Exemplo: Yes, I remember a famous sanitary-pad advertisement from India. It promoted menstrual health and encouraged people to talk openly about the subject. I was too young to understand it at first, but it made me curious, so I learned more about it later. I’m glad I was introduced to this important issue at an early age.

Sugestão: The main idea is clear, but “advertising” should be replaced by “advertisements” when referring to individual notices, and “you can see them” does not agree with the singular noun “advertising.” Avoid repeating “different” and clarify that billboards are usually beside roads rather than on public transport. Use a linking word to connect the examples smoothly.

Exemplo: Yes, there is quite a lot of advertising on public transport in my country. Advertisements can be found inside buses and trains, on three-wheelers, and at many bus stops. In addition, there are large billboards along major roads, so commuters see them almost everywhere.

Sugestão: You give a balanced opinion and provide a reason, which creates an effective answer. However, avoid repeating “advertisements” and “many,” and use more natural expressions such as “a source of income” and “keep products and services affordable.” The phrase “accepted along the way” is unclear; say that advertisements are “a necessary part of modern life” instead.

Exemplo: I wouldn’t say I particularly like advertisements because they can be intrusive, especially online. However, they are an important source of income for businesses and help keep some websites and services free. For that reason, I see them as a necessary part of modern life.

Sugestão: Your opinion is understandable, but the sentence is too long and contains awkward or inaccurate expressions, such as “has a meaning attached to it,” “lead misinformation,” and “produces a wrong lifestyle.” Give a clear description of the advertising you prefer, then support it with a specific quality or example. Use “does not mislead consumers” and “presents realistic expectations.”

Exemplo: I like advertising that is informative and socially responsible. It should show the product realistically instead of exaggerating its benefits or promoting an unrealistic lifestyle. For example, I appreciate adverts that explain how a product works and clearly mention its limitations.

Sugestão: The answer addresses the question, but the opening is confusing and the sentence is too long. Use a specific example rather than describing a general monthly situation, and make the conditional structure clearer. Avoid saying “a link that leads me to that advertisement”; say “I click on the advert” or “visit the company’s website.”

Exemplo: Yes, I have bought things after seeing them advertised online. For instance, I once bought a pair of wireless earphones after seeing an advert on social media. I clicked on the link, compared the reviews and prices, and decided to purchase them because they seemed practical and reasonably priced.

× Yes, advertisements are a common occurrence when we're on our phones or computers, we can see them everywhere on every website because that is how a website functions, that is how they get paid right by advertisements.

✓ Yes, advertisements are common when we are using our phones or computers. We can see them everywhere, on almost every website, because that is how websites function and earn money.

The original sentence contains several comma splices and unnecessarily repeats the same structure. Separate the independent clauses with full stops or semicolons, and use a clearer structure to express the idea.

× Yes, advertisements are a common occurrence when we're on our phones or computers, we can see them everywhere on every website because that is how a website functions, that is how they get paid right by advertisements.

✓ Yes, advertisements are common when we are using our phones or computers. We can see them everywhere, on almost every website, because that is how websites function and earn money.

The noun a website is singular, but it is later referred to with they. Either use a singular pronoun, it, or change the noun to the plural form, websites. The plural form is more suitable here because you are speaking generally.

× Yes, there is a very famous advertisement in India which is about pads and the awareness of spreading spreading the awareness of the usage of pads.

✓ Yes, there is a very famous advertisement in India about sanitary pads that aims to raise awareness of their use.

The phrase about pads and the awareness of spreading the awareness is unnecessarily repeated and structurally unclear. Use the concise structure aims to raise awareness of their use.

× I did not know what pads were when I was a small child, but seeing that advertisement I wanted to learn more about it and I am really glad that I learnt so young along.

✓ I did not know what pads were when I was a small child, but after seeing that advertisement, I wanted to learn more about them. I am really glad that I learned about them at such a young age.

The expression learned so young along is not grammatically correct. Use at such a young age to describe the time when you learned something. The preposition at is used before such a young age.

× I did not know what pads were when I was a small child, but seeing that advertisement I wanted to learn more about it and I am really glad that I learnt so young along.

✓ I did not know what pads were when I was a small child, but after seeing that advertisement, I wanted to learn more about them. I am really glad that I learned about them at such a young age.

Pads is plural, so it should be replaced by the plural pronoun them, not the singular pronoun it. Pronouns must agree in number with the nouns they refer to.

× Advertising is common on public transport in my country. You can see them on different buses, on different three wheelers, on different trains or billboards around the city so it's a common occurrence.

✓ Advertising is common on public transport in my country. You can see advertisements on different buses, three-wheelers, and trains, as well as on billboards around the city, so it is a common occurrence.

Advertising is an uncountable activity, whereas them is a plural pronoun. Repeating the specific plural noun advertisements makes the reference clear and grammatically correct.

× I wouldn't say I like advertisements per se, but as I know, advertisements are the source of income for many, many people out there and advertisements are what makes things for us free or cheap. So I think advertisements are something which have to be accepted along the way.

✓ I wouldn't say I like advertisements per se, but as far as I know, advertisements are a source of income for many people, and they are what make things free or cheap for us. So I think advertisements are something that has to be accepted.

In advertisements are what make things, the plural subject advertisements requires make, not makes. In something that has to be accepted, the subject is the singular word something, so the verb must be has, not have.

× I usually like advertising that has a meaning attached to it that can show the consumer the reality of the product and that does not lead or give misinformation to the consumer or produces or shows a wrong lifestyle to the consumer.

✓ I usually like advertising that has a meaningful message, shows consumers the reality of a product, does not mislead them, and does not promote an unrealistic lifestyle.

The original sentence uses and and or in an unclear and grammatically unbalanced sequence. When listing several qualities, use a consistent parallel structure and coordinate the items clearly.

× Yes, like once a month if I see something that I have wanted and I see a version of it in an advertisement on my phone, I would like to click the link that leads me to that advertisement and if I find it good I do buy it.

✓ Yes. About once a month, if I see something I want advertised on my phone, I usually click the link. If I like the product, I buy it.

The original sentence contains too many clauses joined without clear punctuation, making the structure difficult to follow. Divide it into shorter sentences and use usually for a repeated habit. The expression if I like the product is also more natural and direct than if I find it good.