Advertisement— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 첫 문장에서 질문에 직접 답한 점은 좋습니다. 하지만 ‘numerous advertisements’와 ‘advertisement’를 반복하지 말고, ‘coupon ads’처럼 자연스러운 표현을 사용하세요. ‘the coupon advertisement’는 어색하므로 복수형인 ‘coupon ads’가 적절합니다. 마지막에는 광고가 얼마나 자주 나타나는지 또는 왜 피곤한지 구체적인 이유를 덧붙이면 답변이 더 효과적입니다.

Exemplo: Yes, I see advertisements quite often when I use my phone, especially coupon ads on social media. They can be useful sometimes, but I find them annoying because they appear repeatedly while I am browsing.

Sugestão: 광고를 선택하고 음악, 배경, 배우를 구체적으로 설명한 점이 좋습니다. 과거의 경험이므로 ‘has amazed’보다 ‘amazed’가 적절하며, ‘when I was a pupil’보다 ‘when I was a child’ 또는 ‘when I was in school’이 자연스럽습니다. ‘the advertisement of Samsung Galaxy’는 ‘a Samsung Galaxy advertisement’로 바꾸고, ‘exquisite’는 광고 음악을 설명할 때 다소 격식적이므로 ‘catchy’ 또는 ‘memorable’을 사용하는 것이 좋습니다.

Exemplo: Yes, a Samsung Galaxy advertisement made a strong impression on me when I was a child. The background music was catchy, and the beautiful scenery and attractive actors made the commercial memorable. I still remember it because it made the phone look exciting and modern.

Sugestão: 대중교통에서 광고를 보는 상황을 설명했지만, ‘watch advertisement’는 ‘see advertisements’가 더 자연스럽고, ‘in subway or bus’는 ‘in the subway or on a bus’로 고쳐야 합니다. ‘advertisement’와 ‘them’의 단복수가 일치하지 않으므로 ‘the advertisements are so large that I can’t miss them’이라고 하세요. 또한 ‘however’ 앞에는 마침표나 세미콜론을 사용해 문장을 나누면 더 명확합니다.

Exemplo: Yes, I see quite a lot of advertisements on public transport, especially in subway stations and on buses. I do not usually pay much attention to them, but some posters are so large and colorful that they are impossible to miss. I also see many ads when I transfer between subway lines.

Sugestão: 자신의 의견을 분명히 제시하고 두 가지 이유를 연결한 점은 좋습니다. 그러나 ‘Personal preferences might differ from person to person’은 Part 1 답변에서 불필요하게 일반적이고 장황하므로 바로 자신의 의견을 말하는 것이 효과적입니다. ‘persistent’는 광고에 보통 쓰지 않으므로 ‘intrusive’ 또는 ‘repetitive’를 사용하세요. ‘advertisements of attractive products’는 ‘ads for appealing products’로 바꾸고, 광고가 충동구매를 유발한다는 결과를 구체적으로 설명하면 좋습니다.

Exemplo: No, I generally do not like advertisements because they are often repetitive and intrusive. In addition, ads for attractive products can tempt me to buy things I do not really need. For example, I sometimes end up browsing online stores after seeing a persuasive advertisement.

Sugestão: 선호하는 광고 유형을 답했지만, ‘if there are no actors it is unnatural and bizarre’는 문장 연결이 부족하므로 접속사와 구두점을 사용해야 합니다. ‘advertising that contains actors’보다 ‘advertisements featuring actors’가 자연스럽습니다. 또한 배우가 등장하는 광고가 왜 좋은지 ‘스토리가 더 생생하다’와 같은 구체적인 이유를 추가하면 좋습니다. ‘attractive actors’만 강조하기보다 광고의 분위기나 기억에 남는 점을 설명하면 어휘와 내용이 더 풍부해집니다.

Exemplo: I like advertisements that feature actors, especially when they tell a short and entertaining story. I find them more engaging than simple product demonstrations because the characters make the ad feel lively and memorable. I also enjoy commercials with humor or attractive visuals.

Sugestão: 광고 때문에 구매한 경험을 제시하려고 했지만, 문법과 문장 연결을 개선해야 합니다. ‘the clothes that was’는 ‘the clothes that were featured’로, ‘on advertisement’는 ‘in an advertisement’로 고쳐야 합니다. ‘exquisite’는 광고보다는 옷이나 디자인을 설명할 때 더 적절하며, ‘the clothes looked more charming than they really were’처럼 광고와 실제 상품의 차이를 정확히 표현하세요. 한 문장에 이유와 결과를 모두 넣지 말고 두세 문장으로 나누면 훨씬 자연스럽습니다.

Exemplo: Yes, I once bought a pair of clothes after seeing them in an online advertisement. The model looked stylish, and the clothes seemed high-quality and comfortable. However, when I received them, they looked less attractive than they had in the advertisement.

× To be specific, the numerous advertisements are always the coupon advertisement.

✓ To be specific, the numerous advertisements are always coupon advertisements.

The plural noun advertisements must be matched with the plural noun advertisements. The singular noun advertisement cannot refer to numerous advertisements.

× The advertisement of Samsung Galaxy has amazed me when I was a pupil.

✓ The advertisement for the Samsung Galaxy amazed me when I was a pupil.

The sentence refers to a completed experience in the past, so the simple past amazed is more appropriate than the present perfect has amazed, especially with the past-time expression when I was a pupil.

× The advertisement of Samsung Galaxy has amazed me when I was a pupil.

✓ The advertisement for the Samsung Galaxy amazed me when I was a pupil.

Use the preposition for when describing an advertisement promoting a product or brand. Advertisement of Samsung Galaxy is not the natural prepositional pattern.

× Luckily, I don't have to watch advertisement on trains or other transport, however when I have to transfer to another line in subway or bus, I have to watch them.

✓ Luckily, I don't have to watch advertisements on trains or other forms of transport. However, when I have to transfer to another line on the subway or on a bus, I have to watch them.

The noun advertisements should be plural because the speaker is referring to advertisements in general. The plural pronoun them also agrees with advertisements.

× Luckily, I don't have to watch advertisement on trains or other transport, however when I have to transfer to another line in subway or bus, I have to watch them.

✓ Luckily, I don't have to watch advertisements on trains or other forms of transport. However, when I have to transfer to another line on the subway or on a bus, I have to watch them.

Use on with public transport systems such as the subway and on a bus. The phrase in subway is incorrect in this context.

× Luckily, I don't have to watch advertisement on trains or other transport, however when I have to transfer to another line in subway or bus, I have to watch them.

✓ Luckily, I don't have to watch advertisements on trains or other forms of transport. However, when I have to transfer to another line on the subway or on a bus, I have to watch them.

The specific public transport nouns require articles: the subway and a bus. When speaking about advertisements in general, advertisements should be plural without an article.

× The advertisement is so big that I can't miss them.

✓ The advertisements are so big that I can't miss them.

The plural pronoun them refers to more than one advertisement, so the subject must also be plural: advertisements are.

× The advertisement is so big that I can't miss them.

✓ The advertisements are so big that I can't miss them.

The pronoun them must refer to a plural noun. Changing advertisement to advertisements makes the subject and pronoun agree in number.

× Additionally, advertisements of attractive products induce me to buy them

✓ Additionally, advertisements for attractive products induce me to buy them.

Use advertisements for products to describe advertisements that promote or sell those products.

× I prefer advertising that contains actors if there are no actors it is unnatural and bizarre.

✓ I prefer advertisements that feature actors; if there are no actors, they seem unnatural and bizarre.

The original sentence joins two independent clauses without suitable punctuation or structure. A semicolon separates the clauses, and a comma is needed after the introductory if-clause.

× I prefer advertising that contains actors if there are no actors it is unnatural and bizarre.

✓ I prefer advertisements that feature actors; if there are no actors, they seem unnatural and bizarre.

The conditional clause if there are no actors needs to be separated from the main clause with appropriate punctuation. This makes the relationship between the two ideas clear.

× To be honest, I purchased the clothes that was on advertisement as the advertisement was so exquisite, the clothes look charming then it really is

✓ To be honest, I purchased the clothes that were shown in an advertisement because the advertisement was so appealing; the clothes looked charming, and they really were.

Clothes is a plural noun, so it must take the plural verb were, not was. The relative clause also needs a passive form, were shown, because the clothes received the action.

× To be honest, I purchased the clothes that was on advertisement as the advertisement was so exquisite, the clothes look charming then it really is

✓ To be honest, I purchased the clothes that were shown in an advertisement because the advertisement was so appealing; the clothes looked charming, and they really were.

Advertisement is a singular countable noun, so it requires an article. An advertisement is used because the advertisement has not been mentioned previously.

× To be honest, I purchased the clothes that was on advertisement as the advertisement was so exquisite, the clothes look charming then it really is

✓ To be honest, I purchased the clothes that were shown in an advertisement because the advertisement was so appealing; the clothes looked charming, and they really were.

The speaker describes a completed purchase and a past reaction. Therefore, look should be changed to the simple past looked to maintain consistent past tense.

× To be honest, I purchased the clothes that was on advertisement as the advertisement was so exquisite, the clothes look charming then it really is

✓ To be honest, I purchased the clothes that were shown in an advertisement because the advertisement was so appealing; the clothes looked charming, and they really were.

The pronoun it incorrectly refers to the plural noun clothes. Use they for clothes. The phrase they really were refers back to the adjective charming.