Advertisement— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make the answer more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and keep to under five sentences.

Exemplo: Yes. I often see ads on free websites and apps because companies use advertising to fund their services. For example, YouTube shows ads during videos, although users can pay for a premium subscription to remove them.

Sugestão: Improve grammar and clarity: use past tense correctly and give specific details about the ad. Use linking words to explain why it was memorable and keep sentences concise.

Exemplo: Yes. As a child in Taiwan I remember a Pinky candy commercial because it had a catchy jingle. The song was easy to remember, so I often hummed it, and the bright visuals appealed to children, which made the ad very memorable.

Sugestão: Clarify and simplify your response. Use a clear topic sentence, then one specific example. Avoid vague phrases and incorrect expressions; use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' to make your reasoning logical.

Exemplo: Yes. There are many large advertisements in MRT stations because companies target commuters. For example, I often see full-wrapping train ads and large posters promoting new movies or products to reach many people quickly.

Sugestão: Make your opinion clearer and more fluent. Start with a direct opinion, explain reasons with one or two concise supporting details, and use correct grammar and linking words like 'however' to show contrast.

Exemplo: Not really. I find ads annoying because they interrupt videos and distract me from my work. However, I understand they help creators earn money when services are free.

Sugestão: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. State the preferred type of ad, give a clear reason and a brief example, using linking words for coherence.

Exemplo: I prefer ads that connect products to everyday life. For instance, Uber Eats commercials show realistic scenarios of busy people ordering food, which makes the ads relatable and memorable.

Sugestão: Make your response direct and concise. Use a clear topic sentence and two supporting reasons with correct grammar. Avoid repetition and maintain coherence with linking words such as 'because' and 'so'.

Exemplo: Not usually. I prefer to compare price and quality in person because I can inspect items directly. Also, I worry about online scams, so I avoid buying only because of an advertisement.

× Yes, since some website that are free and open to the public, they have some advertisement when you click on some videos or reviewing some website because in that way they can make profit of their own company.

✓ Yes, because some websites that are free and open to the public show advertisements when you click on videos or browse their pages, since this is how those companies make a profit.

Errors: incorrect preposition 'since' at sentence start causing awkward meaning; 'website' should be plural 'websites'; 'reviewing some website' incorrect preposition and verb choice; 'make profit of their own company' incorrect preposition and word order. Suggestion: use 'because' to introduce reason, pluralize countable nouns, use 'browse' for visiting pages, and 'make a profit' or 'earn revenue' with correct word order.

× Also, some YouTube channel had open a premium subscribe for the subscriber to eliminate the advertisement when they are seeing videos.

✓ Also, some YouTube channels have opened a premium subscription for subscribers to remove advertisements when they watch videos.

Errors: subject-verb agreement and verb tense: 'channel' should be plural 'channels'; 'had open' is incorrect past perfect form; use 'have opened' or 'opened'; 'subscribe' (verb) should be noun 'subscription'; 'the subscriber' should be 'subscribers'; 'are seeing' is unnatural - use present simple 'watch'. Suggestion: match plural nouns and use correct verb forms ('have opened') and correct noun forms ('subscription').

× Yes, I have saw an ad about a candy which was a kind of popular candy when I was a kid in Taiwan.

✓ Yes, I saw an ad for a candy that was very popular when I was a kid in Taiwan.

Errors: present perfect 'have saw' is incorrect (mix of have + past form). Use past simple 'saw' for a finished action in the past. 'about a candy' is better 'for a candy'; redundancy 'a kind of popular candy' should be 'very popular'. Suggestion: use simple past for specific past events and choose appropriate prepositions ('ad for').

× It is a candy brand called Pinky and the reason why it appeals me is because it's advertisement contain a very impressive song which makes me hum it.

✓ It was a candy brand called Pinky, and the reason it appealed to me was that its advertisement contained a very catchy song that I would hum.

Errors: tense inconsistency (use past 'was'/'appealed'); incorrect pronoun+verb 'appeals me' should be 'appealed to me'; 'it's' should be possessive 'its'; 'advertisement contain' subject-verb agreement incorrect - 'contained'; 'impressive song which makes me hum it' awkward: use 'catchy song that I would hum'. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense, use correct possessive 'its', correct verb agreement, and proper collocations ('appealed to me').

× All the time because it is really easy to memorize and also fit the children's style.

✓ I remembered it all the time because it was really easy to remember and fit children's tastes.

Errors: sentence fragment and awkward conjunction 'All the time because' produces a dependent clause without main clause; 'easy to memorize' is better 'easy to remember'; 'fit the children's style' should be 'fit children's tastes' or 'appeal to children'. Suggestion: make a complete sentence, use correct noun phrases and natural collocations.

× Yes, since that they are very much big advertisements in the MRT station, they usually spend a lot of money to promote their own products or also their project to the public in the advertisement way because it is more easy and can create.

✓ Yes, because there are very large advertisements in MRT stations; companies usually spend a lot of money to promote their products or projects to the public through advertising because it is easier and more effective.

Errors: 'since that they are' incorrect conjunction and word order; 'very much big' wrong modifier order - use 'very large' or 'much bigger'; 'MRT station' should be plural 'stations' for general statement; 'their own products or also their project' awkward - use 'their products or projects'; 'in the advertisement way' should be 'through advertising'; 'more easy' incorrect comparative - use 'easier'. Suggestion: use 'because' for reasons, 'there are' for existence, correct modifier order, pluralize when generalizing, and use standard phrases ('through advertising').

× It's a familiar concept in the customer unconsciousness.

✓ It's a familiar concept in customers' subconsciousness.

Errors: 'customer unconsciousness' incorrect collocation; better 'customers' subconscious' or 'subconsciousness' with possessive. Suggestion: use correct collocations like 'in customers' subconscious' or 'in the minds of customers'.

× Not really, since I am always disturbed by the advertisements every time when I want to see a video and I feel very depressed in because being disturbed by advertisement makes me distract from my own previous work.

✓ Not really, because I am always disturbed by advertisements when I want to watch a video, and I feel very frustrated because being interrupted by ads distracts me from my work.

Errors: misuse of 'since' at clause start, redundant 'every time when', wrong verb 'see' -> 'watch', 'depressed in' incorrect, article omission 'by advertisement' -> 'by ads', 'makes me distract' incorrect - should be 'distracts me'. Suggestion: use 'because', simplify clauses, use correct verbs and subject-verb agreement.

× However, I understand that having advertisements. Makes the YouTube channel to make their own profit because we use their service freely.

✓ However, I understand that having advertisements allows YouTube channels to make a profit because we use their services for free.

Errors: sentence incorrectly split with a period creating a fragment; 'Makes the YouTube channel to make their own profit' incorrect structure and infinitive use; 'their service' singular better plural 'services'. Suggestion: combine into one sentence, use 'allows ... to' and correct pluralization.

× I like the style that advertising links their product to our lives, such as Uber Eats.

✓ I like advertisements that link their products to our lives, such as Uber Eats.

Errors: 'the style that advertising links' awkward; use plural 'advertisements' and 'products' to match 'their'; 'that link' relative clause needed. Suggestion: use clear noun phrase and relative clause structure.

× Uber Eats advertisements always have a practical meaning to the customer because it always link the food service to our own daily experiences.

✓ Uber Eats advertisements always have practical meaning for customers because they always link the food service to our daily experiences.

Errors: 'a practical meaning to the customer' awkward - use 'practical meaning for customers'; 'it always link' subject-verb disagreement; 'it' should be 'they' (ads) and 'link' -> 'link' remains but with plural subject. Suggestion: ensure subject and verb agree and use plural when speaking generally.

× That kind of advertisements. Me more impressed and also appealed by them because the event in the advertisement can be encountered by me.

✓ Those kinds of advertisements impress me more and also appeal to me because the events in the advertisement can happen to me.

Errors: sentence fragment 'That kind of advertisements.'; wrong word order 'Me more impressed' should be 'impress me more'; 'appealed by them' incorrect voice - use 'appeal to me'; 'can be encountered by me' awkward - use 'can happen to me' or 'I can encounter'. Suggestion: form complete sentences, use correct subject-verb order and natural verbs.

× Not really, since I was a picky buyer I always compare the product price and the quality at once and I like to shop things in face to face because in that way I can check the quality and also take a look at it.

✓ Not really, because when I was a picky buyer I always compared product prices and quality and preferred to shop face-to-face so I could check the quality and look at items in person.

Errors: tense inconsistency: 'was' past with 'always compare' present; use past 'compared'; 'product price and the quality' awkward - use 'product prices and quality'; 'at once' incorrect; 'shop things in face to face' incorrect - use 'shop face-to-face' or 'shop in person'. Suggestion: keep past tense for past habits, pluralize where needed, and use natural adverbials.

× And also I think buying things in the advertisement may encounter some risk since you you may not know the buyers and maybe cheated.

✓ Also, I think buying items advertised online may involve some risks because you may not know the sellers and could be cheated.

Errors: repetition 'you you'; 'buying things in the advertisement' awkward - use 'buying items advertised online' or 'buying through ads'; 'buyers' incorrect - should be 'sellers'; 'maybe cheated' should be 'could be cheated' or 'may be cheated'. Suggestion: choose clear nouns, avoid repetition, and use correct modal verbs for possibility.