Advertisement— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make the answer more natural and complete by using a clear topic sentence, adding a brief reason or example, and using linking words. Keep it under five sentences and avoid repetition.

Exemplo: Yes — I see a lot of ads on my phone and computer, especially in free apps. For example, music and game apps often show video ads between tasks, which interrupts what I’m doing. Because they’re free, I understand why ads are there, but they can be quite distracting.

Sugestão: Give a clear, complete topic sentence and finish your thought with specific details. Avoid repetition and use linking words to explain why it impressed you. Provide context and a short conclusion.

Exemplo: Yes. A public service ad in China impressed me when I was a child because it showed children washing food for their parents to highlight family care. The ad used emotional music and simple scenes, so it felt very touching and taught me to appreciate my parents.

Sugestão: Use clearer vocabulary and correct grammar; link ideas with words like 'however' and be specific about why you don’t pay attention. Keep it concise and avoid vague phrases like 'do my things'.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. There are many ads on buses and trains; however, I rarely notice them because I usually focus on my phone or reading. Occasionally a very creative poster catches my eye, but mostly I ignore them.

Sugestão: State your opinion clearly in one sentence, then give 1–2 specific reasons using linking words such as 'because' or 'however'. Avoid long run-on sentences and be more precise with vocabulary.

Exemplo: No, I don’t like most advertisements because there are too many low-quality or irrelevant ads online and on the street. However, I do appreciate useful ads that inform me about real discounts or services.

Sugestão: Begin with a clear topic sentence and then provide a specific reason or short example. Use linking words like 'because' and avoid repeating adjectives. Be slightly more precise about what makes them effective.

Exemplo: I prefer nonprofit or public-service ads because they often tell warm, emotional stories that encourage positive behaviour. For example, a short film about helping elderly neighbours taught me the importance of small acts of kindness.

Sugestão: Answer directly, then give a specific example and explain why the ad influenced you. Correct minor grammar (e.g. 'I’m easily influenced') and use linking words like 'for example' to make it coherent.

Exemplo: Yes, I often buy products after seeing ads because they highlight the benefits clearly. For example, a video ad for a vacuum cleaner showed how quickly it cleaned pet hair, so I bought it after reading a few reviews.

× Yes I do and especially in some free applications there are many advertisements

✓ Yes, I do, and especially in some free applications there are many advertisements.

Missing commas for clarity (punctuation not in list but acceptable) and article use is correct; provide minor punctuation only. Suggest adding commas after 'Yes' and before 'and' to improve readability.

× Yes there is when I was a child.

✓ Yes, there was when I was a child.

The clause refers to an advertisement that existed in the past, so 'is' should be past tense 'was' to match 'when I was a child'. Also add a comma after 'Yes' for clarity.

× There was a famous non profit advertisement in China that shows children children wash food for their parents and lets us know the

✓ There was a famous non-profit advertisement in China that showed children washing food for their parents and made us aware of the issue.

Several structural problems: tense consistency (use past 'showed'), repeated word 'children children', verb forms ('wash' should be gerund 'washing'), and an incomplete ending. Revised to past tense and correct verb forms. 'Non-profit' needs hyphenation.

× There are many advertisements on transportation vehicles, whatever the plan or the trains, but I didn't pay much attention to them just scheme and do my things.

✓ There are many advertisements on transportation vehicles, whether planes or trains, but I didn't pay much attention to them; I just ignored them and did my own things.

Incorrect word 'whatever' should be 'whether' to present alternatives; 'plan' is wrong word 'plane'; awkward phrasing 'just scheme and do my things' is ungrammatical — replace with 'ignored them and did my own things' for clarity and correctness.

× No, I don't although advertisement is an important part of commerce activity, but it really bothers me there are too many junk advertisements, whatever on the phone or on the street is really annoying.

✓ No, I don't. Although advertising is an important part of commercial activity, it really bothers me that there are too many junk advertisements; whether on the phone or on the street, they are really annoying.

Multiple issues: run-on sentence and conjunction misuse — split into two sentences. 'Advertisement' should be 'advertising' as a general concept; 'commerce activity' should be 'commercial activity'; 'whatever' should be 'whether'; pronoun agreement 'they' refers to advertisements. Rearranged for grammatical accuracy.

× I like non profit advertisements. There are always some warm story which is really touching and meaningful and it is really educational for people.

✓ I like non-profit advertisements. There are always some warm stories that are really touching and meaningful, and they are very educational for people.

Plural agreement: 'some warm story' should be 'some warm stories'. Use 'that' for defining clauses instead of 'which' and ensure subject-verb agreement 'stories that are'. Replace 'it is' with 'they are' to agree with plural 'stories'. Hyphenate 'non-profit'.

× To be honest, I usually buy something after seeing advertisement.

✓ To be honest, I usually buy something after seeing an advertisement.

Article error: singular countable noun 'advertisement' needs the indefinite article 'an'. Also present tense 'usually buy' is fine; add 'an' for correctness.

× I'm easily to be influenced by the advertising because they always show the advantages to me.

✓ I'm easily influenced by advertising because it always shows me the advantages.

Incorrect construction 'easily to be influenced' — use 'easily influenced'. 'The advertising' as a general concept should be 'advertising' or 'it'. Use singular pronoun 'it' to refer to 'advertising' and place indirect object correctly: 'shows me the advantages.'