Advertisement— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid filler words (umm, like) and repetition.

Exemplo: Yes, I see many advertisements on my phone and computer. For example, when I watch YouTube videos I often have to view ads because I don’t have a premium subscription, so ads appear before or during the videos.

Sugestão: Answer with a clear memory or state you can’t recall details, then give a specific reason why it was memorable. Use linking words (for example, because) and avoid contradictory statements.

Exemplo: Yes, I remember an emotional TV advertisement from Thailand that stayed with me. It showed the close relationship between parents and children and highlighted small acts of care, which made it very touching and memorable.

Sugestão: Start with a direct yes/no and then explain with one or two specific reasons. Use linking words (because, so) and avoid unnecessary phrases like 'you know'.

Exemplo: Yes, I see a lot of advertising on trains and buses. Because transport companies sell space to advertisers, posters and digital screens are common, and I often notice them when I choose not to use my phone during the commute.

Sugestão: Give a clear position and then support it with specific examples. Use linking words (however, for example) and avoid hesitation words. Be concise and organize ideas logically.

Exemplo: It depends. I like ads that are creative and convey positive messages because they entertain and inform. However, I dislike ads that exaggerate insecurities, such as those that overemphasize youth or beauty standards.

Sugestão: Answer directly with the type you prefer, then give specific reasons and examples. Use clearer vocabulary and avoid unclear words (e.g., 'Homestake'). Keep within 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: I prefer beauty advertisements because I’m interested in makeup and skincare. For example, I enjoy ads that show product application and before-and-after results, and I’m attracted to well-designed visuals and a compelling storyline.

× Umm of hers because like for example, I always watch YouTube YouTube videos and I always watch those advertisements umm without my will because like I didn't purchase the premium, so that's why I'm watching it all the time.

✓ Umm, I often see advertisements because, for example, I always watch YouTube videos and I see those ads against my will since I didn't buy premium, so I watch them all the time.

This sentence has multiple structural issues: redundant phrases ('YouTube YouTube'), informal fillers ('like', 'umm'), and awkward clauses. Classify as sentence structure errors (ID 26). Suggestions: remove repeated words, reduce fillers, use clear conjunctions ('because' and 'since') and correct verb forms ('see' instead of 'watch' for ads; 'buy' instead of 'purchase the premium'). Keep tense consistent (present simple for habitual actions).

× Oh yes, I remember, I don't remember that, umm, what is the detail of it, But basically this is an advertisement from Thailand and that is really touching because this talk about the relationship between the parents and the kids and really pure and really touching. Umm flop.

✓ Oh yes, I remember some parts but not the details. Basically it is an advertisement from Thailand and it was very touching because it talked about the relationship between parents and children and felt very pure.

Multiple issues: contradictory phrases ('I remember, I don't remember'), awkward question phrasing, incorrect verb forms ('this talk about'), and informal interjections. Classify as sentence structure errors (ID 26). Suggestions: separate ideas into clear sentences, use past tense for a childhood advertisement ('was', 'talked'), and use 'parents and children' for natural phrasing. Remove fillers and unclear words like 'flop'.

× Umm, yes, I do, because you know, sometimes, umm, those public transportation just offer umm, free advertisement, right? And then I do see a lot because sometimes I just don't want to play phone during my commute time and then that's why I watch it is sometimes.

✓ Umm, yes, I do, because sometimes public transportation displays free advertisements. I see a lot of them because sometimes I don't want to use my phone during my commute, so I look at the ads.

Problems include article and countability errors ('those public transportation', 'free advertisement') and awkward phrasing. Classify as incorrect use of articles (ID 22) and sentence structure errors. Suggestions: use 'public transportation' without 'those', use plural 'advertisements' or 'ads', and use 'use my phone' instead of 'play phone'. Keep sentences concise and consistent in tense (present simple for habitual actions).

× It depends umm if those umm advertisement with umm creativity and positive in message and then I would just like umm I like those advertisement but those advertisement just umm over exaggerating some anxiety for example age, beauty, facial.

✓ It depends. If those advertisements are creative and have a positive message, I would like them. However, many ads over-exaggerate anxieties about things like age, beauty, and facial appearance.

Errors: incorrect adjective/adverb forms and missing verbs ('advertisement with creativity and positive in message'), and pluralization. Classify as incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs (ID 13) and singular/plural issues. Suggestions: use adjectives with linking verbs ('are creative', 'have a positive message'), use plural 'advertisements', and use 'over-exaggerate anxieties about' for clarity. Maintain present simple for general opinions."

× Uh actually is beauty advertisement because I love umm, dual makeup and I always attracted by those like Homestake. So yeah, I really interested in it and most of it just umm, have a really nice design of a whole advertisement and the plot is really attractive.

✓ Actually, it's beauty advertising because I love dual makeup and I am always attracted to those brands. So yeah, I'm really interested in it, and most of them have a very nice overall design and an attractive plot.

Errors include missing linking verb ('is' without subject), wrong verb forms ('I always attracted by'), incorrect prepositions ('attracted by' should be 'attracted to'), and singular/plural mismatches. Classify mainly as verb in the present participle form issues (ID 10) and subject-verb agreement. Suggestions: use contractions and complete verb phrases ('it's', 'I am attracted to', 'most of them have'), ensure noun-pronoun agreement, and use 'advertising' or 'ads' consistently. Use present simple for general preferences.