Advertisement— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be clearer and more coherent. Start with a direct topic sentence answering the question, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors (e.g., "pop up" instead of "click up").

Exemplo: Yes, I see a lot of advertisements on my phone and computer. For example, every time I open apps like TikTok or Taobao, video ads pop up before the content, which I find annoying because they interrupt what I’m doing.

Sugestão: Answer directly and give a clear specific memory or admit you don't remember concisely, then offer a brief example. Use correct verb forms and linking words to make it coherent.

Exemplo: I don't remember many ads from my childhood, but one that stood out later was a Huawei car advertisement. It impressed me because the visuals were cinematic and the music felt dramatic, so the ad stayed in my mind.

Sugestão: Good content and specificity. Improve fluency by using smoother linking words and reducing redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific examples in one or two short sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I see many advertisements on trains and other transport. For instance, buses and subways often carry ads for instant noodles, clothing brands and travel bags, so the campaigns cover a wide range of products.

Sugestão: Finish your thought and avoid hesitation. Begin with a clear opinion, then explain with one or two concise reasons using linking words. Use correct expressions (e.g., "well-produced" and "ordinary").

Exemplo: I don't have strong feelings about advertisements. If an ad is well-produced, I enjoy it as an interesting short video, but if it's ordinary or repetitive, I usually ignore it.

Sugestão: Good idea and descriptive language, but reduce repetition and improve sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific features you like and an example.

Exemplo: I prefer ads that are like short movies. For example, I enjoy storytelling ads with beautiful, elegant scenes and a clear emotional arc because they feel artistic and memorable.

× Every time I open an app like TikTok or Tao Bao, the advertising will just click up and I'm a I don't like this.

✓ Every time I open an app like TikTok or Taobao, an advertisement just pops up and I don't like it.

The original uses 'the advertising will just click up' which is incorrect verb choice and form. 'Click up' is not idiomatic for ads appearing; use 'pop up' (present simple for habitual action). Also 'I'm a I don't like this' is ungrammatical and should be 'I don't like it.' Use 'an advertisement' (singular) or 'ads' (plural) to match meaning. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual occurrences and the idiom 'pop up'.

× A child and sorry I don't really remember but there is a new advertiser which is producted by the Huawei, a car advertiser which really impressed me.

✓ I was a child, sorry I don't really remember, but there was a new advertisement produced by Huawei for a car that really impressed me.

The original is fragmented and has multiple structural issues: 'A child and sorry' lacks a verb and subject structure; 'new advertiser' is wrong word choice (advertiser vs advertisement); 'producted' is incorrect past participle. Use past tense 'I was a child' and 'there was' for existence in past. Use 'produced by Huawei' and 'for a car' to clarify. Suggestion: keep past tense consistent and use correct noun 'advertisement' and verb 'produced'.

× there is a new advertiser which is producted by the Huawei

✓ there was a new advertisement that was produced by Huawei

The word 'producted' is not the correct past participle; the correct form is 'produced'. Also 'the Huawei' is unnecessary; proper noun 'Huawei' does not need 'the'. Use past tense 'was' to match 'when you were a child'. Suggestion: use accurate past participle forms and avoid adding 'the' to company names.

× Yes, not only the train, the car, the bus, the subway or the plane everywhere I can see the advertisements and they are about all sorts.

✓ Yes, not only on trains, but also in cars, on buses, in the subway and on planes I can see advertisements about all sorts of things.

Prepositions of place are incorrect: use 'on trains', 'in cars' (or 'in a car'), 'on buses', 'in the subway', 'on planes'. The original also lacks connectors; add 'but also' for parallel structure and 'things' to complete 'all sorts'. Suggestion: use correct prepositions for modes of transport and maintain parallel structure.

× So they are about all kinds of things for example some instant foods, clothing, bags.

✓ They are about all kinds of things, for example instant food, clothing and bags.

The phrase 'some instant foods' is odd; 'instant food' or 'instant foods' without 'some' is more natural. Add commas and 'and' for list structure. Suggestion: use correct countable/uncountable nouns and list punctuation.

× Actually I have I have no feeling about this if the advertising produced well, I'll just see it as a short video which is very interesting.

✓ Actually, I have no strong feelings about ads. If an advertisement is well produced, I just see it as an interesting short video.

Repetition 'I have I have' and awkward clause order make the sentence unclear. Use plural 'feelings' and 'ads' or 'advertisements'. Use conditional structure 'If an advertisement is well produced' with present simple in conditional clause and main clause 'I just see it as...' Suggestion: remove repetition, use correct conditional grammar and collocations 'well produced' and 'short video'.

× But if they are formal or normal then I

✓ But if they are ordinary or dull, then I ignore them.

Original sentence is incomplete and vague ('formal or normal' and ends abruptly). Provide a complete main clause with a clear verb, e.g., 'I ignore them'. Choose a clearer adjective like 'ordinary' or 'dull'. Suggestion: always finish conditional sentences with a main clause stating the result.

× I really like the advertisement just like a short movie.

✓ I really like advertisements that are like short movies.

Use plural 'advertisements' to refer to the general category and the relative clause 'that are like short movies' to describe them. 'Just like' is colloquial but acceptable; 'are like' is clearer. Suggestion: use plural for general statements and a relative clause to describe preferred type.

× You know that's the type is the type is just like the art telling story and the scenes are beautiful and elegant.

✓ You know, that type is like an artistic story, and the scenes are beautiful and elegant.

Original repeats 'the type is the type is' and uses awkward phrasing 'art telling story'. Use 'artistic story' or 'an artful story' to convey meaning. Clean up repetition and use commas to separate clauses. Suggestion: avoid repetition and choose correct adjective 'artistic' and noun order 'artistic story'.