Advertisement— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and unnatural phrases (e.g., “every episode” is unclear). Use accurate vocabulary like “ads” or “commercials” and mention the subscription service name or type (ad-free subscription).

Exemplo: Yes. I see a lot of ads on social media platforms such as Instagram and YouTube, and they often interrupt what I’m watching. For that reason I pay for ad-free subscriptions on some services so I can watch content without frequent interruptions.

Sugestão: Organize the reply: begin with a clear statement about the memorable ad, then give specific details (what the ad showed, why it impressed you, and the result). Avoid filler words and unclear phrases (e.g., “dead football”). Use past tense consistently and precise vocabulary.

Exemplo: Yes. A World Cup commercial featuring Lionel Messi stayed with me when I was a child. The ad showed Messi playing with a special football and it looked so cool that I begged my father to buy the same ball, and he finally bought it for me.

Sugestão: Answer directly and clearly: if you haven’t used trains, say so, then describe where you do see ads (billboards, buses, taxis) with specific examples. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., “billboards,” “bus adverts,” “metro”). Avoid vague or garbled phrases.

Exemplo: Not really — I rarely travel by train or subway. In my city I mostly see advertisements on billboards along the main roads and on buses and bus stops.

Sugestão: Start with a clear opinion, then give specific reasons and a brief example. Keep sentences concise and avoid repetition. Use natural phrases like “help promote a business” and “help me learn about new products.”

Exemplo: Yes, I do. Ads are useful because they help promote a brand and attract customers, which would be important if I start my own business. As a consumer, adverts also help me discover new products I might want to try.

Sugestão: Be specific and use appropriate emotion words (e.g., “hungry” or “appetised” rather than “anxious”). Give one or two concrete examples of food ads you like and explain why (visuals, music, descriptions). Use linking words to connect reason and result.

Exemplo: I prefer food advertisements because they often look appetising and make me want to try the product. For example, a close-up of sizzling food or a chef describing a new recipe usually catches my attention and tempts me to buy it.

× Well, yes, I often see the advertisement when I'm on the social media like Instagram, YouTube or Netflix and it disturbs me so much and it irritates me.

✓ Well, yes, I often see advertisements when I'm on social media like Instagram, YouTube, or Netflix, and they disturb me so much that they irritate me.

The original uses the definite article 'the' incorrectly with 'advertisement' and 'the social media'. Use plural 'advertisements' for general reference and 'social media' without 'the'. Also 'it' should be 'they' to agree with plural 'advertisements'. Combine clauses for clarity. Suggestion: Use plural nouns for general references and match pronouns to their antecedents.

× That's why I have purchased a subscription for every episode that I don't get disturbed easily.

✓ That's why I purchased a subscription so I wouldn't be disturbed easily.

The original mixes present perfect 'have purchased' with a clause that uses incorrect passive phrasing 'that I don't get disturbed easily.' Using simple past 'purchased' fits the narrative and 'so I wouldn't be disturbed easily' correctly expresses purpose/result with a modal. Also use active structure rather than passive 'get disturbed.' Suggestion: Use consistent tense and modal forms to express purpose (would/so that + subject + wouldn't + verb).

× Uh, yes, when I was a child and I was watching FIFA World Cup with my father, uh, in aid of, uh, I guess football, football shows up, showed up and I was so excited about that showed up because the Messi was in it and he was playing with this dead football.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I was watching the FIFA World Cup with my father, and a football advertisement appeared; I was so excited because Messi was in it and he was playing with a football.

Several issues: unnecessary articles ('the FIFA World Cup' is acceptable but 'the Messi' is incorrect), tense and awkward phrasing 'football shows up, showed up' should be 'advertisement appeared.' 'dead football' is likely wrong word choice; use 'a football.' Remove filler words. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct article usage with names. Suggestion: Use simple past consistently for past events, use correct articles with proper nouns, and avoid redundant words.

× And I was so excited and I said my father that I want to purchase this football, please, please, please.

✓ I was so excited that I told my father I wanted to buy that football, please.

Use 'told my father' rather than 'said my father'. For past context use past tense 'wanted' and 'buy' instead of 'purchase' for natural speech. Pronoun 'this' in past narrative should be 'that.' Suggestion: Use 'tell'/'told' for reporting speech and keep tense consistent.

× And he did purchase.

✓ And he bought it.

Use simple past 'bought' for completed action; 'did purchase' is grammatical but unnatural in conversation. Include object 'it' for clarity. Suggestion: Use common past-tense verbs for natural spoken English.

× Well, I have not traveled on the trains and the subways, but in my area where the UH airs mostly published and shows are on the billboards, so I guess that's it.

✓ Well, I have not traveled on trains or the subway, but in my area ads are mostly displayed on billboards, so I guess that's it.

Use 'trains' and 'the subway' consistently (or 'trains and subways' plural). The clause 'where the UH airs mostly published and shows' is unclear; replace with 'ads are mostly displayed.' 'Advertisement' shortened to 'ads' is natural. Fix article usage and word order. Suggestion: Use clear subject-verb-object order and standard collocations like 'displayed on billboards.'

× Yes, if I would open a brand in the future, obviously for that I need an advertisement to attract customers and other people to purchase my product.

✓ Yes, if I open a brand in the future, I will need advertising to attract customers and persuade people to buy my product.

Conditional structure: use 'if I open' (first conditional) and 'will need' rather than 'if I would open.' Replace 'an advertisement' with uncountable 'advertising' for the concept, and use 'buy' or 'purchase' consistently. 'Other people' is redundant. Suggestion: Use correct conditional forms (if + present, will + base verb) and choose countable vs uncountable nouns appropriately.

× And for now, if I I am a customer, another person is selling me products.

✓ For now, as a customer, I buy products from other people.

Original has repeated 'I' and awkward passive/continuous structure. Use concise active structure: 'as a customer, I buy products from others.' Suggestion: Remove repetitions and use active verbs for clarity.

× So I guess I advertisement is a great opportunity for me to to explore the product.

✓ So I guess advertising is a great opportunity for me to explore products.

'I advertisement' is ungrammatical; use 'advertising' (noun) or 'an advertisement' with correct placement. Remove duplicated 'to'. Use plural 'products' for general reference. Suggestion: Ensure noun forms fit sentence structure and watch for duplicated words.

× Well, I like the ad which shows food and other eating products because it really makes me anxious and, you know, excited about the new products so I want to try them.

✓ I like ads that show food and other edible products because they make me feel excited about new items, so I want to try them.

'Makes me anxious' likely wrong word choice (anxious implies worry); use 'excited.' Use plural 'ads' and 'edible products' instead of 'eating products.' Match pronouns 'they' to plural 'ads.' Suggestion: Choose adjectives that match intended meaning and keep number agreement.