Advertisement— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Keep answers clear and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and unclear phrasing. Use linking words (for example, however) and correct word choices (e.g. “urged me to buy it,” “refused”) to improve naturalness.

Exemplo: When I was a child, a toy commercial really impressed me. The ad made the toy look amazing, so I begged my mother to buy it, but she always refused because it was expensive and not very useful. In hindsight, I think she made a wise decision.

Sugestão: Answer directly then support with a clear example. Fix grammar (subject-verb agreement) and reduce fillers. Use linking words like 'for example' and 'also' to connect ideas, and be specific about what you saw and why.

Exemplo: Yes, there is a lot of advertising on public transport. For example, when I took the train to Canton, the screens showed short videos promoting Cantonese films and local culture, which seemed designed to attract tourists and support the entertainment industry.

Sugestão: Be concise and avoid long confusing anecdotes that distract from the main point. State your opinion clearly and give one relevant, briefly explained reason. Use correct tense and vocabulary (e.g. 'intrusive ads', 'missed a critical treatment window').

Exemplo: No, I don't like advertisements because many are intrusive. For example, pop-up ads can block important notifications, which could be dangerous in emergencies, so I find them annoying and sometimes harmful.

Sugestão: Answer with a clear topic sentence describing the type of ad you like, then give specific features and a short reason. Use linking words (for example, furthermore) and improve word choice (e.g. 'catchy slogans' instead of 'lines').

Exemplo: I prefer ads that are short and memorable with catchy slogans. For example, commercials with a funny jingle or a clever slogan stay in my mind, making me more likely to remember the product later.

Sugestão: Give a direct yes/no and follow with concrete examples and organisation words. Remove fillers and unclear phrases. Be specific about types of ads and where they appear (websites, video platforms, apps).

Exemplo: Yes, I see advertisements on my phone and computer all the time. For instance, websites show banner ads, video platforms play pre-roll ads before videos, and many apps display full-screen or pop-up ads.

× Yeah, I remember, I remember a toy commercial advertisement made a lasting impression on me and I always commend to buy it and but she refused me all the time.

✓ Yeah, I remember a toy commercial that made a lasting impression on me, and I always wanted to buy it, but she refused me all the time.

Original sentence used 'commend to buy' which is incorrect verb usage; 'want' + infinitive or 'wanted to buy' is appropriate. Also remove repeated 'I remember' for conciseness and change 'advertisement made' to 'commercial that made' to connect clauses correctly.

× And as I grow older, I just find it really useless and it's really expensive and it's really wise of my mom not to buy net product for me.

✓ As I grew older, I found it really useless and really expensive, and it was wise of my mom not to buy that product for me.

Tense inconsistency: speaker starts with present 'grow' but describing past feelings about the toy—use past tense 'grew' and 'found'. 'Net product' is unclear; changed to 'that product'. Also use 'was wise' to match past context.

× Yeah, of course, just like and the authority want to make their entertainment industry more popular and engaging, so most of the train will umm play some video about their own culture.

✓ Yeah, of course. The authorities want to make their entertainment industry more popular and engaging, so most trains will play videos about their own culture.

Subject-verb agreement and number: 'authority' should be plural 'authorities' to match 'their', and 'want' agrees with plural. 'Most of the train' is incorrect; use 'most trains'. 'Play some video' -> 'play videos'. Removed filler words for clarity.

× Just like when I and took the train to Canton, they always playing they were always playing some video about Cantonese film.

✓ For example, when I took the train to Canton, they were always playing videos about Cantonese films.

Redundant words and incorrect tense/form: 'I and took' is wrong; use 'I took'. 'They always playing' lacks auxiliary; correct past progressive is 'they were always playing'. Pluralize 'films' and 'videos' for natural English.

× No, I don't like advertisement.

✓ No, I don't like advertisements.

Count noun error with pronoun/number: 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' when speaking generally. Also article could be used ('the advertisement') if referring to a specific one.

× Do you know that Neil is an elderly woman who tried to call the police for her husband, but, uh, there are too much, uh, intrusive advertisement imaging on her phone.

✓ Do you know that Neil is an elderly woman who tried to call the police for her husband, but there was too much intrusive advertising on her phone.

Preposition and noun form errors: 'too much' is correct with uncountable nouns like 'advertising', not 'advertisement imaging'. Also use past 'was' to match 'tried'. 'On her phone' is correct placement.

× So these two couple missed the golden window for emergency treatment.

✓ So the two of them missed the golden window for emergency treatment.

Phrase order and articles: 'these two couple' is ungrammatical. Use 'the two of them' or 'the couple' depending on meaning. 'Couple' as noun requires 'the couple' or 'a couple', and 'couple' singular would need different verb.

× I So I really hate advertisements.

✓ So I really hate advertisements.

Remove extra 'I' and keep present tense 'hate' if expressing a general feeling. The original had an extraneous pronoun causing a fragmented sentence.

× What they must definitely learn video from because I think the lines are really memorable and leave me a great impression, so I can remember it all the time.

✓ They must definitely learn from the video because I think the lines are really memorable and leave a strong impression on me, so I can remember them all the time.

Incorrect sentence structure and verb usage: 'What they must definitely learn video from' is ungrammatical. Reorder to 'They must learn from the video.' Use 'leave a strong impression on me' and pluralize 'them' to refer to 'lines'.

× And additionally, I think advertisement with some funny lyric can also help me to, uh, become more interested in their product.

✓ Additionally, I think advertisements with funny lyrics can also make me more interested in their products.

Agreement and word choice: 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' when generalizing. 'Lyric' should be plural 'lyrics'. Use 'make me more interested' instead of 'help me to become more interested' for conciseness and naturalness; 'their product' to 'their products' for general reference.

× Yet there are various advertisements coming from my phone just like even there are plenty of entrance for the advertisement.

✓ There are various advertisements coming to my phone; there are even plenty of entry points for advertisements.

Word choice and tense: 'coming from my phone' implies ads originate from phone; 'coming to my phone' is clearer. 'Entrance for the advertisement' is awkward; 'entry points for advertisements' is correct.

× Just like ranging from the website, the video platform there are plenty of advertisement that you have to face.

✓ They range from websites to video platforms; there are plenty of advertisements that you have to face.

Preposition and pluralization: 'ranging from the website, the video platform' is ungrammatical. Use 'range from websites to video platforms' and plural 'advertisements'. Also reorder into two clauses for clarity.