Advertisement— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more fluent and concise: state the ad and why it impressed you with one clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Reduce filler words (uh, um) and correct small grammar (a advertisement → an advertisement). Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' to make reasons clear.

Exemplo: I remember an advertisement for Coca-Cola from around 2008 that impressed me. It stood out because it used joyful music and showed people celebrating together, which made the brand feel warm and friendly. For example, there was a scene of friends sharing drinks at a party, and that image has stayed with me.

Sugestão: Give a direct topic sentence and organize examples coherently. Avoid repetition and mispronounced or incorrect words (bass → buses, plane launch → planes). Use linking words ('for example', 'especially') correctly and provide one or two specific examples of where ads appear and what they advertise.

Exemplo: Yes, I see a lot of advertising on public transport. For example, buses and metros often carry large posters for electronics such as refrigerators and televisions. Especially on the metro, there are full-car campaigns that promote air conditioners and consumer appliances.

Sugestão: Start with a clear opinion and explain reasons with polite language. Avoid awkward phrasing and inappropriate examples that may sound judgmental. Replace repetition and refine vocabulary ('necessary publicly' → 'useful to the public' or 'informative'). Use linking words ('because', 'however').

Exemplo: It depends — I like advertisements that provide useful information to the public because they help me learn about services or safety messages. However, I find some ads for purely private products unnecessary; for instance, excessive promotion of niche items can feel like clutter.

Sugestão: Answer with a clear topic sentence describing the style you prefer, then give specific features and a brief reason. Remove repetition and fillers. Use linking words ('because', 'for example') and precise vocabulary ('cheerful music', 'family-friendly scenes').

Exemplo: I prefer advertisements that use cheerful music and positive imagery because they create a pleasant mood. For example, ads that show green outdoor scenes, children playing, and people dancing feel warm and memorable to me.

Sugestão: Provide a direct answer and expand with specific frequency and reactions. Correct minor errors ('white advertisement' may be 'a lot of ads' or 'targeted ads') and use linking words ('often', 'sometimes', 'for example'). Describe why they irritate you with one specific reason.

Exemplo: Yes, I often see many advertisements when I use Facebook and other apps because I scroll my feed frequently. For example, there are targeted sponsored posts and pop-ups, and they irritate me when they interrupt videos or repeat the same product too often.

× Yes. Uh, there was a advertisement which was, uh, Coca-Cola advertisement, uh, and the time was, uh, most probably 2008 or 2009.

✓ Yes. Uh, there was an advertisement which was a Coca-Cola advertisement, and the time was most probably 2008 or 2009.

Use 'there was' correctly with the indefinite article 'an' before a word starting with a vowel sound (advertisement). Also use 'a' before 'Coca-Cola advertisement' because it is a single instance. Remove extra fillers to improve clarity.

× Yeah. I, I, I see a lot of advertisement in train as well as bass, plane launch, et cetera.

✓ Yeah. I see a lot of advertisements on trains as well as buses, planes, launches, etc.

Use 'on' for modes of transport (on trains, on buses, on planes). Use plural 'advertisements' to match 'a lot of'. Correct 'bass' to 'buses' and 'plane launch' to 'planes' or 'plane' depending on meaning; here 'planes' fits common contexts. Remove repeated filler words.

× Especially on metro rail, there is a huge advertisement section like freeze, television, air conditioner, etcetera.

✓ Especially on the metro rail, there are huge advertisement sections for freezers, televisions, air conditioners, etc.

Use 'there are' for plural 'sections'. Add the definite article 'the' before 'metro rail' for specificity. Use plural nouns for the examples (freezers, televisions, air conditioners) and correct 'freeze' to 'freezer'.

× It depends. If the things are, uh, necessary publicly and necessary, then I, I would like to see those advertisement.

✓ It depends. If the things are publicly necessary and needed, then I would like to see those advertisements.

Use plural 'advertisements' to match 'those'. Rephrase 'necessary publicly and necessary' to 'publicly necessary and needed' for clarity and correct word order.

× If the things are not necessarily like condoms, uh, I think this type of, uh, commodities need not to advertise.

✓ If the things are not necessary, like condoms, I think these types of commodities do not need to be advertised.

Use 'necessary' instead of 'necessarily' (adverb vs adjective). Use 'these types of commodities' for agreement and plural. Use correct verb pattern 'do not need to be advertised' instead of 'need not to advertise'.

× I like advertisement, like advertisement, uh, would, uh, mix of some songs, uh, cheerful music or with, uh, green scenarios and children or people are like dancing.

✓ I like advertisements that mix songs or cheerful music with green scenery and show children or people dancing.

Use plural 'advertisements'. Use a relative clause 'that mix' to describe the adverts. Use 'green scenery' (uncountable) and 'show children or people dancing' for correct verb structure. Remove filler words.

× Yeah that kind of.

✓ Yeah, that kind of thing.

Add the noun 'thing' to complete the phrase 'that kind of', which otherwise is incomplete. Include a comma for natural speech pause.

× Yeah, I see white advertisement in my Facebook when I'm scrolling my feed.

✓ Yeah, I see white advertisements on my Facebook when I'm scrolling through my feed.

Use plural 'advertisements' to match 'see'. Use 'on my Facebook' is acceptable but 'on Facebook' or 'on my Facebook' both work; use 'on my Facebook'. Use 'scrolling through my feed' for natural collocation. 'White advertisement' is unclear; if meaning 'sponsored' or 'banner' use a clearer adjective.

× I saw various types of advertisement.

✓ I see various types of advertisements.

Maintain present tense to match surrounding sentences ('I see'). Use plural 'advertisements'.

× Sometimes those advertisement irritates me a lot.

✓ Sometimes those advertisements irritate me a lot.

Use plural 'advertisements' and correct verb form 'irritate' to agree with plural subject 'those advertisements'.