Advertisement— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Cevap kısa ve anlaşılır olmalı; konu cümlesiyle başlayıp sonra bir-iki destekleyici ayrıntı ekleyin. Ayrıca zaman ifadelerini ve dilbilgisini düzeltin. Örneğin, ‘When I was in fourth grade’ gibi doğru bir başlangıç yapın. Reklamın neden etkileyici olduğunu açık şekilde belirtin (ne gösteriyordu, hangi duyguyu uyandırdı, ne hatırlıyorsunuz?). Bağlaçlar kullanarak cümlenizi mantıklı hale getirin (for example, because, so). Gereksiz tekrarları ve anlam belirsizliklerini çıkarın.

Exemplo: Yes. When I was in fourth grade, I remember a TV commercial about a young swimmer that inspired me. The ad showed the swimmer training alone and overcoming challenges, which made me admire her determination. Because of that, I felt motivated to try individual sports like swimming myself.

Sugestão: Soruya doğrudan yanıt verin ve net örnekler verin. Şu anki cevap karışık ve dilbilgisi hataları çok; ‘yes’ veya ‘no’ ile başlayıp ardından nedenlerini ve örnekleri kısa cümlelerle açıklayın. Ulaşım araçlarında gördüğünüz reklam türlerini (poster, dijital ekran, billboard) ve nerede sık gördüğünüzü belirtin. Bağlaçlarla akışı sağlayın (for example, on buses, at stations).

Exemplo: Yes, I see a lot of advertising on public transport. For example, there are posters and digital screens on buses and trains, and large billboards at major stations. These ads usually promote clothes, electronics, or local services, so they are hard to miss.

Sugestão: Cevabınızı net bir görüşle başlatın (evet/ hayır ve neden). Mevcut cevap belirsiz ifadeler ve dilbilgisi hataları içeriyor. Reklamları neden sevdiğinizi açık, spesifik nedenlerle destekleyin (örneğin, bilgi verir, kampanyaları gösterir). Kısa, bağlaçlı cümlelerle fikirlerinizi düzenleyin (because, so, therefore).

Exemplo: Yes, I do like some advertisements because they help me learn about new products and special offers. For instance, ads often show discounts or features of a product, so they make shopping decisions faster and save time.

Sugestão: Soruyu doğrudan yanıtlayın ve tercihlerinizi kategoriler halinde belirtin. Cümleleri daha akıcı ve doğru dilbilgisiyle kurun. Spesifik örnekler verin (hangi markalar, hangi özellikler hoşunuza gidiyor, mevsimsel reklamlar neden çekici?). Gereksiz tekrarları kaldırın ve bağlaçlarla mantık sırası oluşturun.

Exemplo: I prefer fashion and makeup advertisements because they show the latest styles and product benefits. For example, I like ads that demonstrate how a lipstick looks on different people, and seasonal clothing ads often give me ideas for summer vacations.

Sugestão: Cevabınızı açık başlayıp günlük deneyiminizi somut örneklerle destekleyin. Mevcut cevapta zaman uyumsuzluğu ve kelime seçiminde hatalar var. ‘I often see ads on my phone and computer’ gibi net bir başlangıç kullanın, ardından nerede gördüğünüzü ve reklamların nasıl ortaya çıktığını (pop-ups, banners, video ads between game levels) açıklayın. Bağlaçlarla ve kısa cümlelerle akışı sağlayın.

Exemplo: Yes, I often see advertisements on my phone and computer. For example, I encounter video ads when I play mobile games and banner ads when I browse websites or use social media apps. These ads often interrupt my activity, especially between game levels.

× When I was 4th grade, my coach says that I was doing swimming Violet.

✓ When I was in fourth grade, my coach said that I was doing swimming lessons.

The sentence refers to a past time (when I was in fourth grade) so the verb should be in the past tense: 'says' should be 'said'. Also '4th grade' needs the preposition 'in'. 'Swimming Violet' is unclear; likely 'swimming lessons' is intended. Use 'fourth' instead of '4th' in formal speech.

× He said that you can do individual support because it's more harder than the sport support support teams and also there isn't any support here that you can do it and you can motivate yourself very well while doing individual sports.

✓ He said that you can do individual training because it's harder than team sports support, and there isn't any support here, so you can motivate yourself well while doing individual sports.

Problems include word choice and grammar. 'more harder' is redundant; use 'harder'. 'sport support support teams' is incorrect; likely 'team sports' or 'team support' intended. 'there isn't any support here that you can do it' is ungrammatical; rephrased to 'there isn't any support here, so you can...'. Maintain third person singular forms where needed ('isn't' is correct). Clarify vocabulary: 'training' instead of 'support'.

× Of course I see you all of my country, the advertising and also the brands.

✓ Of course, I see advertisements and brands all over my country.

The original uses 'see you' incorrectly and awkward word order. Use simple present 'see' is fine for general statements; reorganize to 'advertisements and brands all over my country'.

× I want to show them to the customers to buy and sell the products they have and also there are lots of billboards to show that.

✓ They want to show them to customers to encourage the purchase of their products, and there are also lots of billboards for that purpose.

Pronoun reference is unclear: 'I want' should be 'They want' (advertisers), and 'them' must refer to 'advertisements'. Use 'encourage the purchase of their products' instead of 'buy and sell the products they have'. Clarify subject and pronoun consistency.

× Yes, I think I like it and I think all people loves them because when you haven't confusing on your brain like what I'm going to buy, the advertising will make you to select some of the brands and also you can choose more.

✓ Yes, I think I like them and I think people love them because when you are confused about what to buy, advertisements help you choose some brands and give you more options.

Subject-verb agreement: 'all people loves' should be 'people love'. 'haven't confusing on your brain' is incorrect; use 'are confused'. 'will make you to select' should be 'help you choose' or 'make you select' without 'to'. Maintain present simple for general truths.

× Thinking more quickly and time management.

✓ They help you think more quickly and manage your time better.

Original is a fragment without a subject and verb. Complete the sentence by adding subject 'They' (advertisements) and verbs 'help you think' and 'manage your time'. Use comparative 'better' for time management.

× I always see at the clothes, the makeups and I always like them.

✓ I always see advertisements for clothes and makeup, and I always like them.

Use the preposition 'for' with 'advertisements for clothes and makeup'. 'See at' is incorrect. Use uncountable 'makeup' not 'makeups'.

× We can say that the makeup products and brands I like and also I like clothes advertising and some some times I like in summer, the summers where we are going to do so summer vocation.

✓ We can say that I like certain makeup products and brands, and I also like clothes advertisements. Sometimes I like summer ads, for instance those about summer vacations.

Original has repetition 'some some times' and awkward quantifier use. 'the summers where we are going to do so summer vocation' is unclear; replace with 'summer ads' and 'summer vacations'. Use 'certain' to indicate some but not all.

× Yes of course, to give an example the when I open my computer, tablet or phone I always seeing the advertising and also when I was playing games.

✓ Yes, of course. For example, when I open my computer, tablet, or phone, I always see advertisements, and also when I play games.

Use simple present 'see' not progressive 'am seeing' for habitual actions: 'I always see'. Remove 'the' before 'when'. Use parallel present tense 'when I play games' instead of past 'was playing'.

× Also they divide my game to show the advertisement or rents new brands like that.

✓ Also they interrupt my game to show advertisements or promote new brands like that.

'divide my game' is wrong; use 'interrupt'. 'rents new brands' is incorrect; use 'promote' or 'advertise new brands'. Use plural 'advertisements'. The gerund form 'showing' could be used, but 'to show' is acceptable after 'interrupt'.