Science— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Cevap doğrudan ve olumlu ancak dilbilgisi hataları, tekrarlar ve kelime seçimi düzeltilmeli. Cümleleri daha kısa ve akıcı yapın; örneğin neden ilginizi çektiğini belirtirken tek bir neden verin ve ardından bir kısa destekleyici detay ekleyin. Bağlaçları mantıklı kullanın (because yerine because of ya da which explains gibi yapı).

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy science because it helps me understand how the universe works. For example, I often read popular science articles about astronomy to learn about new discoveries.

Sugestão: Cümle yapıları doğal değil ve bazı kelime tercihleri yanlış (commenced yerine started, speeches yerine talks). Cevabı daha doğrudan verin: zaman belirtin, sonra kısa bir destekleyici örnek verin. Bağlaçlarla akışı iyileştirin.

Exemplo: I started learning science at the beginning of high school. In particular, one teacher inspired me by giving enthusiastic talks about experiments and discoveries.

Sugestão: İlk cümle temel olarak iyi ama kelime ve gramer hataları var (Especially gereksiz, 'two to investigate about the biology' anlamsız). Konuyu net belirtin ve nedenini açıklayın kısa bir örnekle destekleyin. "Also" kullanırken akışı kontrol edin.

Exemplo: I'm particularly interested in space and astronomy because I find the idea of exploring other planets fascinating. I am also curious about biology, especially how life adapts to extreme environments.

Sugestão: Cümleler hata içeriyor ve anlam belirsiz (didn't involve -> haven't been involved; I'm the witnesses -> I've witnessed). Daha doğrudan cevap verip örnek verin; eğer deney yapmadıysanız bilimsel uygulamaları gözlemlediğinizi somut örnekle açıklayın.

Exemplo: To be honest, I haven't taken part in scientific experiments, but I have observed how science improves people's lives, for example when medical advances helped my family member recover from illness.

Sugestão: Cümle tekrarları ve tamamlanmamış bitiş var. Önce açık bir ana fikir verin (no or yes), sonra nereden izlediğinizi belirtin ve bir örnek ekleyin. Gereksiz tekrarları çıkarın ve cümleyi tamamlayın.

Exemplo: I don't usually watch traditional TV, but I prefer watching science videos on YouTube and apps on my phone or tablet. For instance, I follow a popular channel that explains space discoveries in simple terms.

Sugestão: Cevap eksik-sonlu ve dil bilgisi hataları var. Önce sınırı belirtip (bilmediğinizi) sonra kendi ülkeniz için net bir gözlem verin; cümleyi tamamlayın ve nedenini somut bir sebeple destekleyin. Bağlaçlarla akışı düzeltil.

Exemplo: I'm not Chinese, so I can't speak for China. In my country, people rarely visit science centers because they are unfamiliar with them and often prefer leisure activities; as a result, attendance is low.

× Yes, of course. I do like science because The science is teaching unique things of the universe because of that lots of time, I'm interested in reading some articles about this science topic.

✓ Yes, of course. I like science because science teaches unique things about the universe; because of that, I often read articles about scientific topics.

The definite article 'the' is incorrectly capitalized and unnecessarily used before 'science'. Use 'science' without 'the' when speaking about the field in general. Also adjust verb forms and word order: 'do like' is grammatically acceptable but unnecessary; simple present 'like' is more natural. Use present simple 'teaches' for general truths. Replace 'lots of time' with 'often' and 'this science topic' with 'scientific topics' for clarity and correctness.

× As far as I remember I commenced to learn science in the beginning of the high school, especially I remembered that one of our teachers was very curious about science and gave some speeches to us for learning.

✓ As far as I remember, I started learning science at the beginning of high school; I especially remember that one of our teachers was very passionate about science and gave talks to help us learn.

'Commenced to learn' is grammatically correct but unnatural; use 'started learning'. 'In the beginning of the high school' should be 'at the beginning of high school'. Avoid repeating 'I remembered'—use present 'I remember' or past 'I especially remember' for recollection. 'Gave some speeches to us for learning' is awkward; use 'gave talks to help us learn'.

× Especially the space and astronomy are very exciting for me. I'm also interested in two to investigate about the biology.

✓ Space and astronomy are especially exciting to me. I'm also interested in investigating biology.

Do not use 'the' before general fields like 'space' and 'astronomy'. 'Exciting for me' is acceptable but 'exciting to me' is more natural. 'I'm also interested in two to investigate about the biology' is ungrammatical: remove 'two', use 'interested in investigating biology' (use gerund after 'interested in'), and drop 'the' before 'biology' when referring to the subject generally.

× To be honest, I didn't involve in any experimental things about the science, but I'm the witnesses of the how science improve people's life.

✓ To be honest, I haven't been involved in any scientific experiments, but I'm a witness to how science improves people's lives.

'Didn't involve in' is incorrect; use passive or perfect continuous forms like 'haven't been involved in' or 'didn't take part in'. 'Experimental things about the science' should be 'scientific experiments'. 'I'm the witnesses' is incorrect agreement and article use; use 'I'm a witness' (singular). 'The how' is incorrect; use 'how'. 'Improve' needs third-person singular 'improves' and 'people's life' should be pluralized to 'people's lives'.

× I actually I don't usually watch TV, but I prefer to watch something from the YouTube and the other cutting edge applications from the mobile phones and my tablets, especially

✓ I actually don't usually watch TV, but I prefer to watch videos on YouTube and other cutting-edge apps on my phone and tablet.

Remove the duplicated 'I'. Use 'don't usually watch TV' (present habitual). 'Watch something from the YouTube' is incorrect: say 'watch videos on YouTube'. 'The other cutting edge applications' should be 'other cutting-edge apps'. Use singular 'phone' and 'tablet' or plural consistently; 'my tablets' can be 'my tablet'. Hyphenate 'cutting-edge' and use 'apps' instead of 'applications' for natural speech.

× I'm not a Chinese person so I don't know how Chinese do about the science centers but I want to give an explanation from my country. In my country people don't usually go to the science centers because they not interested in

✓ I'm not Chinese, so I don't know how Chinese people use science centers, but I can explain about my country. In my country, people don't usually go to science centers because they're not interested in them.

Do not say 'a Chinese person' when stating nationality in this context; 'I'm not Chinese' is natural. 'How Chinese do about the science centers' is ungrammatical—use 'how Chinese people use science centers' or 'what Chinese people do regarding science centers'. 'Give an explanation from my country' should be 'explain about my country' or 'talk about my country'. The clause 'they not interested in' is missing auxiliary 'are' and object 'them': use 'they're not interested in them' or 'they're not interested'.