Science— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more fluent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes, I do), avoid repetitions and filler words, correct small grammar errors (e.g., “it provides us with accurate results”), and finish the sentence. Aim for 2–3 connected sentences using linking words if needed.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. Science is fascinating because it provides reliable explanations and accurate results for how the world works, so I often enjoy reading about new discoveries.

Sugestão: Give a direct answer with specific timing and reduce hesitation. Use a clear topic sentence (I started in... ) and one supporting detail explaining why or how early education emphasised it. Avoid repeating words and filler sounds.

Exemplo: I started learning science in Class 1. In my country science is part of the primary curriculum, so children begin to study basic concepts from a very young age.

Sugestão: Structure the answer with a clear topic sentence and two concise supporting details. Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., “human body”, “evolution”, “functions of organs”, “diseases”) and linking words like “because” and “for example.” Remove repetitions.

Exemplo: I'm most interested in biology because it helps me understand the human body and how organisms evolve. For example, I enjoy learning about organ functions and how diseases affect health.

Sugestão: Be specific about experiments and describe one example briefly. Use past tense consistently and avoid repeating nouns. Include a linking phrase (for example) and a result or feeling to make it natural and informative.

Exemplo: In high school we did both chemistry and physics experiments. For example, in chemistry I mixed reagents to produce new compounds and enjoyed observing reactions under the teacher's guidance because they made abstract concepts real.

Sugestão: Start with a direct answer then give two specific interests. Correct small grammar and phrasing (e.g., “how humans evolved” not “how we evolve our history”) and avoid adding redundant tags at the end.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. I especially enjoy programs about nature and human evolution because they explain how species developed over time and reveal fascinating discoveries from the past.

Sugestão: If unsure, give a short direct response and then explain your reasoning with specific, logical points. Avoid vague and incorrect phrases. Use conditional language (perhaps, probably) and one concrete example or general fact.

Exemplo: I'm not completely sure, but I think many Chinese people do visit science museums, especially families and students. For example, school trips often take children to museums to learn about science outside the classroom.

× As I do because science is so advanced and it it provides our us accurate result and truth. That's why I.

✓ I do, because science is so advanced and it provides us with accurate results and truths. That's why I like it.

Multiple pronoun errors: 'our us' is redundant and incorrect — use 'us'. Also missing object structure: 'provides us with' is correct. 'result' should be plural 'results' when speaking generally. Removed duplicated 'it'. Added 'like it' to complete the sentence. Suggestion: avoid repeating pronouns and ensure phrasal verbs like 'provide...with' are used correctly.

× I started to learn about science, uh, from Class 1 because in my country we, we have to, uh, we have to study science from into childhood. So maybe I think, uh, uh, from class.

✓ I started learning about science in Class 1 because in my country we have to study science from childhood. So I think from Class 1.

Use of tense and verb forms: 'started to learn' is acceptable but 'started learning' is more natural. 'from into childhood' is incorrect preposition use; use 'from childhood'. Removed filler repetitions. Suggestion: use 'study from childhood' and avoid extra words.

× Actually I am interested in biology because there we have, we can study a lot of, we can gain a lot of knowledge about our human body and how we evolve and then our body part and disease function. So I like biology.

✓ Actually, I am interested in biology because we can learn a lot about the human body, how we evolved, body parts, and how diseases work. So I like biology.

Pronoun/word choice issues: 'our human body' is better as 'the human body' for general statements. 'how we evolve' should be past form 'how we evolved' when referring to evolution. 'our body part and disease function' is unclear; corrected to 'body parts, and how diseases work'. Suggestion: use 'the' for general biological facts and use clear noun phrases.

× Actually in +2 we used to do chemistry experiment and physics experiment. Like sometimes we mix chemical and make new molecular molecules, molecules, uh, from that, uh, at that time, I really enjoy it that experiment when teacher guide us.

✓ Actually in grade 12 we used to do chemistry and physics experiments. Sometimes we mixed chemicals and created new molecules. I really enjoyed those experiments when the teacher guided us.

Quantifier and count noun errors: 'chemistry experiment' should be plural 'chemistry and physics experiments' when speaking generally. 'mix chemical' should be 'mixed chemicals'. 'make new molecular molecules' is redundant; use 'created new molecules'. Tense consistency: use past tense 'we used to', 'mixed', 'created', 'enjoyed'. Also article and subject issues: 'the teacher guided us'. Suggestion: use plural forms for repeated activities and keep past tense consistent.

× Yes, I do. Especially if the topic is about nature and human beings, how we evolve our history, then I definitely like to watch that TV shows and I'm interested in that type of topic, so yeah.

✓ Yes, I do. Especially if the topic is about nature and human beings, such as how we evolved, I definitely like to watch those TV shows and I'm interested in that kind of topic.

Tense and noun number errors: 'how we evolve our history' is incorrect — use 'how we evolved' or 'our history'. 'that TV shows' should be 'those TV shows' (plural demonstrative). 'that type of topic' is awkward; use 'that kind of topic'. Suggestion: match plural demonstratives to plural nouns and simplify 'how we evolved' for evolutionary topics.

× Umm, actually I'm not sure about that, but I believe they must visit. They would, they could visit, but I don't have exact idea because everyone, every country's insurance would go in museum and every country have absolute obviously museums.

✓ Umm, actually I'm not sure about that, but I believe they do visit museums. They might or could, but I don't have exact data. People in every country visit museums and every country obviously has museums.

Pronoun and noun form errors: 'they must visit' implying obligation is wrong; use 'they do visit' or 'they might visit'. 'every country's insurance' is incorrect word choice; likely intended 'people' not 'insurance'. Subject-verb agreement: 'every country have' should be 'every country has'. Preposition: 'go in museum' should be 'visit museums'. Suggestion: use 'people' for general populations, ensure subject-verb agreement, and choose correct verbs like 'visit'.