Science— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve grammatical accuracy and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and correct verb forms and idioms. Keep to 2–4 concise sentences and add one specific example or reason. Use linking words for coherence.

Exemplo: Yes, I really enjoy science. I have been fascinated by it since I first learned to read, because it helped me understand how the world works. For example, learning about ecosystems showed me how plants and animals depend on each other, which sparked my curiosity further.

Sugestão: Provide a direct time reference and one or two specific supporting details. Fix tense and article errors and remove filler words. Use a linking phrase to connect idea about teachers' influence.

Exemplo: I started learning about science in primary school when I first learned to read. Because teachers introduced simple experiments and exciting topics, my interest grew; in particular, a primary-school teacher who performed chemistry demonstrations made science feel exciting.

Sugestão: Be concise and accurate with subject names and relationships. Avoid vague claims and repetition. Give one clear reason and an example of what you like about the subject. Use linking words for coherence.

Exemplo: I am most interested in chemistry and biology, especially where they overlap in pharmacy. I enjoy pharmacy because it combines knowledge from chemistry, biology and mathematics to develop medicines; for example, studying drug interactions showed me how chemistry affects human health.

Sugestão: Organize your answer: give a brief topic sentence, then 1–2 specific examples with clear verbs and correct tense. Remove repetitions and unclear phrases. Mention concrete tasks, skills learned, or outcomes.

Exemplo: I have worked in a laboratory for almost a year. During that time I participated in a science Olympiad where I conducted experiments on enzyme activity under the supervision of university professors, and I learned laboratory techniques such as pipetting and data analysis.

Sugestão: State your opinion directly, then give one clear, specific reason and an example. Fix grammar and use linking words (however, because). Avoid sweeping negative language; balance with nuance.

Exemplo: Not really — I rarely watch science programs because they often simplify topics too much. For instance, a documentary I saw skipped experimental methods and focused only on outcomes, which left me wanting more detailed explanations.

Sugestão: Avoid saying 'I have no idea' then giving vague comments. Start with a short direct answer or acknowledge uncertainty, then offer a reasoned opinion with a specific comparison or example. Use correct noun phrases and avoid awkward terms.

Exemplo: I am not sure about China specifically, but in my country museums attract a mixed audience. For example, science museums usually draw families and school groups because interactive displays are popular with children and students.

× I absolutely into science.

✓ I am absolutely into science.

Missing verb 'be' before the preposition phrase. The correct structure is 'be + into' to express interest. Suggestion: use 'I am absolutely into science' or 'I am absolutely interested in science.'

× I've been studying it since I was knee high tonight, since the like age that I've been able to read.

✓ I've been studying it since I was knee-high, since about the age when I was able to read.

The original mixes idioms and incorrect words ('tonight', 'the like age'). Use the idiom 'knee-high' and a clear phrase 'about the age when'. Ensure tense 'I've been studying' pairs with 'since' + time point. Suggestion: use concise time expressions after 'since.'

× I was really into it.

✓ I was really into it from an early age.

Sentence is grammatically ok but lacks context; adding a time phrase clarifies when. Suggestion: include time anchors to match previous statements.

× It really captivated my imagination because it's so it really brought my horizons and allows me to find different interesting facts.

✓ It really captivated my imagination because it broadened my horizons and allowed me to discover many interesting facts.

Mix of tenses and awkward collocations: 'brought my horizons' is incorrect — use 'broadened my horizons.' Maintain past tense 'captivated' and 'allowed' for the same time frame. Use 'discover' instead of 'find different interesting facts.' Suggestion: keep consistent tense and use standard collocations.

× I've started learning about this in the primary age, I think because, uh, that when I actually learn, that's when we're actually learn how to read and you know, the school really boosts my interest in this field and I think teachers for may affect this too.

✓ I started learning about it in primary school, because that was when I learned to read. School really boosted my interest in this field, and I think teachers may have influenced me too.

Mixed tenses and incorrect phrasing: 'I've started' with 'in the primary age' is awkward — use simple past 'started' with 'in primary school.' 'We're actually learn' is ungrammatical; use 'I learned.' 'Boosts' should be past 'boosted' to match timeframe. 'Teachers for may affect this too' is unclear; use 'teachers may have influenced me too.' Suggestion: use simple past for past events and clear noun phrases like 'primary school.'

× I really love chemistry and biology, and the mix of this is called pharmacy.

✓ I really love chemistry and biology, and the combination of these is called pharmacy.

Use 'these' to refer to plural nouns and 'combination' instead of 'mix' for formality. 'The mix of this' is incorrect reference. Suggestion: match demonstrative pronoun plurality to referenced nouns.

× So yeah, really into it.

✓ So yeah, I'm really into it.

Missing auxiliary verb 'am' to form predicate. Suggestion: include subject and verb for complete sentence.

× I think it's one of the greatest science because it's combination of every other fields like mathematic physics, chemistry, biology, it's all combined into this subject.

✓ I think it's one of the greatest sciences because it's a combination of many other fields like mathematics, physics, chemistry, and biology; they are all combined in this subject.

Count noun 'science' needs plural 'sciences' in 'one of the greatest sciences.' Missing article before 'combination' and 'every other fields' should be 'many other fields' or 'every other field.' Also spelling errors: 'mathematic' -> 'mathematics.' Maintain parallel list with commas and conjunction. Suggestion: use correct pluralization and articles and correct field names.

× Actually I've I've been working in lab for almost one year, but in school I happen to be in the Olympiad where I work in lab as well and sold different interesting tasks and with the help of professors from the when with best university of our country.

✓ Actually, I've been working in a lab for almost one year, and at school I participated in the Olympiad where I also worked in a lab and solved various interesting tasks with the help of professors from the best university in our country.

Missing article 'a' before 'lab.' 'Happen to be in the Olympiad' is awkward; use 'participated in the Olympiad.' 'Sold' is wrong verb; use 'solved.' 'From the when with best university' is garbled; use 'from the best university in our country.' Maintain present perfect 'I've been working' and past simple for completed actions at school. Suggestion: use correct articles and verbs and clear phrasing.

× Actually, no, I think they're kind of useless because when you get deep into something, you understand that the major amount of information that being broadened by the TV or social media I just not that deep.

✓ Actually, no. I think they're kind of useless because when you get deep into something, you realize that the majority of information presented by TV or social media is not that deep.

Pronoun and noun misuse: 'the major amount' -> 'the majority of' or 'most of.' 'That being broadened by the TV' is ungrammatical; use 'presented by TV.' 'I just not that deep' needs verb 'is' and subject 'it' -> 'is not that deep.' Suggestion: use standard expressions 'the majority of' and 'presented by.'

× And they're more about the exposure to people who are not really know much about it.

✓ And they are more about exposing people who do not really know much about it.

Incorrect structure: 'about the exposure to people who are not really know' should be either 'about exposing people who do not really know' or 'about providing exposure to people who do not really know.' Use 'do not' with base verb 'know.' Suggestion: restructure to 'about exposing' or 'providing exposure to.'

× In our country, I haven't really observed many Chinese people.

✓ In our country, I haven't really observed many Chinese people visiting science museums.

Original sentence lacks context relative to the question about visiting science museums. Add 'visiting science museums' to clarify. Preposition use 'in our country' is fine. Suggestion: always include the activity when answering context-specific questions.

× I think there are enough of them, but not that many.

✓ I think there are some of them, but not that many.

'Enough of them' contradicts 'not that many.' Use 'some of them' or 'enough' depending on intended meaning. Suggestion: choose consistent quantifier; here 'some' fits the intended moderate quantity.

× I think any kind of nation would like to visit a museum, especially something related to science, so I don't think it's only for Chinese people.

✓ I think any nation would like to visit a museum, especially one related to science, so I don't think it's only for Chinese people.

'Any kind of nation' is awkward; use 'any nation.' Use 'one related to science' to refer to 'a museum.' Suggestion: prefer concise noun phrases and use 'one' to refer back to 'a museum.'