Science— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and use correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and filler words, and give one or two specific details. Use linking words like "especially" to make it coherent.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. Science is my favorite subject at high school, especially biology because I enjoy learning about the human body and how it works.

Sugestão: Answer directly with a time reference and one clear supporting detail. Avoid hesitations and incomplete sentences. Use linking words such as "since" or "when" to show timing.

Exemplo: I started learning about science when I entered high school. Since then I have been particularly interested in biology and the work of famous scientists.

Sugestão: Give a direct topic sentence naming the subject, then add a specific reason and an example. Use correct verb forms and clearer vocabulary; avoid unclear words and fillers.

Exemplo: Biology interests me the most because I enjoy studying the human body. For example, I like experiments that show how muscles and organs function.

Sugestão: Describe one concrete activity clearly using past or present tense, and add a brief result or what you learned. Remove fillers and unclear terms.

Exemplo: At school I took part in a chemistry lab where we conducted experiments on reactions between acids and bases. From that I learned how pH changes affect reaction rates.

Sugestão: State your opinion briefly and name a specific program correctly. Then explain what you learn or enjoy from it using one clear supporting detail.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. My favorite program is a biology documentary series because it explains complex topics simply and shows real-life examples from research.

Sugestão: Answer directly and give a balanced, concise explanation with linking words like "some" and "others". Use correct grammar and provide a brief example of who might visit.

Exemplo: I think it depends on the person. Some people, especially families and students, often visit science museums, while others who are not interested in science rarely go.

× Yes I do, science is my favorite subject at my my high school.

✓ Yes, I do. Science is my favorite subject at my high school.

Missing punctuation and duplicated word 'my'. Also a comma splice; split into two sentences and remove the repeated 'my'. Include a comma after 'Yes' for natural speech punctuation. Use 'at my high school' (article 'my' already specifies).

× Ideally interacting about uh, human body and side biology.

✓ I enjoy learning about the human body and biology.

Unclear and fragmented sentence. 'Ideally interacting about' is incorrect phrasing. Use 'I enjoy learning about' plus definite article 'the' for 'human body'. 'Side biology' is incorrect; likely meant 'biology'. This corrects structure and clarity.

× Well, I let me think, umm, I remember I learned about scientists at a high school.

✓ Well, let me think. I remember learning about scientists in high school.

Awkward filler and tense usage. Use 'let me think' without extra 'I'. Replace 'I remember I learned' with 'I remember learning' for natural present recollection. Use 'in high school' rather than 'at a high school' when speaking about personal experience.

× I really interested about biological, uh, for example, I like to uh.

✓ I was really interested in biology, for example, I liked doing experiments.

'Interested' requires a form of 'to be' and the preposition 'in'. 'Biological' is an adjective; use the noun 'biology'. Provide a complete clause: 'I liked doing experiments' to finish the thought.

× I will go biological because I interested about human body or, uh, penned, uh, something I like experience in the laugh.

✓ I prefer biology because I am interested in the human body and I enjoy hands-on experiments.

Mix of incorrect future tense and missing verbs. 'I will go biological' is wrong; use 'I prefer biology'. 'I interested about' needs 'am interested in'. Replace unclear fragments ('penned', 'laugh') with 'hands-on experiments' to match likely meaning and present preference.

× Well, I doing cyan experiment lab at school is, uh, about.

✓ Well, I did a cyanotype experiment in the school lab.

Missing auxiliary or correct tense: 'I doing' should be 'I did' (past tense) to answer 'have done'. Use article 'a' and clarify 'cyanotype experiment' if 'cyan' refers to cyanotype; place 'in the school lab' correctly.

× Anymore or pen uh is going.

✓ I don't have anything more to add.

Fragmented and unclear. 'Anymore or pen uh is going' is nonsensical. Provide a complete, natural sentence to indicate no further examples.

× Yes, I do. Uh, my favorite show is. Cyanide talk show is information about UH biology and.

✓ Yes, I do. My favorite show is a science talk show that gives information about biology.

Incomplete sentence and wrong noun 'Cyanide' (likely misheard). 'My favorite show is.' is incomplete. Combine into one clear sentence; use 'a science talk show' and 'information about biology' for correct noun usage and sentence completion.

× Well, in my opinion I think it depend on person.

✓ Well, in my opinion, I think it depends on the person.

Missing comma after an introductory phrase. 'Depend' needs third-person singular 'depends' because subject is 'it'. Add article 'the' before 'person' to refer to people in general.

× Some people interest about science, they should go museum science and museum.

✓ Some people are interested in science; they should visit science museums.

'Interest about' is incorrect; use passive 'are interested in'. 'Go museum science and museum' is ungrammatical; use 'visit science museums'. Use a semicolon or separate sentences to avoid run-ons.

× However some people don't like about science, they cannot go.

✓ However, some people don't like science, so they do not go.

'Don't like about science' is incorrect; remove 'about'. 'Cannot go' is okay but 'do not go' is more natural. Add comma after 'However' and use conjunction 'so' to show result.