Sharing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Старайтесь употреблять грамматически правильные формы и избегать лишних слов. Начните с ясного топик‑предложения, затем добавьте конкретный пример; используйте связки для плавности (for example, because, so). Исправьте времена (taught, taught us not to be greedy) и уберите повторы.

Exemplo: Yes, my parents taught me to share when I was a child. For example, growing up with two sisters, we were encouraged to divide toys and treats fairly, so we rarely argued about belongings.

Sugestão: Сделайте ответ более сжатым и естественным: краткое утверждение и одно конкретное объяснение с логическим связующим. Исправьте стилистические ошибки (prefer to share food, I don't want anyone to feel hungry).

Exemplo: I usually like to share food with others because hunger is unpleasant; for example, I often bring snacks to work so colleagues can eat if they're busy.

Sugestão: Ответ запутан и содержит ошибки и повторы. Начните с прямого утверждения (Some things are unsuitable), затем приведите 1–2 чётких примера и короткое объяснение. Убедитесь в корректной лексике (private items, toothbrush, deodorant) и не включайте неясные детали.

Exemplo: Some personal items should not be shared, for example a toothbrush or deodorant, because sharing them can spread germs. I remember once at school someone asked to borrow my deodorant, and I refused for hygiene reasons.

Sugestão: Уберите разговорные паузы (umm, uh) и используйте правильные времена и согласования (I brought food, it created). Дайте короткую структуру: факт + эффект. Добавьте связку (so, which made) и конкретный пример.

Exemplo: I recently brought food to work for my birthday. I brought cakes and snacks, which created a friendly atmosphere and made sure my colleagues had something to eat.

Sugestão: Исправьте грамматику и местоимения (I would like to, we exchange news, she tells me). Сформулируйте одно предложение-тезис и одно-два поддерживающих предложения с конкретным примером. Уберите повторы.

Exemplo: The first person I would share good news with is my girlfriend, Alyssa. We usually exchange news after work; for instance, I tell her about my successes, and she shares hers, which makes us both feel happy.

Sugestão: Будьте более конкретны и избегайте тавтологии. Начните с обобщающего предложения (We share news about current events and hobbies), затем приведите 1–2 конкретных примера с коротким пояснением. Уберите лишние слова (the the, repair of the cars → car repairs).

Exemplo: I usually share news about current events and hobbies with my friends. For example, we recently discussed an esports Dota 2 tournament and also talked about car repairs and modifications one of them was planning.

× Yes, of course, my parents always teach me to share with anyone because I have two sisters.

✓ Yes, of course, my parents always taught me to share with others because I have two sisters.

The student uses 'teach' (present) but refers to habitual past upbringing; use past tense 'taught'. Use 'others' instead of 'anyone' for natural collocation. Suggestion: use 'taught' for past habitual actions and prefer 'others' in this context.

× Our parents always told us don't be greedy.

✓ Our parents always told us not to be greedy.

Reported speech requires backshifting: 'don't be greedy' becomes 'not to be greedy' after 'told'. Also 'always told us' is past habitual; use 'not to' for infinitive form. Suggestion: use 'told us not to...' for reported instructions.

× I can share with others anything, but the main thing that I prefer to share is the food because I know that hunger is a very bad feeling and I don't want that someone feels hungry.

✓ I can share anything with others, but the main thing I prefer to share is food because I know hunger is a very bad feeling and I don't want anyone to feel hungry.

Word order: 'share anything with others' is more natural. 'The food' -> 'food' (uncountable). 'I don't want that someone feels hungry' is incorrect structure; use 'I don't want anyone to feel hungry' (infinitive + correct pronoun). Suggestion: use 'anyone' and 'to feel' after 'want'.

× I think you can share with anyone your private things like toothbrush, like deodorant.

✓ I think you shouldn't share private things like your toothbrush or deodorant with anyone.

Context asks about unsuitable items for sharing; original sentence contradicts. Use negative modal 'shouldn't' to indicate unsuitability. Word order: 'private things like your toothbrush or deodorant' and 'with anyone' placed at end. Suggestion: use 'shouldn't' for advice against sharing and place possessive 'your' before items.

× And for example, I have a situation when I was younger, someone asked me to give asked me to give him a disorder and after the PE lesson.

✓ For example, when I was younger, someone asked me to give him a towel after PE class.

The original is ungrammatical and contains 'disorder' likely wrong word. Correct structure: 'When I was younger, someone asked me to give him a towel after PE class.' Use 'towel' as plausible private item and 'PE class' for lesson. Suggestion: keep time clause at start and use clear past tense verbs.

× I had a birthday recently and umm, I bring a lot of food to my work for the celebration.

✓ I had a birthday recently, and I brought a lot of food to my work for the celebration.

Mismatch of time reference: 'had a birthday recently' requires past tense 'brought', not present 'bring'. Suggestion: keep past tense consistent for completed events.

× Umm, it uh, makes the friendly atmosphere and uh, all the colleagues don't feel hungry.

✓ It created a friendly atmosphere, and none of my colleagues felt hungry.

Event tied to past birthday; use past tense 'created' and 'felt'. Avoid 'all the colleagues don't feel hungry' which mixes present and plural article usage. Suggestion: use 'none of my colleagues felt hungry' for clarity.

× In my opinion, the first person I like to share good news is my girlfriend Alyssa.

✓ In my opinion, the first person I like to share good news with is my girlfriend Alyssa.

Missing preposition 'with' after 'share good news'. Also present preference is fine but typical phrasing: 'the first person I share good news with'. Suggestion: include 'with' and consider 'I usually share' for habit.

× For example, we always change change for news after the our working days.

✓ For example, we always exchange news after our working days.

'Change change for news' is incorrect; use 'exchange news' or 'share news'. Remove duplicate 'change' and extra article 'the' before 'our'. Suggestion: use 'exchange news' and 'after work' for natural phrasing.

× I tell her about my day, he tell me about her day and it make us feel happy.

✓ I tell her about my day, she tells me about hers, and it makes us feel happy.

Pronoun errors: 'he' should be 'she' to match 'my girlfriend'. Subject-verb agreement: 'she tells' and 'it makes' require third person singular 's'. Use 'hers' as possessive pronoun. Suggestion: ensure pronouns agree with gender and verb forms.

× We like to share current events which with each other.

✓ We like to share current events with each other.

Redundant 'which' is incorrect; remove it and retain preposition 'with each other'. Suggestion: use 'share X with each other' or 'share current events'.

× For example, recently we had a talk about esport and the the tournament of Dota 2.

✓ For example, recently we had a talk about esports and the Dota 2 tournament.

Use plural 'esports' for the field. Remove duplicate 'the'. Use 'the Dota 2 tournament' as natural collocation. Suggestion: use correct noun forms and avoid article duplication.

× Also we like to talk about the cars and the repair of the cars.

✓ We also like to talk about cars and car repairs.

Unnecessary definite articles: 'the cars' and 'the repair of the cars' are unnatural in general statements. Use plural nouns without 'the' for general topics and prefer 'car repairs' for idiomatic phrasing. Suggestion: drop 'the' for general statements and use compound noun 'car repairs'.