Sharing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make the response more concise, correct grammar and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples of how your parents taught you to share. Use linking words (for example, however) to make the answer coherent.

Exemplo: Yes, my parents taught me to share from a young age. For example, they encouraged me to give toys to my classmates and to talk about my feelings when I was upset, so I learned both practical sharing and emotional sharing.

Sugestão: Be more fluent and organize ideas: open with a topic sentence, then list specific items and give a short reason or example. Reduce filler words and correct minor grammar (e.g., "Pokémon cards"). Use linking words like "for example" or "such as" to connect details.

Exemplo: I usually share hobby-related things, such as basketball tips, my Pokémon card collection, and mobile game strategies. For example, my friends and I discuss training drills for basketball and trade cards to complete our sets.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence and explain briefly why certain things are private. Avoid hesitations and use simpler vocabulary if unsure (e.g., "improve" instead of "ameliorate"). Offer a single concrete example of a personal matter you wouldn't share.

Exemplo: I wouldn't share very personal matters, such as relationship problems, with everyone because they might not understand or be able to help. For instance, I keep private details about my romantic relationships to myself or only tell a close friend.

Sugestão: Answer directly and give a concise reason why you hesitate to share. Avoid repeating words like "and yeah". Add one specific detail about the problem to make the answer more informative.

Exemplo: Yes, I have been struggling with my basketball performance recently. For example, I missed several free throws in recent games, but I haven't told many people because I prefer to work on it by myself first.

Sugestão: This answer is unclear and unnatural. State a clear person and one reason. If you mean you share first with a specific person, say so; if you prefer to think privately or use tools, explain briefly and avoid mentioning "AI" unless relevant. Use one or two sentences only.

Exemplo: I usually share good news first with my best friend because they know me well and will celebrate with me. Alternatively, if I want objective feedback, I sometimes write it down first to organize my thoughts.

Sugestão: Start with a clear topic sentence and then give two or three specific examples (e.g., scores, trades, training tips). Use linking phrases like "for example" and avoid repetitive phrasing. Mention why you share these (shared interest).

Exemplo: My friends and I mostly share basketball-related news, such as game results, player trades, and training tips. For example, we discuss recent NBA trades and suggest drills to improve shooting during practice.

× Yeah they did.

✓ Yes, they did.

Use 'Yes' instead of informal 'Yeah' in formal speech; tense 'did' is correct for past. Suggest using 'Yes' for clearer, more standard responses.

× No matter if it's an exciting thing or if say sad or de depressed thing, you still have to share to others to express your feelings because others cannot not know unless you express your idea and feeling.

✓ Whether it is something exciting or sad or depressing, you still have to share with others to express your feelings because others will not know unless you express your ideas and feelings.

Errors include incorrect conjunction 'No matter if' (better 'Whether'), redundant 'if say', wrong word form 'de depressed', incorrect preposition 'to others' (use 'with others'), double negative 'cannot not', and singular/plural inconsistency 'idea and feeling' (use plural). Suggest simplifying conjunctions, correct adjectives, and use standard prepositions and negatives.

× most likely I would share my hobbies such as like playing basketball or having a Pokémon cards or even playing different mobile games.

✓ Most likely I would share my hobbies, such as playing basketball, collecting Pokémon cards, or playing different mobile games.

Issues: unnecessary filler 'like' after 'such as'; article and noun number incorrect 'a Pokémon cards' (use 'collecting Pokémon cards' or 'a Pokémon card'); capitalization not needed here. Suggest removing redundant words and correcting noun phrases.

× We share different strategies or tactics or any news for different categories.

✓ We share different strategies, tactics, or news in different categories.

Use 'in' rather than 'for' to indicate categories; unnecessary repetition 'or' multiple times; combine items with commas for clarity.

× this is what we always share with my friends or parents.

✓ This is what I always share with my friends or parents.

Subject mismatch: 'we' vs 'my'. Use consistent subject 'I' to match speaker. Also capitalize sentence start.

× I think it's the things which is very personal, which is I, I don't really, I don't always share my deep feelings because I think sharing with others will not really help to ameliorate my feelings and so that I always hide and consume my sad feelings.

✓ I think it's the things which are very personal; I don't usually share my deep feelings because I don't think sharing with others will help improve them, so I often hide and try to deal with my sad feelings myself.

Problems: subject-verb agreement 'things which is' should be 'things which are'; awkward pronoun 'which is I'; adverb choice 'always' vs 'usually'; word choice 'ameliorate' is rare and formal—use 'improve'; 'consume my sad feelings' incorrect—use 'deal with... myself'. Suggestions: correct agreement, simplify language, and use natural verbs.

× I think I'm having a bit trouble with my basketball career.

✓ I think I'm having a bit of trouble with my basketball career.

Missing preposition 'of' after 'a bit'; tense and aspect are fine. Suggest using 'a bit of trouble' for idiomatic English.

× I can just carry it by my own.

✓ I can just carry it on my own.

Use idiomatic expression 'on my own' not 'by my own'. 'Carry it' is acceptable but 'carry it on my own' is natural.

× Who is the first person you would like to share good news with?

✓ Who is the first person you would like to share good news with?

Sentence is grammatically correct. No correction needed.

× Well, usually I won't, I don't want to share my views to others because I think they will give some ideas or their perspective to me, which is, I don't think it's, it's helpful.

✓ Well, usually I don't want to share my views with others because I think they will give me their ideas or perspectives, which I don't think are helpful.

Use 'with others' not 'to others' when sharing views; word order 'give me their ideas' is correct; correct agreement 'which... are helpful' (plural 'perspectives'). Remove filler and repetitions.

× So I would usually share with AI in order to have some more objective, uh.

✓ So I would usually share with AI in order to get a more objective opinion.

Incomplete sentence and wrong noun form 'some more objective'—need 'a more objective opinion'. Suggest completing idea and using 'get' or 'receive'.

× What kind of news do you share with your friends?

✓ What kind of news do you share with your friends?

This question sentence is correct; no change needed.

× What we always share about basketball, such as the trainings, information in NBA, because like both of my friends and my classmates enjoy watching NBA games and they're always aware of the trading and different situations in NBA.

✓ We always share information about basketball, such as training, NBA news, because both my friends and my classmates enjoy watching NBA games and they are always aware of trades and different situations in the NBA.

Errors: unnecessary 'What' at start; plural/article: 'the trainings' should be 'training' or 'trainings' depending—use uncountable 'training'; 'information in NBA' should be 'NBA news' or 'information about the NBA'; 'the trading' should be 'trades'; add 'the' before 'NBA' in 'in the NBA'. Suggest restructuring sentence for clarity.