Sharing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Fix grammar and be more concise. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples. Avoid fillers like 'uh' and repeated phrases. Use correct verb forms (e.g., 'taught' not 'has taught') and keep to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes. My parents taught me to share from a young age. For example, they encouraged me to share toys with my classmates and to help relatives by giving food or clothes when needed.

Sugestão: Start with a clear statement and give two specific examples using linking words (for example, also). Correct awkward phrasing (e.g., 'I do not eat alone whenever someone is watching'). Keep sentences natural and concise.

Exemplo: I usually share food and study materials. For example, I often offer my lunch to classmates who forget theirs, and I lend reading materials to friends who need them for class.

Sugestão: Be precise and correct vocabulary: use 'hygiene products' and list examples accurately. Use one clear reason sentence with linking words like 'because' and avoid small errors like 'calm' or 'our'.

Exemplo: Personal hygiene items are not suitable for sharing, for example toothbrushes, towels and underwear, because sharing them can spread infections and harm both people.

Sugestão: Make the answer clearer and correct word choice ('clothes' not 'clues'; 'relative' singular/plural consistently). Give one specific detail about what you shared and how it helped, in two sentences max.

Exemplo: Yes. Recently I donated several of my old coats and shirts to a relative who is struggling financially, and they were very grateful because it helped them stay warm.

Sugestão: Open with a simple topic sentence naming the person, then give a brief reason and one supporting detail. Correct tense and time expressions ('since grade 1' not 'grade 1:00'), and avoid filler words.

Exemplo: I would tell my best friend first. We've been close since first grade, so I share details about my day and how people treated me because he always understands and supports me.

Sugestão: Begin with a clear statement and use linking words (for example, also). Avoid repeating 'about' and ensure correct plural forms ('exams'). Give one specific example of a topic you discuss.

Exemplo: I usually share news about my studies. For example, I often discuss upcoming exams and revision plans with friends, and I also talk about books I am reading and my online study notes.

× Yes, I believe that my parents has taught me all the crucial things and gave me the best since childhood and they has taught me to share uh with my friends and with my relatives and help the people who are in need.

✓ Yes, I believe that my parents have taught me all the crucial things and gave me the best since childhood, and they have taught me to share with my friends and relatives and to help people who are in need.

The subject 'my parents' is plural, so the verb must be 'have' not 'has'. Also maintain parallel structure: use 'have taught' consistently and repeat 'to' before 'help' for clarity. Remove filler 'uh' and unnecessary 'with' before 'relatives'.

× I think it depends upon the situation, but I mostly share my food.

✓ I think it depends on the situation, but I mostly share my food.

Use the common preposition 'depends on' rather than 'depends upon' in conversational English. Tense is fine but preposition choice improves naturalness.

× I do not eat alone whenever someone is watching and uh, when I'm in class.

✓ I do not eat alone when someone is watching, and I don't eat alone in class.

Use 'when' rather than 'whenever' for general statements; avoid filler 'uh'. Keep tense consistent and phrasing parallel. Use contraction or full form consistently for natural speech.

× If some friends do not have some materials of reading, I do share with them.

✓ If some friends do not have reading materials, I share with them.

'Materials of reading' is unnatural; use 'reading materials'. Remove unnecessary 'do' auxiliary unless for emphasis. Keep pronoun 'them' is correct.

× The things that are not suitable for sharing are hygienic products that includes toothbrush, calm and our underwears.

✓ The things that are not suitable for sharing are hygienic products that include toothbrushes, combs, and our underwear.

'Includes' should agree with plural 'products' so use 'include'. Nouns need correct plural forms: 'toothbrushes', 'combs', 'underwear' (uncountable). 'Calm' is wrong word; 'comb' is intended.

× It is not good to share such things because it hampers our health as well as the people we share with.

✓ It is not good to share such things because it can harm our health and the health of the people we share with.

Use 'can harm' instead of 'hampers' (which means 'hinders') and make parallel structure 'our health and the health of the people we share with' for clarity.

× Yes, recently I shared my old clothes with my relative because they are poor and do not have proper financial condition and I help them by giving clues that are of no use to me and they were really happy.

✓ Yes, recently I shared my old clothes with my relatives because they are poor and do not have a proper financial situation, and I helped them by giving clothes that were of no use to me, and they were really happy.

Use plural 'relatives' if referring to family members. 'Financial condition' should be 'financial situation' and needs an article 'a'. 'Help' should be past tense 'helped' to match 'shared'. 'Clues' is incorrect word; should be 'clothes'. Also use past tense consistently.

× There is one friend whom I know since grade 1:00 and we are very close to each other so I shared every detail with him.

✓ There is one friend whom I have known since grade 1, and we are very close, so I share every detail with him.

Use present perfect 'have known' for an action that began in the past and continues. 'Grade 1:00' is incorrect; use 'grade 1'. Also use present tense 'share' if describing habitual action.

× I even say how my day went and how others treated me.

✓ I even tell him how my day went and how others treated me.

'Say' is incomplete; use 'tell him' to indicate recipient. Past tense 'went' and 'treated' are fine because describing a past day; keep 'tell' in present to indicate habitual speech.

× Uh, I feel really good to share such experience with him whenever I get chance and he does same.

✓ I feel really good sharing such experiences with him whenever I get the chance, and he does the same.

Use gerund 'sharing' for natural phrasing. 'Experience' should be plural 'experiences'. Include 'the' before 'chance'. Add 'the' before 'same' to form 'the same'.

× Mostly, I prefer to talk about my study with my friends.

✓ Mostly, I prefer to talk about my studies with my friends.

Use plural 'studies' when referring to academic work in general. 'My study' would refer to a specific research project.

× For example, I tend to discuss about our exam, how we are preparing for exam and so on.

✓ For example, I tend to discuss our exams and how we are preparing for them, and so on.

Do not use 'discuss about'; the verb 'discuss' takes a direct object. Use plural 'exams' if general, and 'for them' to refer back to the exams.

× I also share about my page and my reading activities too.

✓ I also share about my progress and my reading activities.

'Share about my page' is unclear; likely 'share my progress' or 'share posts on my page'. Removed redundant 'too'. Use correct noun 'progress' for studies or activities.