Sharing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more fluent and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh, um), correct grammar (e.g., "we shared the same favorites"), and finish the thought. Add one supporting detail with a linking word. Keep to under five sentences.

Exemplo: Yes. My parents taught me to share from a young age. For example, I often gave my toy cars to my younger brother because we liked the same toys, and this helped us play together. As a result, I learned patience and cooperation.

Sugestão: Use correct tense and be specific: say 'I like to share useful information' and give a complete, specific example. Avoid trailing off and fillers. Use a linking word like 'for example' or 'for instance' to connect the idea.

Exemplo: I like to share useful information with others. For instance, last week I helped a friend prepare for a job interview by sharing common interview questions and tips about the company's culture. Because of that, he felt more confident during the interview.

Sugestão: Clarify meaning and avoid double negatives (e.g., 'not unsuitable'). Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give a specific example and a brief reason. Avoid fillers and keep it under five sentences.

Exemplo: Not all personal information should be shared with everyone. For example, I wouldn't tell my friends about private details of my relationship because those matters are personal and could hurt trust. Therefore I keep such things between me and my partner.

Sugestão: Be concise and grammatically accurate: use past tense consistently and complete the sentence. Provide the purpose and result of sharing. Use linking words like 'so' or 'therefore' properly.

Exemplo: Yes. Last month a friend told me he had an interview with a major company where I work, so I shared likely interview questions and information about the workplace. As a result, he was better prepared for the interview.

Sugestão: Use correct grammar and be specific: 'I would share it with my loved ones, especially my partner.' Explain briefly why and give an example. Remove fillers and keep it to two or three clear sentences.

Exemplo: I would share good news first with my partner. She has always supported me through difficult times, so sharing good news with her is my way of saying thank you and celebrating together.

Sugestão: Be specific and avoid vague phrases: state types of news and give a complete, specific example. Use linking words like 'for example' and finish the sentence. Remove filler words and correct tense ('I had a reunion').

Exemplo: I usually share updates about my career and daily life. For example, last month I met friends at a reunion and told them about my recent promotion and some changes in my routine, which led to a long conversation about our work lives.

× Yes, definitely when I was uh, very young, uh, I was taught to share uh, one of my toys to my little brother, although that we share the same uh uh, favorism in terms of toys, especially uh, toy cars and toy things. However, I would have to share with my little.

✓ Yes, definitely when I was very young, I was taught to share one of my toys with my little brother, although we had the same preferences for toys, especially toy cars. However, I had to share with him.

Multiple tense and wording problems: 'was taught' is correct past, but 'share one of my toys to' uses incorrect preposition (should be 'with') and 'we share' should be past 'we had' to match past context. 'favorism' is incorrect word; use 'preferences'. 'toy things' is redundant. 'would have to' is awkward; in past narrative use 'had to'. Suggest using consistent past tense and correct prepositions and clearer vocabulary. Suggested improvement: keep past tense throughout, use 'share ... with', replace 'favorism' with 'preferences', remove redundant words and use 'had to' for past obligation.

× When I grow up, I like to share information that is useful to another person. For example some knowledge about the company of my friend's interests. Umm, I remember last week I helped with my friends job interview by sharing some factual uh.

✓ When I grow up, I would like to share information that is useful to other people. For example, knowledge about companies related to my friends' interests. Last week I helped with my friend's job interview by sharing some factual information.

'When I grow up' sets a future context, so 'like' should be 'would like' (polite future intention). 'another person' is better as 'other people' for generality. 'company of my friend's interests' is unclear; corrected to 'companies related to my friends' interests' and possessive plural for multiple friends. 'friends job interview' needs apostrophe: 'friend's job interview'. Sentence ended abruptly; add 'information'. Maintain consistent tense and correct possessive and plurality. Suggested improvement: use 'would like' for future intentions, ensure possessives use apostrophes and pluralize 'friends' when appropriate.

× I believe not all private information is suitable to share to everyone. For example, umm, it will be not unsuitable for me to share my, uh, private habits with my girlfriend to uh, all of my friends because it's between me and my girlfriend.

✓ I believe not all private information is suitable to share with everyone. For example, it would be unsuitable for me to share my private habits with all of my friends because it's between me and my girlfriend.

Incorrect preposition: use 'share with' not 'share to'. Double negative 'will be not unsuitable' is confusing; use 'would be unsuitable'. Unnecessary filler words removed. Also 'with my girlfriend to all of my friends' misplaces 'to'; corrected to 'share my private habits with all of my friends'. Suggested improvement: use 'share with' and avoid double negatives; keep sentence concise.

× Yes, definitely. Last month my friend told me that he's attending a job interview in a major company which he interested in and it happens to me that I work in the same company and I share some uh, potential question and facts with him so.

✓ Last month my friend told me that he was attending a job interview at a major company he was interested in. It turned out that I worked at the same company, so I shared some potential questions and facts with him.

Tense inconsistency: report of past events should use past tense ('told me that he was attending'). 'Which he interested in' needs verb 'was interested in'. Use 'at a company' for preposition. 'It happens to me that I work' should be past 'It turned out that I worked'. 'I share' should be 'I shared'. 'Potential question' should be plural 'questions'. Keep past tense consistent. Suggested improvement: use past tense throughout when recounting past events and correct prepositions and plural forms.

× If I have a good news, I would, uh, first to share with my loved ones, uh, she have been always support me, uh, for, for a long period of time and I wish to express my gratitude to her by, umm, sharing my first, uh, good news to.

✓ If I have good news, I would first share it with my loved ones. She has always supported me for a long time, and I would like to express my gratitude to her by sharing the news with her first.

'A good news' is incorrect article usage; 'news' is uncountable so use 'good news' (no article). 'first to share' is incorrect word order; use 'first share it'. Pronoun and verb agreement: 'she have been always support me' should be 'she has always supported me'. 'sharing my first good news to' uses wrong preposition 'to'; use 'with'. Also include object 'it' for 'share it'. Suggested improvement: treat 'news' as uncountable, ensure subject-verb agreement for 'has supported', use correct pronouns and prepositions.

× I would usually share some recent news about me, uh, about career and, uh, daily life. For example, uh, last month, uh, I've reunion with my friends and I just share some of the information about.

✓ I usually share recent news about my career and daily life. For example, last month I had a reunion with my friends and I shared some information about myself.

Tense and form errors: 'I would usually' is awkward for habitual present; use 'I usually'. 'I've reunion' is incorrect; use 'I had a reunion' or 'I reunited with my friends'. 'I just share' should be past 'I shared' to match 'last month'. Add object 'about myself' to complete the sentence. Maintain consistent tense. Suggested improvement: use simple present for habitual actions, past simple for completed past events, and ensure verbs like 'reunion' are used correctly as noun 'had a reunion' or use verb 'reunited'.