Sharing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve grammar and clarity: use correct verb forms, articles, and plural/singular agreement; keep answer concise with one topic sentence and one or two supporting details. Use linking words like "because" or "so". Avoid repetition and redundant phrases.

Exemplo: Yes. My parents taught me to share when I was a child because they believed generosity is important. For example, they encouraged me to give food and clothes to neighbors in need, so I grew up valuing helping others.

Sugestão: Structure the response: start with a clear topic sentence naming items you like to share, then give a specific example with linking words (e.g., "for example", "because"). Correct tense and reduce repetition.

Exemplo: I like to share clothing and basic necessities with people in need. For example, when a classmate lost her home in primary school, my family and I donated extra clothes to her, and she was very grateful because she had nothing at that time.

Sugestão: Be direct and precise: state the category (personal items) and give one or two clear reasons using linking words like "because" and "for example". Fix article and word choice errors.

Exemplo: Personal and intimate items are not suitable for sharing because they affect privacy and hygiene. For example, underwear and toothbrushes should not be shared for health reasons.

Sugestão: Use correct tense and clear phrasing: answer directly whether you shared anything recently, then give a specific past example with reasons. Avoid unclear phrases like "undone share" and ensure verbs match subject.

Exemplo: I haven't shared anything with friends very recently because they already have what they need. However, a few months ago I donated a painting I received at work to help a friend who was facing financial difficulties.

Sugestão: Make a clear topic sentence naming the person, then give concise reasons with correct grammar. Avoid vague phrases and repetition. Use linking words like "because" and keep sentences to a maximum of five.

Exemplo: I would share good news with my parents because they have always encouraged and supported me. For instance, when I moved to Canada they kept motivating me to pursue my goals, so they are the first people I want to tell.

Sugestão: Clarify the type of news you share (personal achievements, celebrations) and give a specific example using past tense correctly. Use linking words like "because" and avoid repetition.

Exemplo: I usually share personal achievements and important life events with my friends because they are supportive. For example, a few years ago I told them when I became a Canadian citizen; they celebrated with me, and I later congratulated them when they gained citizenship too.

× Yes, my parents are generous person and they teach me a habit of of sharing the people that they need help.

✓ Yes, my parents are generous people and they taught me the habit of sharing with people who need help.

Errors: 'generous person' is singular while 'my parents' is plural (Singular and plural issue, ID 1). 'teach' should be past 'taught' because the teaching happened in the past (Past tense issue, ID 5). Duplicate 'of of' needs removal. 'sharing the people that they need help' is incorrect structure; use 'sharing with people who need help' (Incorrect use of prepositions and pronouns, ID 11 and 12). Suggestion: Match noun number to subject, use past tense for past events, remove duplicate words, and use 'sharing with people who need help.'

× Most importantly being generous is you can able to to give a helping hand to those in need.

✓ Most importantly, being generous means you can give a helping hand to those in need.

Errors: 'is you can able to to' is ungrammatical. Use 'means you can' to explain the idea. Remove duplicate 'to'. Use present modal 'can' (Modal verb usage, ID 4) without 'able'. Suggestion: Use 'means you can give' for clear, grammatical meaning.

× I remembered when I was in my primary school, one of my schoolmates lost her home.

✓ I remember when I was in primary school, one of my schoolmates lost her home.

Error: 'I remembered' is past tense but sentence describes a memory being recalled now; 'I remember' (present) or use 'I remember that' is more natural (Present tense issue, ID 6). Alternatively, if narrating past events, use 'I remembered that when I was in primary school...we had extra clothes' (Past tense, ID 5). Suggestion: Use 'I remember' when telling a remembered incident in conversation.

× And also that is the time that we have other extra clothes to to donate.

✓ That was also the time when we had extra clothes to donate.

Errors: Tense should be past 'was' and 'had' because event occurred in past (Past tense issue, ID 5). 'other extra' is redundant; use 'extra clothes'. Remove duplicate 'to'. Suggestion: Use concise phrasing: 'That was the time when we had extra clothes to donate.'

× And we give that away to my schoolmate that time and they're very happy and thankful to us because we're donating a bunch of clothes.

✓ We gave them to my schoolmate at that time and she was very happy and thankful because we were donating a bunch of clothes.

Errors: Tense should be past 'gave' and 'was' (Past tense issue, ID 5). 'that' referring to clothes should be plural 'them' (Pronoun error, ID 12). 'they're' unclear; use 'she' for one schoolmate. 'we're donating' should be past continuous 'we were donating' to match narrative. Suggestion: Keep past tense and match pronouns to their referents.

× I think the are specific things that you don't need to sure to or donate to a specific person.

✓ I think there are certain things that you shouldn't share or donate to other people.

Errors: 'the are' should be 'there are' (There be issue, ID 3). 'specific things' better 'certain things' (word choice). 'sure to' is incorrect; should be 'share' (Verb choice, ID 8). 'a specific person' vague; 'other people' clearer. Suggestion: Use 'there are certain things you shouldn't share or donate to others.'

× Specifically clothes that your personal items like your underwear because that is your privacy and you don't need to give it to the other people just in case you have health issues.

✓ Specifically, personal items like underwear are private and you don't need to give them to other people because of possible health issues.

Errors: Word order and article use: 'Specifically clothes that your personal items like your underwear' is ungrammatical (Sentence structure error, ID 26). 'underwear' plural reference uses 'them' not 'it' (Pronoun, ID 12). 'that is your privacy' should be 'are private' (Incorrect use of adjectives, ID 13). Suggestion: Say 'personal items like underwear are private; you shouldn't give them to others for health reasons.'

× I think that is the things that you don't need to share.

✓ I think those are the things you don't need to share.

Errors: 'that is the things' mixes singular verb with plural noun; use 'those are' (Singular and plural issue, ID 1 and Subject-verb agreement errors, ID 27). Remove unnecessary 'that'. Suggestion: Use 'those are the things you don't need to share.'

× I've recently undone share anything to my other friends because they have their own specific items as well.

✓ I haven't recently shared anything with my other friends because they have their own personal items as well.

Errors: 'I've recently undone share' is incorrect structure; use negative present perfect 'I haven't recently shared' (Present perfect tense issue, related to Past/Present tense, IDs 6 and 5). 'share anything to' should be 'shared anything with' (Incorrect use of prepositions, ID 11). 'specific' better as 'personal'. Suggestion: Use 'I haven't recently shared anything with my friends.'

× But I remember the the just few months ago I donated one of the painting from our workplace that was given to me because one of my friends needed help through financial so I give those.

✓ But I remember that just a few months ago I donated a painting from our workplace that had been given to me because one of my friends needed financial help, so I gave it to them.

Errors: Duplicate 'the the'. Tense: 'donated' is past, so use past perfect 'had been given' for earlier action (Verb in the past participle form, ID 9) or keep simple past for clarity. 'one of the painting' should be 'a painting' (Article errors, ID 22). 'needed help through financial' should be 'needed financial help' (word order). 'I give those' should be 'I gave it to them' (Past tense, pronoun agreement). Suggestion: Use clear past tense sequence and correct articles/pronouns.

× The first person I would like to share a good news from me is my parents because they were the one who encouraged and and pushed me off to keep going on what I'm aiming for.

✓ The first people I would like to share good news with are my parents because they were the ones who encouraged and pushed me to keep going after what I'm aiming for.

Errors: 'person' should be plural 'people' to match 'parents' (Singular and plural issue, ID 1). 'a good news' — 'news' is uncountable, drop 'a' (Article errors, ID 22). 'from me' unnecessary; use 'share good news with'. 'they were the one' should be 'they were the ones' (Agreement). 'pushed me off to keep going on' is incorrect; use 'pushed me to keep going after my goals' (Verb and preposition use). Suggestion: Use plural forms and correct collocations: 'share good news with my parents'.

× Most importantly, when I came here in Canada, they were the one that keep pursuing me to.

✓ Most importantly, when I came to Canada, they were the ones who kept encouraging me.

Errors: 'came here in Canada' should be 'came to Canada' (Incorrect use of prepositions, ID 11). 'they were the one' should be 'they were the ones' (Agreement, ID 1). 'keep pursuing me to' is ungrammatical; use 'kept encouraging me' (Past tense, ID 5). Suggestion: Use 'came to Canada' and 'kept encouraging me.'

× I had a member that a few years ago I shared the news all become a Canadian citizen to my friends and they were very supportive and happy to me because they know what I've been through in my ups and downs.

✓ A few years ago I shared the news that I had become a Canadian citizen with my friends, and they were very supportive and happy for me because they knew what I had been through in my ups and downs.

Errors: 'I had a member that' is meaningless — remove (Sentence structure error, ID 26). Word order: 'I shared the news all become a Canadian citizen to my friends' should be 'I shared the news that I had become a Canadian citizen with my friends' (There be and tense issues). Tense consistency: 'they know' should be past 'they knew' and 'I've been through' should be past perfect 'I had been through' to match narrative (Past tense issue, ID 5). Use 'happy for me' not 'happy to me' (Preposition use). Suggestion: Simplify to 'A few years ago I told my friends I had become a Canadian citizen; they were very supportive and happy for me.'

× They were there to support to my to my endeavor and also when they got also the citizenship I was I I did the same thing, clapping my hands to them.

✓ They were there to support my endeavor, and when they also got citizenship, I did the same, clapping my hands for them.

Errors: 'support to my to my endeavor' should be 'support my endeavor' (Remove extra 'to' and duplicate words) (Incorrect use of prepositions and repetition, IDs 11 and 26). 'when they got also the citizenship' -> 'when they also got citizenship' (word order). 'I was I I did' remove filler 'I was I I'. 'clapping my hands to them' should be 'clapping my hands for them' or 'applauding them' (Preposition use). Suggestion: Use concise phrasing and correct prepositions.