Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 回答提到了父亲送礼物，但把“自行车”说成了“包”，且原因部分意思不清。注意用过去时（had、gave），并使用自然表达，如“get a good mark in a maths test”和“give it to me as a gift”。先直接回答是否有自行车，再补充礼物的由来；控制在几句内。

Exemplo: Yes, I had a bike when I was about six. I got a really good mark in a maths test, so my father gave me a bike as a gift. I was thrilled because it was my first bike.

Sugestão: 开头立场明确，但后面“the bikes only...”没有表达完整，影响理解。建议用完整句说明自行车不普及的原因，并避免“always”这类过于绝对的词；可以补充一个具体对比，例如人们更常选择公交或出租车。

Exemplo: I don’t think bikes are very popular in my city. Many people prefer taking buses or taxis because they’re convenient for longer journeys. Bicycles are still useful for short trips, though.

× Yes, I have a bag when I was only several years old.

✓ Yes, I had a bag when I was only several years old.

这里描述的是童年时的情况，且从句使用了过去时“was”，主句也应使用过去时。应将“have”改为“had”。

× The reason why I have it just because I have got a very beautiful school in my math test and my father gave it as a gift for me.

✓ The reason why I had it was just because I got a very beautiful school in my math test and my father gave it as a gift for me.

这句话叙述的是过去发生的事情，因此“have it”应改为“had it”，“have got”应改为一般过去时“got”。注意，“a very beautiful school in my math test”虽然保留了原词，但意思不太清楚；修改时应确认你想表达的具体内容。

× The reason why I have it just because I have got a very beautiful school in my math test and my father gave it as a gift for me.

✓ The reason why I had it was just because I got a very beautiful school in my math test and my father gave it as a gift for me.

“The reason why...”后面的主句缺少系动词“was”，导致句子结构不完整。可使用“The reason why ... was ...”结构；也可以更简洁地说“The reason I had it was that ...”。

× ...my father gave it as a gift for me.

✓ ...my father gave it to me as a gift.

表示“把某物给某人”时，通常使用“give something to someone”。因此应将“for me”改为“to me”，并可将“as a gift”放在“to me”之后。