Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 質問に直接答えられていますが、「when I was a child」の繰り返しは避けましょう。「my father bought me the new bike」は「my father bought me a new bike」、「control the driving the bike」は「ride the bike」または「control the bike」と表現できます。また、最後の文は「最初は乗るのが難しかった」など、意味が明確になるようにまとめましょう。

Exemplo: Yes, I did. My father bought me a new bike when I was young, and I practised on it every day. It was difficult to ride at first, but I gradually became more confident.

Sugestão: 「many Japanese people using」は動詞が必要なので、「many Japanese people use」としましょう。また、「go to somewhere」は不自然なため、「get around more easily」や「get to places more easily」が適切です。自転車がどのような場面で人気なのか、通勤や買い物などの具体例を加えると、回答がより効果的になります。

Exemplo: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in Japan. Many people use them to commute or go shopping, especially in cities where distances are short. They’re convenient and help people get around more easily.

× Umm, when I was a child, my father bought me the new bike and I practiced so hard every single day.

✓ Umm, when I was a child, my father bought me a new bike and I practiced so hard every single day.

This is the first mention of the bike, so use the indefinite article a rather than the definite article the. Use the when referring to a bike that has already been identified.

× However, it was so hard to control the driving the bike for me.

✓ However, it was so hard for me to ride the bike.

The phrase control the driving the bike is not a grammatical construction. Use ride the bike to describe the action, and place for me after the adjective phrase so hard to express who found it difficult.

× Yes, many Japanese people using their bikes every single day and it helps people to go to somewhere more easily.

✓ Yes, many Japanese people use their bikes every single day, and it helps people to go somewhere more easily.

Using is a participle and cannot serve as the main verb here without an auxiliary verb. Use the simple present use to describe a regular habit.

× Yes, many Japanese people using their bikes every single day and it helps people to go to somewhere more easily.

✓ Yes, many Japanese people use their bikes every single day, and it helps people to go somewhere more easily.

Somewhere already functions as an adverb of place, so it does not take the preposition to. Say go somewhere, not go to somewhere.