Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 先直接回答，然后用清楚、准确的时间表达说明你什么时候有自行车，并解释原因。不要把“six”和“twelve”连在一起；“far distant”不自然，可以说“far from my home”。尽量减少填充词，并用完整句子连接细节。

Exemplo: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was about ten, while I was in primary school. My school was quite far from home, so riding there was convenient.

Sugestão: 注意主谓一致：可以说“Bikes are quite popular”。补充说明时要用完整句子，并使用准确的词组：“rush hour”表示上下班高峰，“traffic congestion”表示交通拥堵。可以具体说明电动自行车为什么受欢迎。

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially electric bikes. Many people use them during rush hour because they are convenient and can help them avoid traffic congestion. They are also a practical choice for short trips.

× I had a mm-hm bike when I was six twelve years old in uh junior school.

✓ I had a bike when I was between six and twelve years old, in junior school.

“six twelve years old”不是正确的年龄表达，导致句子结构不完整、意思不清。表达年龄范围时，可以说“between six and twelve years old”或“from six to twelve years old”。

× My school is far distant.

✓ My school was far away.

这段话是在回忆小时候的情况，因此描述当时学校的位置时，应用一般过去时“was”，而不是一般现在时“is”。此外，“far away”是更自然的距离表达。

× Yeah, it's quite popular in my country. The bike, uh, especially the electric bikes.

✓ Yeah, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially electric bikes.

这里是在泛指自行车这一类事物，应使用复数“bikes”。原句先用单数“it”和“the bike”，后面又用复数“electric bikes”，单复数不一致。

× The bike, uh, especially the electric bikes.

✓ Bikes are popular, especially electric bikes.

原句只有名词短语，没有完整的谓语，不能独立构成完整句子。补上谓语“are popular”后，句子结构完整。

× Um particularly in the raw shower or when we meet the congestion.

✓ Um, particularly during rush hour or when we encounter congestion.

如果这里想表达“高峰时段”，通常说“during rush hour”，而不是“in the rush hour”。表示遇到交通拥堵时，“when we encounter congestion”是更自然的表达。