Part 1
Examinador
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Candidato
No, not really. I didn't have a bag when I was a child because when I was a child I just don't know how to ride a bike.
Examinador
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Candidato
I think bikes are really popular in my country. I was I'm a college student that every corner of my college environment or just my d- my community, there are a lot of shared bikes and many students had their own bikes.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Pontuação: 38.0Sugestão: 回答开头直接回应了问题,但“bag”与自行车无关,容易让考官困惑;如果你想表达“没有自行车”,应说“a bike”。后半句可用过去时“didn’t know”,并避免重复“when I was a child”。建议用一到两句说明原因。
Exemplo: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because I didn’t know how to ride one.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Pontuação: 55.0Sugestão: 观点明确,也提供了共享单车和大学生拥有自行车的具体例子。需要减少“I was / I'm”和“d-”等犹豫或重复表达;“I was a college student that...”句式不正确,可改为“when I was in college”或“around my college”。描述现在的普遍情况时,注意使用一般现在时,例如“students have”。
Exemplo: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. When I was in college, there were shared bikes all around campus, and many students also had their own bikes.
× I didn't have a bag when I was a child because when I was a child I just don't know how to ride a bike.
✓ I didn't have a bag when I was a child because when I was a child, I just didn't know how to ride a bike.
句子描述的是童年时期的情况,应该使用过去时。前半句用了 didn't,后面的 don't 也应改为 didn't,使时态保持一致。
× I was I'm a college student that every corner of my college environment or just my d- my community, there are a lot of shared bikes and many students had their own bikes.
✓ As a college student, I think bikes are really popular in my country. There are a lot of shared bikes around my college and in my community, and many students have their own bikes.
原句中的“I was I'm”是未完成的自我修正,“that”也无法正确连接后面的内容,导致句子结构混乱。可以用“As a college student”引出身份,再用完整句子说明共享单车和学生拥有自行车的情况。
× I was I'm a college student that every corner of my college environment or just my d- my community, there are a lot of shared bikes and many students had their own bikes.
✓ As a college student, I think bikes are really popular in my country. There are a lot of shared bikes around my college and in my community, and many students have their own bikes.
这里是在描述目前普遍存在的情况,因此应使用现在时。原句的“had”是过去时,应改为“have”。