Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 先直接回答是否有自行车，再按时间顺序说明何时得到以及原因。注意使用过去时，例如“got”“was”和“had”；“ride a bike before 10 years old”不自然，可改为“started riding a bike when I was around ten”。不要用“as”和“therefore”在同一句中重复表达因果；“a necessary tool”前要加冠词。

Exemplo: Yes, I did, although I got my first bike when I was about ten. I started junior high school around that time, and the school was quite far from my home. My parents helped me buy a bike, which made my daily commute much easier.

Sugestão: 开头直接表明自行车是否受欢迎，并进一步说明具体人群和原因。“without a lot of money and legal age to use motorcycle”表达不清，可改为“because they are affordable and people do not need a licence”；注意“motorcycle”前的冠词以及“commute”的拼写。用“Also”或“because”连接补充信息，并明确“it”指代自行车。

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. They are affordable, and unlike motorcycles, they do not require a licence. Many students ride them to school every day, especially in smaller towns.

× I really ride a bike before 10 years old after I went to the junior high school, as the distance is long between my home and school, therefore a bike is necessary tool for me to commute.

✓ I first rode a bike after I started junior high school, before I was 10. Because the distance between my home and school was long, a bike was a necessary tool for my commute.

这段话描述的是过去的经历，因此一般过去时 ride 应改为 rode，is 应改为 was。表示“10岁之前”应说 before I was 10 或 before the age of 10，不能说 before 10 years old。junior high school 泛指“上初中”时通常不加 the。原句同时使用 as 和 therefore 表示因果，结构重复；改成 Because 引导原因状语从句即可。另外，tool 是可数名词单数，前面需要加冠词 a。

× With my parents' help, I finally have my first bike in my life..

✓ With my parents' help, I finally got my first bike.

句子讲述的是过去得到第一辆自行车的经历，因此 have 应改为一般过去时 got。finally got my first bike 已能表达“终于有了我的第一辆自行车”，不需要再加 in my life。

× Bikes are one of the most common vehicles in my country, without a lot of money and legal age to use motorcycle.

✓ Bikes are one of the most common vehicles in my country because they are affordable and people do not need to be old enough to ride a motorcycle.

原句中逗号后面的 without a lot of money and legal age to use motorcycle 不能与前面的主句正确衔接，句子结构不完整。可以用 because 引出自行车受欢迎的原因，并补出完整的主谓结构。另外，motorcycle 是可数名词单数，前面需要加 a。

× Young students are the largest group to ride it to communes every day.

✓ Young students are the largest group of people who ride bikes for their daily commutes.

前文的 bikes 是复数，后面不能用单数代词 it 指代；改用 bikes 可避免单复数指代不一致。这里用 ride bikes for their daily commutes 表达“骑自行车通勤”，搭配也更自然。