Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 先直接回答是否有自行车，再补充一两个具体细节。注意时态：讲童年经历可用过去时，例如“my parents gave me”；表达习惯可用“on weekends”。“relax myself”应改为“help me relax”，“through in writing it”应改为“while riding it”。避免重复表达“bike”和“for me”，并控制句子长度。

Exemplo: Yes, I did. My parents gave me a bike for my birthday when I was a child, and I used to ride it on weekends. It was a fun way to relax and get some exercise.

Sugestão: 回答观点后，用清晰、具体的原因支持观点。将“send their children to school throwing”改为“drive their children to school”，将“go to work through different transportation”改为“commute by other means of transport”。最后一句重复且意思不清，可以删除，或改为说明哪些人会骑车、为何骑车。使用“because”和“for example”等连接表达，并避免重复。

Exemplo: Not as much as in some other countries. Many parents drive their children to school, and adults often commute by car or public transport. However, bikes are still popular among people who want an inexpensive way to exercise.

× my parents have sent me a bike as a birthday gift for me

✓ my parents gave me a bike as a birthday gift

这里说的是童年时已经发生的事情，应使用一般过去时“gave”，而不是现在完成时“have sent”。“as a birthday gift”已经表达了礼物是送给说话者的，因此不需要再加“for me”。

× I usually ride a bike during the weekend

✓ I usually rode a bike on weekends

问题询问的是童年经历，因此描述当时通常做的事情应使用一般过去时“rode”。表达“每逢周末”通常说“on weekends”。

× during the weekend

✓ on weekends

泛指每个周末时，通常使用介词“on”，说“on weekends”。“during the weekend”更常指某一个特定周末期间。

× this can relax myself

✓ this can relax me

“relax”后面需要用宾格代词作宾语。这里“me”是动作的承受者；“myself”是反身代词，只有在主语和宾语指同一个人时才使用。

× this can relax myself to a very large extent and makes me much healthier and happier

✓ this can relax me to a very large extent and make me much healthier and happier

情态动词“can”后面的并列动词都要使用动词原形，因此应说“can relax ... and make”，不能在“and”后使用第三人称形式“makes”。

× through in writing it

✓ by riding it

“through”后面不能再接介词“in”。表达“通过骑车”可以用“by riding it”；“by”后面的动词应使用“-ing”形式。

× many parents send their children to school throwing, uh, driving cars

✓ many parents send their children to school by car

表达乘坐某种交通工具时，常用“by + 交通工具”，因此应说“by car”。“throwing”看起来是口语中的自我修正或填充词，不应保留在完整句子中。

× they always go to work through different transportation

✓ they always go to work by different means of transportation

“through”不适合在这里表示交通方式。可以说“by different means of transportation”，意思是“通过不同的交通方式”。

× some people who like riding back riding back mostly have the bikes

✓ some people who like riding back riding back mostly have bikes

这里泛指人们拥有的自行车，应使用复数名词“bikes”，不需要定冠词“the”。“the bikes”通常指说话双方都知道的特定几辆自行车。