Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: You answer the question directly and include a personal detail about your grandfather, which makes the response engaging. However, the answer is a little long and contains several ideas joined together without enough pauses or linking. Divide it into shorter sentences and use clearer transitions, such as “Once I became more confident” and “Later on.”

Exemplo: Yes, I did. My grandfather gave me a bike with training wheels when I was little. Once I became more confident, we took the training wheels off, and I rode it for a while. Later on, I got a bigger bike.

Sugestão: You provide a reason and a relevant example, but “rarely popular” conflicts with the point that many people use bikes for transport. Clarify whether bikes are widely used for commuting or popular as a leisure activity. Also, “socio-economically divided” is unclear here; explain the connection more precisely, and use a natural phrase such as “to get to work.”

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are quite popular in some parts of my country, especially in smaller towns. Many people use them to get to work because they are an affordable and convenient way to travel. However, cycling for leisure may be less common in wealthier areas, where people often rely on cars.

× I had one with training wheels first that was given to me by my grandfather and when I got a little better at riding by myself we got the training wheels removed and I rode that for a while then we got another one.

✓ I had one with training wheels at first, which my grandfather gave me. When I got a little better at riding by myself, we had the training wheels removed. I rode that bike for a while, and then we got another one.

The original sentence joins several complete ideas without enough punctuation, making it a run-on sentence. Separate the ideas into shorter sentences, and use a comma after the introductory clause 'When I got a little better at riding by myself.'