Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Answer directly using the past tense: “Yes, I did.” Then explain when you had the bike and whether you enjoyed riding it. Use clear, complete sentences and check phrases such as “when I was a child” and “one of my hobbies.”

Exemplo: Yes, I did. I had a bike when I was about six or seven years old. I really enjoyed riding it, and cycling was one of my favourite hobbies. I don’t ride much now.

Sugestão: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with a specific detail. Your answer seems to say that cycling is not very popular overall, although some teenagers cycle in summer; make that contrast clear. Avoid fillers and use natural phrases such as “ride bikes” or “go cycling.”

Exemplo: I wouldn’t say bikes are very popular in my country. However, in Astana, some teenagers enjoy cycling during the summer. I think the weather makes it a more enjoyable activity then.

× Yes, I have a bike on my childhood, my dad's boat.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was my dad's.

The question asks about the past, so use had rather than have. The correction uses when I was a child to express the time clearly. The final phrase is interpreted as saying the bike belonged to the student's dad.

× Yes, I have a bike on my childhood, my dad's boat.

✓ Yes, I had a bike in my childhood. It was my dad's.

Use in, not on, before childhood. A more natural way to express the same time is when I was a child.

× It's when I was 6 or 7 and now no and when I was Childs.

✓ I got it when I was six or seven, but I don't have it now.

The original combines incomplete and repeated phrases, so the relationship between getting the bike and not having it now is unclear. Use a complete clause for each idea and connect them with but.

× It's when I was 6 or 7 and now no and when I was Childs.

✓ I got it when I was six or seven, when I was a child, but I don't have it now.

Childs is not the correct plural form, and the sentence refers to the student as one child. Use a child; in this context, when I was a child is the natural phrasing.

× I like Ricci clean, that's one of the my hobbies.

✓ I like cycling; it's one of my hobbies.

Do not use the before a possessive determiner such as my. Say one of my hobbies, not one of the my hobbies. The unclear activity is interpreted as cycling based on the context.

× Actually, I think no, because in Astana bike is one of them, but hobbies, but umm, the many teenagers, uh, have like, uh, like bicycling on the actually in the summer, I think it's have one person.

✓ Actually, I don't think bikes are very popular in Astana. Many teenagers like cycling in the summer, but I think only a few people do it.

The original contains several incomplete and repeated phrases, which make the meaning difficult to follow. Use complete sentences and organize the ideas clearly. The correction preserves the apparent meaning while removing the disfluencies.

× Actually, I think no, because in Astana bike is one of them, but hobbies, but umm, the many teenagers, uh, have like, uh, like bicycling on the actually in the summer, I think it's have one person.

✓ Actually, I don't think bikes are very popular in Astana. Many teenagers like cycling in the summer, but I think only a few people do it.

Do not use the before the general plural noun phrase many teenagers. Use many teenagers, without the, when speaking about teenagers in general.