Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: You answer the question directly and give a personal detail, but there are several false starts and repetitions ("when I have a ch-" and "with the with that bicycle"). Use a clear past-tense opening and avoid repeating the same idea. You could add one specific detail about where or how you rode the bike.

Exemplo: Yes, I had a beautiful pink bike when I was a child. I used to ride it around our neighborhood, and I especially enjoyed going out with my friends after school.

Sugestão: You make a relevant comparison between children and adults, but the answer is unfinished and contains many fillers and a repeated word ("it it"). Complete your main point, then support it with a specific example or reason. Use a linking phrase such as "Recently, however" to show the contrast clearly.

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are popular among children, although fewer adults used to ride them regularly. Recently, however, more adults have started cycling, especially in cities where it is a convenient way to commute and avoid traffic.

× Yes, when I have a ch- uh when I was a child I used to have a beautiful pink bike.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I used to have a beautiful pink bike.

The phrase when I have begins in the present tense, but the speaker is describing childhood in the past. Use the past-tense form had if completing that false start, or omit it as in the corrected sentence. In spontaneous speech, try to pause and restart the sentence cleanly when you change your wording.