Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Answer directly, then give one or two clear supporting details. Your description of the purple bike is relevant, but the final thought is incomplete, and repeated fillers such as “umm” make the response less fluent. Finish the idea with what you achieved or how you felt, and use the natural phrase “as a child” rather than “in my childhood.”

Exemplo: Yes, I had a purple bike as a child, and it was one of my favorite possessions. I was excited to learn how to ride it, and after a lot of practice, I finally managed to ride on my own.

Sugestão: Give a clear answer first and explain your reason in a complete sentence. The response has many fillers, an awkward phrase (“my perspective”), and an unfinished explanation. Avoid repeating yourself, and be precise about the restriction you mean; only mention a legal rule if you are sure it is accurate. You could also explain whether bikes are popular among other groups or in particular areas.

Exemplo: No, I don’t think bikes are very popular where I live. In some areas, social restrictions make it difficult for women to ride, so fewer people use bikes for everyday transport. However, cycling may be more common in places with safer roads and better facilities.

× After a lot of effort, I finally.

✓ After a lot of effort, I finally learned how to ride it.

The sentence ends with finally, but does not include the action that was eventually completed. Add a verb phrase, such as learned how to ride it, to finish the thought.

× Uh, my perspective, no,

✓ Uh, from my perspective, no,

Perspective normally takes the preposition from when introducing an opinion. Say from my perspective, not my perspective.

× because for example, in my country, uh, women are not allowed, uh, due to umm, or are not allowed to uh, ride a bike according to the laws and so.

✓ For example, in my country, women are not allowed to ride bikes under the law.

The original sentence contains an unfinished due to phrase and repeats are not allowed in a way that leaves the sentence structure unclear. State the example in one complete clause. Use a phrase such as under the law to explain the restriction.