Part 1
Examinador
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Candidato
Uh yes, when I was a child I had a bike with two assistant wheel on the side and I received it as a a birthday gift when I was like 5 or 6.
Examinador
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Candidato
Uh, yes, uh, bikes are very popular in our country. Whether it's a, a form of transportation or uh, form of exercise. Many people would uh, cycle into their work or ride a bicycle after, uh, around, around the lake.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Pontuação: 68.0Sugestão: 回答直接,也提供了自行车的特点和收到它的时间,内容具体。注意使用复数形式“training wheels”,而不是“assistant wheel”;避免重复冠词“a a”。“when I was about five or six”比“when I was like 5 or 6”更自然。减少句首填充词,并可用“and”或“because”让信息衔接更顺畅。
Exemplo: Yes, I did. I had a little bike with training wheels, which I received as a birthday present when I was about five or six.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Pontuação: 58.0Sugestão: 你表达了自行车受欢迎的观点,也提到了通勤和锻炼两种用途。不过,“Whether it's...”在这里是句子片段,应与主句连接,例如“because they are used for both... and...”。“cycle into their work”不自然,可改为“cycle to work”;“ride a bicycle after around the lake”也不完整,可说“ride around the lake after work”。减少重复和填充词,并让例子表达完整、清晰。
Exemplo: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because people use them both for transport and for exercise. For example, many people cycle to work, while others enjoy riding around a lake in the evening.
× Uh yes, when I was a child I had a bike with two assistant wheel on the side and I received it as a a birthday gift when I was like 5 or 6.
✓ Uh, yes. When I was a child, I had a bike with two training wheels on the sides, and I received it as a birthday gift when I was about five or six.
“two”后面应接可数名词复数,因此“wheel”应改为“wheels”。“training wheels”是“辅助轮”的常用说法;“assistant wheel”不是这里合适的表达。建议看到数字 two 时检查后面的可数名词是否使用复数形式。
× Uh yes, when I was a child I had a bike with two assistant wheel on the side and I received it as a a birthday gift when I was like 5 or 6.
✓ Uh, yes. When I was a child, I had a bike with two training wheels on the sides, and I received it as a birthday gift when I was about five or six.
“a a birthday gift”重复使用了不定冠词,保留一个“a”即可,因为“birthday gift”是单数可数名词。说完冠词后应直接接名词,不要重复冠词。
× Whether it's a, a form of transportation or uh, form of exercise.
✓ Bikes are very popular in our country, whether they are used as a form of transportation or as a form of exercise.
“Whether...”引导的部分在这里没有独立主句,因此原句是句子片段。应将它连接到完整主句“Bikes are very popular in our country”,并用“whether they are used...”表达两种用途。
× Whether it's a, a form of transportation or uh, form of exercise.
✓ Bikes are very popular in our country, whether they are used as a form of transportation or as a form of exercise.
“form”是单数可数名词,前面需要冠词“a”。原句在“form of exercise”前缺少冠词。建议检查单数可数名词,确认前面有适当的限定词,例如“a”或“the”。
× Many people would uh, cycle into their work or ride a bicycle after, uh, around, around the lake.
✓ Many people would cycle to work or ride a bicycle around the lake.
表示骑车去上班时,通常说“cycle to work”,而不是“cycle into their work”。“work”在这个固定表达中不需要物主代词“their”。建议记住常见搭配“go to work”或“cycle to work”。