Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Answer directly, then describe the bike and explain why the memory matters. Correct the unclear or inaccurate phrases: say “a small red bike,” “a surprise gift,” and “learned to ride,” rather than “fake gift,” “red bite,” and “learning to write.” Also use the past tense consistently: “It made me feel independent.”

Exemplo: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small red bike with training wheels, and my parents gave it to me as a surprise. I felt proud when I learned to ride it on my own because it made me feel more independent.

Sugestão: State your opinion clearly at the beginning and give one or two specific reasons. Replace unclear phrases such as “For my expensive,” “popular mechanic,” and “in the load” with natural expressions like “In my opinion,” “a popular way to get around,” and “on the road.” Avoid fillers, and use correct grammar: “a lot of accidents happen” and “it can cause accidents.”

Exemplo: In my opinion, bikes aren’t very popular in my country, especially in busy cities. There’s a lot of traffic, and many people worry about having an accident while cycling on the road. As a result, they often choose public transport or drive instead.

× It was small red bite with training wheels and I was so proud of it the first time I managed to ride it without following.

✓ It was a small red bite with training wheels, and I was so proud of it the first time I managed to ride it without following.

A singular countable noun such as bite needs an article. Add a before the adjective phrase small red. The comma before and separates the two independent clauses. This correction addresses grammar only; bite may be a word-choice error, which is outside the listed grammar types.

× It make me feel independent.

✓ It makes me feel independent.

In the present simple, a verb takes -s when its subject is he, she, or it. Add -s to make because the subject is it.

× For my expensive it's not a very popular mechanic because of the traffic and the a lot of accidents happen in my county and they don't want to umm ride a bike in the load because sometimes it still create a accident.

✓ For my expensive, it's not a very popular mechanic because of the traffic and the many accidents that happen in my county, and they don't want to umm ride a bike in the load because sometimes it still create a accident.

The phrase because of should be followed by a noun phrase, not a complete clause. The original joins because of the traffic with the clause the a lot of accidents happen, creating a faulty structure. Use a parallel noun phrase, such as the many accidents that happen. The correction addresses this structural issue only; other wording in the sentence may be ungrammatical or unclear and is not corrected here.

× For my expensive it's not a very popular mechanic because of the traffic and the a lot of accidents happen in my county and they don't want to umm ride a bike in the load because sometimes it still create a accident.

✓ For my expensive it's not a very popular mechanic because of the traffic and the a lot of accidents happen in my county and they don't want to umm ride a bike in the load because sometimes it still creates a accident.

In the present simple, the verb needs -s when its subject is it. Change create to creates to agree with it.

× For my expensive it's not a very popular mechanic because of the traffic and the a lot of accidents happen in my county and they don't want to umm ride a bike in the load because sometimes it still create a accident.

✓ For my expensive it's not a very popular mechanic because of the traffic and the a lot of accidents happen in my county and they don't want to umm ride a bike in the load because sometimes it still create an accident.

Use an before a word that begins with a vowel sound. Accident begins with a vowel sound, so a accident should be an accident.