Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Сразу ответьте на вопрос и используйте прошедшее время, поскольку речь идёт о детстве: “I had…”, “I rode…”. Уточните, что вы катались до десяти лет, например, “until I was ten”. Замените неестественное “right around the park” на “around the park”, а “moreover” — на более разговорное “I often rode it with my friends”. Старайтесь убрать паузы и уложиться в два-три связанных предложения.

Exemplo: Yes, I had a black bike when I was a child. I used to ride it around the park, and I often went cycling with my friends. I rode it until I was about ten.

Sugestão: Дайте ясный ответ и подкрепите его конкретным наблюдением. Избегайте противоречивого утверждения, что у каждого есть велосипед, даже если он им не пользуется; лучше скажите, что велосипеды распространены или что многие семьи владеют ими. Используйте естественную связку “For example” и сократите повторы и заполнители пауз. Вместо “in every on everyone” скажите “many people” или “most families in my area”.

Exemplo: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. In my neighborhood, many people own one, especially families with children. Some people use their bikes for exercise, while others keep them for occasional trips.

× Well, yes, I have a bike.

✓ Well, yes, I had a bike.

The question asks about a time in the past, so use the past-tense form had rather than have.

× I rode it until 10 years.

✓ I rode it until I was 10 years old.

Until needs a clear time expression here. Say until I was 10 years old to show the age when you stopped riding the bike.

× Moreover, we ride this bike with my friends.

✓ Moreover, we rode this bike with my friends.

The answer describes childhood in the past, so ride should be changed to its past-tense form rode.

× Nowadays, in every on everyone has a bike if either they are not used, but they have.

✓ Nowadays, everyone has a bike, even if they do not use it.

The original contains an incomplete and disorganized sentence: in every on does not form a grammatical phrase, and but they have has no clear object. Use a complete clause and remove the unnecessary words.

× Everyone has a bike if either they are not used, but they have.

✓ Everyone has a bike, even if they do not use it.

If either is not the appropriate conjunction in this context. Use even if to express that people own a bike despite not using it.