Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Answer the question directly at the beginning and organize the response with a clear sequence: answer, background, and feeling. Correct the unclear phrase “our curiosity” to “out of curiosity” or “with some practice,” and replace “I could write” with “I could ride.” Although “amazing” is understandable, a more specific description, such as “a bright-red bicycle,” would make the answer more vivid. Use a linking word such as “However” to connect the difficulty with your successful learning.

Exemplo: Yes, I did. When I was six, my parents bought me a bright-red bicycle that I had always wanted. At first, I didn’t know how to ride it, but after practicing for about an hour, I managed to do it. I felt incredibly proud of myself.

Sugestão: Give a direct answer before adding details. The vocabulary is varied, but “two-wheelers” and “ubiquitous” sound overly formal for IELTS Speaking Part 1; “bicycles are very common” would be more natural. Correct “commuting to school or park” to “commuting to school or going to parks,” and use a plural pronoun in “because they are.” Add a specific example, such as students riding bikes to school, to make the supporting details more effective.

Exemplo: Yes, definitely. Bicycles are very common in my country, especially among students and teenagers. Many students ride them to school or to nearby parks because bikes are affordable, convenient, and environmentally friendly. For example, I often see groups of teenagers cycling together after school.

× yes, when I was six years old, my parents bought me an amazing bike that I had always wanted. Even though I didn't know how to ride it at first, our curiosity I managed to learn and practice after just an hour and I felt incredibly proud of myself and I could write

✓ Yes, when I was six years old, my parents bought me an amazing bike that I had always wanted. Even though I didn't know how to ride it at first, out of curiosity, I managed to learn and practice after just an hour. I felt incredibly proud of myself because I could ride it.

The phrase our curiosity I managed is not arranged as a grammatical clause. The sentence should use the adverbial phrase out of curiosity before the subject and verb. The original sentence also joins too many complete ideas with and, so it is clearer to separate them into shorter sentences. Ride is the appropriate verb in the final clause because the topic is riding a bike.

× As far as I'm concerned, two wheelers are extremely ubiquitous in my country, especially among students and teenagers. We can easily encounter them commuting to school or park by bicycle because it's low cost, highly convenient and environmentally friendly.

✓ As far as I'm concerned, two-wheelers are extremely ubiquitous in my country, especially among students and teenagers. We can easily encounter them commuting to school or the park by bicycle because it is low-cost, highly convenient, and environmentally friendly.

The singular countable noun park needs a determiner in this context, so the park is required. The article the indicates a specific destination. Low-cost is written with a hyphen when it functions as a compound adjective before a noun or describes something as a fixed quality.