Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 질문에 직접 답하고 경험도 구체적으로 설명했으며, ‘Though’와 ‘since’를 사용해 문장을 연결한 점은 좋습니다. 하지만 ‘when I was a pupil’은 다소 부자연스러우므로 ‘when I was a child’ 또는 ‘when I was in primary school’이 더 적절합니다. 또한 ‘my prowess was significantly poor’와 ‘resplendent’는 자전거 타기 경험에 어울리지 않는 지나치게 격식적인 표현입니다. ‘I wasn’t very good at riding’과 ‘looked great’처럼 자연스럽고 정확한 표현을 사용하세요. 다섯 문장으로 답해 길이 기준은 충족했지만, 핵심 내용을 더 간결하게 구성하면 더욱 효과적입니다.

Exemplo: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but I rarely rode it because I wasn’t very good at balancing. My father tried to teach me, but I kept falling off. In the end, I gave the bike to a friend, which I regret because it was quite expensive and looked great.

Sugestão: 자전거의 인기에 대한 의견을 먼저 제시하고 학업 부담과 비용이라는 두 가지 이유를 든 점은 좋습니다. 그러나 ‘fractional’은 ‘인기가 낮다’는 의미로 자연스럽지 않으므로 ‘limited’ 또는 ‘not very high’를 사용해야 합니다. ‘students are suffering from high academic pressure’는 가능하지만, 국가 전체의 자전거 인기를 설명하기에는 범위가 좁으므로 ‘many people prefer cars or public transport’와 같은 더 직접적인 이유를 추가하세요. ‘the expenditure of bikes is keep mounting’은 문법적으로 틀렸으며 ‘the cost of bikes keeps rising’이 정확합니다. 마지막으로, ‘As a consequence’보다 ‘As a result’를 사용하면 자연스럽고, 자전거가 인기 있는 집단이나 상황을 간단히 언급하면 답변의 균형과 구체성이 향상됩니다.

Exemplo: I don’t think bikes are extremely popular in my country. Many students are busy with schoolwork, and most adults prefer cars or public transport for commuting. In addition, the cost of bikes keeps rising, so some parents cannot afford to buy one for their children. However, bikes are becoming more popular among people who want to exercise.

× In addition, the expenditure of bikes is keep mounting.

✓ In addition, the cost of bikes keeps mounting.

The subject cost is singular, so the verb must be keeps, not keep, in the present simple tense. The preposition on is normally used with expenditure or spending, but cost of bikes is more natural in this sentence.

× In addition, the expenditure of bikes is keep mounting.

✓ In addition, the cost of bikes keeps mounting.

The phrase expenditure of bikes is not the correct prepositional combination because bikes are not the expenditure itself. Use expenditure on bikes, or use the more natural expression cost of bikes. Also, keeps is required because the subject cost is singular.