Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Answer directly and use more natural grammar. Say “I was given” or “my father gave me” instead of “I gifted from my father,” and use the past tense consistently: “loved” rather than “love.” Avoid the unnecessary phrase “a kind of a cycle,” since “a bicycle” is clearer. You can add one specific detail about how you used it, while keeping the answer to three or four sentences.

Exemplo: I didn’t have a regular bike, but my father gave me a bicycle when I was a child. I rode it almost every day, especially around my neighborhood. I loved it so much that I still keep it at home.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence and avoid repetition. Use the plural subject and pronouns correctly: “Bikes are popular,” “most young people have bikes,” and “they use them.” Replace “go to colleges” with “go to school or college,” and add a specific reason, such as affordability or convenience. Avoid fillers such as “yeah” and do not repeat the idea that bikes are commonly used.

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among young people. Many students use them to travel to school or college because they are affordable and convenient. They are also common in smaller towns, where traffic is usually less serious.

× I didn't have a bike but I had a kind of a cycle which I really love the most.

✓ I didn't have a bike, but I had a kind of cycle which I really love the most.

After the expression 'a kind of,' we normally use a noun without another indefinite article. Therefore, 'a kind of a cycle' should be 'a kind of cycle.'

× I didn't have a bike but I had a kind of a cycle which I really love the most.

✓ I didn't have a bike, but I had a kind of a cycle which I really loved the most.

The student is describing a bicycle from childhood, so the verb in the relative clause should be in the past tense: 'love' becomes 'loved.'

× When I gifted from my father I started to use the cycle almost every day and I love that even now I still have it in my home.

✓ When it was given to me by my father, I started to use the cycle almost every day, and I love it because I still have it at home.

The original passive construction is incomplete because 'gifted' needs an object. The correct passive structure is 'it was given to me by my father.'

× When I gifted from my father I started to use the cycle almost every day and I love that even now I still have it in my home.

✓ When it was given to me by my father, I started to use the cycle almost every day, and I love it because I still have it at home.

Use the object pronoun 'it' to refer to the cycle. 'That' is not the appropriate pronoun in this context.

× Yeah, it is popular.

✓ Yeah, they are popular.

The noun 'bikes' is plural, so it should be replaced by the plural pronoun 'they,' not the singular pronoun 'it.' The verb must also agree with the plural subject: 'are.'

× Most of the young people they have bikes at home and they use it to go to school and to colleges and yeah, bikes are more often used by people.

✓ Most of the young people have bikes at home, and they use them to go to school and college. Bikes are commonly used by people.

The sentence has a redundant subject because both 'Most of the young people' and 'they' are used as the subject of the same clause. Removing 'they' creates a clearer sentence structure. Separating the ideas into two sentences also prevents a run-on sentence.

× Most of the young people they have bikes at home and they use it to go to school and to colleges and yeah, bikes are more often used by people.

✓ Most of the young people have bikes at home, and they use them to go to school and college. Bikes are commonly used by people.

The pronoun must agree with the plural noun 'bikes.' Therefore, use 'them' instead of 'it.'

× Most of the young people they have bikes at home and they use it to go to school and to colleges and yeah, bikes are more often used by people.

✓ Most of the young people have bikes at home, and they use them to go to school and college. Bikes are commonly used by people.

When referring to the general activity of attending college, 'college' is normally used as an uncountable institution-related noun. Therefore, 'to colleges' should be 'to college' in this context.