Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is direct, well-developed, and within the five-sentence limit. However, “asked my dad a lot” is slightly unnatural; say “often asked my dad” instead. Also, “get involved in a car accident or an accident in general” is repetitive and imprecise. Use a more natural expression such as “be involved in a traffic accident” and add a specific result or feeling to make the answer more engaging.

Exemplo: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. I often asked my dad to buy me one, but he refused because he was worried that I might be involved in a traffic accident. I was disappointed at the time because many of my friends cycled around the neighborhood.

Sugestão: You answer the question directly and provide a relevant explanation, but the second sentence is too long and contains awkward grammar. “Fits with different ages” should be “are suitable for different age groups,” and “if their parents are able to afford it” could be expressed more naturally as “as long as their parents can afford one.” Separate the ideas with a linking word such as “Moreover” and mention a specific reason why bikes are popular.

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially among children. Almost every child has one as long as their parents can afford it. Moreover, bicycles are available in different sizes, so they are suitable for children of various age groups. They are also a convenient and inexpensive way for children to get around.

× Almost every child here has one if their parents are able to afford it and also they come in different sizes and fits with different ages as well.

✓ Almost every child here has one if their parents are able to afford it. Bikes also come in different sizes and fit people of different ages.

The subject they refers to bikes, which is plural, so the verb must be fit, not fits. The original sentence also joins two complete ideas awkwardly with and also. Separating the ideas makes the sentence clearer. Use fit people of different ages instead of fits with different ages because fit should be followed by the person or group that the item is suitable for.