Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Use the past tense consistently: say “I had” instead of “I do have,” “was” instead of “is,” and “I loved” instead of “I’m in love.” Begin with a direct answer, then add one or two specific details. Avoid repetition such as “Everything, everything,” and use a linking word such as “because” or “also” to connect your ideas naturally.

Exemplo: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was pink because pink was my favorite color at the time, and I wanted almost everything I owned to be pink. I used to ride it around my neighborhood after school.

Sugestão: Answer more directly and use natural phrasing: say “Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in Hong Kong” rather than “I think yes.” Replace “some share bike company” with “several bike-sharing companies” and avoid repeating “company.” Also, explain the reason more clearly by mentioning convenience or specific users, and use a smoother structure instead of switching from “we” to “you.”

Exemplo: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in Hong Kong, especially among young people and tourists. Several bike-sharing companies allow people to rent a bicycle easily, which is convenient for short trips. However, cycling can be difficult in some busy urban areas because of the heavy traffic.

× I do have a bike when I was a child.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child.

The time expression when I was a child refers to the past, so the verb should be in the past tense. Use had instead of do have.

× My first bike is pink.

✓ My first bike was pink.

The speaker is describing a bike from her childhood, so the past-tense form was is more appropriate than the present-tense form is.

× When I was a little girl, I'm so in love with pink.

✓ When I was a little girl, I was so in love with pink.

Because the clause begins with when I was a little girl, the situation belongs to the past. Therefore, am must change to was.

× Everything that I want is pink.

✓ Everything that I wanted was pink.

The speaker is talking about her preferences during childhood. Both want and is should be changed to the past tense: wanted and was.

× We have some share bike company.

✓ We have some bike-sharing companies.

Some is used with plural countable nouns, so company must be companies. Bike-sharing is the standard compound adjective for companies that provide shared bicycles.

× We can just rent a bike from a company, then you can use it.

✓ We can just rent a bike from a company, and then we can use it.

The subject changes incorrectly from we to you. Keep the pronoun consistent by using we because the speaker is describing what people in Hong Kong can do together or generally.

× We can just rent a bike from a company, then you can use it.

✓ We can just rent a bike from a company, and then we can use it.

Two independent clauses are joined only by a comma. Add the conjunction and to connect them correctly and make the sequence of actions clear.